Guest Story by Beth

Eyes Closed

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Excellent, very classy and stimulating... The only other things I will say is that you are a very articulate person, and that using the term "Pussy" in chapter one cheapens it a bit. Also no need for for the disclaimer about how he would never force himself on her. It is a love story/fantasy leave the leagal mumbo jumbo to lawyers. On a more personal note, the feeling that I get from it all is LOVE, it reminds me of my ex-wife not the people/actions but the expressed feelings, it is all about "The One" Thank you

Anonymous

I'll go over it and take a close look at your suggestion. It's unusual for someone to give me such an in-depth critique and I appreciate that ^_^ Yeah, I know the word 'pussy' did kind of throw it, I didnt' like it either, but I was stuck for polite and other ideas for it, I'll try and edit that. I'm glad you enjoyed it, and the reason I put up the fact that he'd never force himself on her was actually because I got a message that someone didn't like it, so I figured I'd change it. I don't want to give the impression that this was forced, because it wasn't. Really. So... hence my hesitation. -Beth



Brilliant simply brilliant, i read alot but this must be the best piece of literature i've read plz if u can write more when possible i would love it

Byron

Passed on to Beth for comment. -Beth



I WANNA FUCK RIGHT NOW!

anonymous

Well then stop typing and hop into bed with someone! -Beth



the story is awesome and i have read part 2 also

anonymous

Glad to know you liked them so much! That's why I write! -Beth



i love the person u r..

anonymous

Aww, thanks ^_^ -Beth



Beth So far this story has left me believing that Alex is a real slut that somehoe remained a virgin 'till college. To bad she didn't attend my college! The story is very exciting and well written (I'll leave it to the present college generation as to how realistic). But I thoroughly enjoyed it.

Hank

Glad to know you liked it! I am not too sure it's realistic or logical, but I liked the idea and so I ran with it. -Beth



Best sex story ever. Keep it up story teller :D.

anonymous

Wow! Thank you, I am so glad you liked it! I am certainly glad to know you enjoy the story. -Beth



fantastic made me very horny can't wait to read the next part.

Anonymous

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Ooooh, the perfect fantasy to dream about during a boring class...

Krista

XD Yeah, I wrote it while at work, so I suppose it's almost the same thing, eh? Glad to hear you are putting that class time to good use! ^_~ -Beth



It is great I read the second part and look forward to the third part.

anonymous

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nice.very nice......with fanticies like this you'll never need a man.......Damm......that was hot Allan fuzzy logic....that's my way of thinking

Allan

Hehe, well I have one and am quite enamored of him. At any rate, I am glad you liked it, ^.^ -Beth



So far it has been a very sexually exciting story. I have really enjoyed it.

Hank

Thank you ^_^ I am glad you enjoyed it. I hope you enjoy my future works as much. -Beth



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anonymous

No offense, but next time have the balls to tell me why you think it sucked, eh? *Smacks commenter upside the head* -Beth



Mmmmm, that was wonderful!

Rapunzel

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Wow! A 10! Thank you ^_^ -Beth



The story is imaginative and well-written.

anonymous

Well thanks ^^ I know your whole comment wasn't posted here so I am replying to the whole thing (anyone reading this don't get confuzzed). I know about the reality of safety in sex and I am actually EXTREMELY monogamous. I have been with only two people- and both of them were men I had been with for a goodly long time before we even considered sex. My writing might be racy, but my reality is actually relatively tame insofar as number of people goes. Getting a 6-7 on a Nobel scale is more than I would anticipate and I appreciate your kind feedback, it is a pleasure, as always, to have someone give me constructive criticism. ^_^ Ciao! -Beth



This is a good sexy story but not very believable. The fact that she never knew it was Alex is, in my mind, impossible to believable to believe knowing her very strict past sexual practices - but it makes for a good story.

anonymous

Well, the girl *is* Alex, so I am sure she knew it was herself. But you may have your own opinion. I didn't really write it to be 'realistic' perhaps, I wrote it for fun. And I am glad you enjoyed it ^_^ -Beth



Wow. Very arousing. Hope there is more to this one LOL.

Dezzy

There is~ Just not yet. -Beth



Ooooohhh... very hot! Me like! Any chance of us reading about their second meeting soon?

Emeraldas

Website

I am glad you like ^^ -Beth



This was soooo HOT!! I fantasy about it happening to me

sunedaz

Well thank you, I really appreciate it ^_^ -Beth



Write more now!

Anonymous

I just did and sent it to Gentle... It needs some editing, but I think its passable. -Beth



It was rude, chuckle.... But other than that it was wonderful and very nice to read. Thanks Gentle..

anonymous

Rude? Yes, both ways! -Beth



Will this be a series? I hope so, else there is not much point to it.

Hook

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Fabulous Story Beth. *smiles* More Please.

anonymous

I am definitely going to write more, this was an experiment, originally... I am surprised at the unexpected feedback, thank you ^_^ -Beth



I really like it. So much in fact that I want to hear more about the couple.

Spunky

As I replied to another comment a little earlier on the list, with the feedback I am getting I intend to! -Beth



I loved this one

anonymous

Oh, I feel all special now! -Beth



very nice

anonymous

Oh, alright, Gentle, I will write more for you, ^_~ -Beth



do go one with the story.

anonymous

Oh? Well with the feedback as I have been getting I might just do that for you, it might take me a while though. Thanks for the encouragement. -Beth



(MF)

Being the only goth in her high school had gotten her no small amount of attention from the boys.

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Alex had always been a good girl.

Gotten high grades in school and was now doing well in college. The only thing her parents had never liked much was the way she dressed. And in college she hadn't tamed any. Being the only goth in her high school had gotten her no small amount of attention from the boys. The short skirts with fishnet stockings and low cut shirts that threatened to open and spill her small but perfectly formed breasts out into the air. But that never happened in school- she hadn't found the right one.

His name was Jeff. He was a bad boy- having run with a rough crowd in high school and now in college. He liked to test himself. They played games, they teased and tortured each other. He and his friends that is... he was always looking for something to push him closer, closer to the edge. The first time he saw Alex he knew, however, that she was going to be his one way or another. Of course he never took a woman against her will- but... well if she didn't bend to his will he would make her want him.

Class was boring, for both of them, and at break Alex slipped outside for a cigarette and felt a pair of hands on her shoulders. Before she was able to react, Jeff had sunk his teeth into her neck. Not too hard- he didn't want to scare her. Against her own will Alex moaned, her back arching against him as his hands slid down her body, finding the smooth curves that were so sweetly announced by the tight tank top she'd worn. Beneath the thin shirt he could feel the boning of a corset, a sensation that made him shiver with desire.

Teeth still fastened on her neck, he let his hands play across her form, one raising to cup a taut breast, fingers teasing the hardening nipple through the fabric that separated flesh from flesh.

"Who... who are you?" Alex managed to croak.

"Shh... keep your eyes closed," he whispered into her ear, releasing her throat.

He took that same ear into his mouth, tongue sliding behind it as teeth scraped against the skin. The questing hands slid beneath her shirt, finding the absence of a bra yet another sensual little surprise that caused goosebumps to break out on his skin. One hand left her breasts to fish about in his pocket. There it was. The black silk blindfold was removed and quickly tied around her head, covering her eyes so she could not see a thing.

"Follow me, into the night..." Jeff whispered, the words hanging in the evening air as he slid around her and took her hand- pulling her with him.

As if in a trance, Alex followed, feet faltering as she stumbled occasionally on steps or stones- always finding herself against a firmly muscled chest. Who was this stranger that had inflamed her so? After a few moments of walking she was picked up and carried, then soon set down on a soft surface she assumed was a bed of some kind.

"Might I gaze upon the face of he who has kidnapped me thus?" She asked, a finger hooking beneath the black material. A hand stopped her, taking her wrist and raising it over her head where it was securely fastened- soon followed by the other. Both feet were tied to the other corners of the bed so she lay spread-eagled. Not uncomfortably, but she felt rather exposed.

Out of her view, Jeff smiled. Lifting her shirt above her breasts and tucking it there, he lowered his mouth to one nipple, hesitating for a moment before letting his tongue flick out and taste the flesh untouched by any other. Alex whimpered satisfyingly and he took her breast into his mouth- tongue circling the taut flesh and her writhing beneath him as unknown sensations coursed through her. Jeff's hands took their time wandering over her body and finding all the little places that caused her to draw breath.

Alex was unable to even think about how wrong this was- it felt so right. She'd never been touched by another person other than her doctor before, and she wondered why she'd waited. The restraints on her wrists and ankles were sexy- and not uncomfortable. Fingers closed around her other breast, massaging the skin and teasing the nipple, which had tightened into a firm little peak.

Jeff was indulging himself now- he'd never had a virgin before and by her reactions she was indeed one. Her moans and panting were delicious and he couldn't get enough of the noises she was making. He removed his hand from her breast, fingers caressing her body as they slid down to the junction of her thighs, raising the skirt as he brushed her crotch. She cried out in shock and pleasure, writhing so hard he thought that she would break his bed. Well, she would if he hadn't reinforced it. You see, he'd been planning this for a while and had taken great care to make sure that nothing went wrong.

His hand continued to massage her pussy through her underwear, testing her reaction before he pulled it aside. He never once released her breast, though he did switch from one to the other once- so that the other didn't feel left out.

Fingers of his hand caressed the opening to the most female part of her body, feeling the wetness cover his fingertips as he did so. One finger slowly slid inside and met her resistance, he didn't push further yet. He wanted to take his time.

She wiggled and whimpered and he released the breast, sliding down to let his tongue take the place of his fingers against the skin of her pussy.

She was sweet- so sweet- and he almost couldn't contain himself any longer. He fumbled with the buttons on his shirt as he took it off- tongue not leaving the wetness at the juncture of her thighs. She writhed and screamed her pleasure, back arching against him and hips undulating wildly.

Working to divest himself of his clothing, he managed to do so without error. Now free hands slid against her inner thighs and held her hips in place while he forced her to the edge and then over as her body bucked and shivered.

"God... G..God!!!" She breathed, sweat sheening her body as she lay panting on the bed.



"I am not finished with you yet, Alex," Jeff whispered. Sliding up, he placed the head of his painfully hard cock in her dripping passage, gently sliding his hips forward. God she was tight... She whimpered and he reached up, undoing the restraints for her wrists, allowing her to wrap her arms around him. "This might hurt a little at first... but it won't last long. I promise."

At that Jeff rocked forward and slid all of him into her. He wasn't so large as to hurt her, but he filled her completely. Sitting for a second like that while her body adjusted to him, he buried his face in her neck, arms wrapping around her. Hands grabbed her shoulders and he slid most of the way out and then back in- still slowly as she whimpered, biting her lip. He continued to move until the whimpers became moans and at that point he gave in, driving himself deeper and deeper into her with hard, strong strokes. She whimpered, she cried out, she screamed in ecstasy as she clutched him tightly to her, body shaking with the power of the sensations he was eliciting.

When he came, she followed, sweating and panting and they lay together in the bed, hearts racing.

"Who are you?" Alex managed, and Jeff smiled.

"I am keeping that a secret. Just be outside your dorm tomorrow after class and I will come get you. You will know it's me, I promise...

Please note that the next part of this story (Eyes Closed Part 2 - Blindfolded) is available here

 

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