You're great -
Alien's
Gift
was one of the first erotic stories I
read, and it raised my expectations for what erotic stories should be.
J.j. 13 July 2005
Hi, I just read the
Witchcraft
For Hire
currently at MCstories. I quite
enjoyed it, though I sometimes lost track of which character was who.
My fave subplot is that of Mike and Jade. I LOVE the idea of her
knowing what's happening. Every guy has had the fantasy of that really
hot but icy, snooty woman we once knew finally being in our hands.
As you're revamping the story may I suggest more about that relationship
or some similar? I enjoy when the MC target resists the MC initially.
BTW, I've been re-reading
The Agency
.
It doesn't lose anything after the first reading, not at all. I'm consistently
impressed by your best.
Best, Geoffrey,
20 Jun 2005
Hello, i've read
Gina's
Interview
just now. what a wondeful
story you've created.
Danny, 17 Jun
2005
Great Stories! Bounteous thanks to you
for your amazingly engaging erotic stories. I greatly enjoy your
stories, but I have a few suggestions which I hope would improve (1) the
readability of the stories, and (2) your acceptance as a mainstream author.
You probably have seen the on-line laundry list of author's suggestions,
but I will try to focus on a few more important notions. Please put
your date and publication date in each separate story, part, or chapter
that you publish. Especially when we save such for off-line reading,
such practice assures your proper credit for the work. The dates
help, also, particularly as I wonder whether a suggestion I'd make is for
a practice that you have long since changed. Lately reading,
Witchcraft
for Hire
(yummy story!) I've seen some repetitive
no-no's. Using a period immediately behind a quote mark, as in "Tabitha...
I realize you've grown into a very beautiful witch and I'm not surprised
that you have an equally healthy appetite, but we have strict rules regarding
mortals and one of those rules doesn't allow you to corrupt them".
If confused, put the period (or ? or !) before the quote mark. You
will almost never go wrong that way, as I cannot think of a situation where
such would not be proper.
Gemskis, 5
Jun 2005
Hi, regarding the story "
What
would you wish for
" I was wondering
which was the NEW revised version. The one on your website or the
one on mcstories.com I honestly can't tell and the epilogues TRULY
show the difference between them. However their both so well written
(but yet differently) that I can't tell which is the "update" version.
They both have 2003 copyrights on them too. LOVED the story by the
way!
LM, 28 May 2005
You know, I play a few play by email games
based off your
Master PC
stories and I got to thinking about how hard it was to find other writers
interested in writing on going stories...anyway I just thought that maybe
you could create a section of your website where people could post requests
for other writers to help play out these stories. Just an idea. Thanks!
Jim,
17 May 2005
I've read a lot of Fictionmania stories,but
this one (
Sorcerer's Curse
)
is clearly the best! I'm starting into a few of your other stories,
but I keep coming back to this one! If I might be so bold, I think
you should consider revisiting this story! 3 suggestions: [1] A prequel
about how Danielle got the curse and how it affected previous boyfriends
like Carl/Carla. [2] A chapter covering the 2 years it took Chris
to adjust to his new body and how Jeanie Seavers broke "his" cherry.
I'd also like to know how they handled Chris' disappearance and what happened
to his money. {3} A sequel covering the relationship between Christina
and Stephanie. Finally, I've read both the Fictionmania and ASSTR
versions of this story. Both have subtle differances which fascinate me!
You really should consider a definitive version which puts all the dialogue
together!
Charles, 19 Apr 2005
Mr Parz, I have to tell you that I have enjoyed
not only YOUR stories of
"Master PC"
,
but also quite a few other authors with the same ideas... I don't
know just how you "Got online", or what your background is, and I really
don't know how "They" got here, either... MY only problem with the
whole idea of getting a "program" (An '.exe' type of file...) in
an email... EVEN from a *Friend* (much less a STRANGER...!) makes
me wonder *WHY* I would download it in the first place. I will concede
that some of the stories I liked, and some I didn't...! BUT... *IF*
it was *POSSIBLE*, how would YOU convince ME to download it, and try it
AT ALL...? Even if I was your "Bestest" friend in the world...?
Seems to me that all the people who get this "Master PC" program will download
ANYTHING... And to me that ain't quite right... "Mind Control" is
one thing... (Yes, you could use "Master PC" to MAKE me download
it...) "Sex" and "Power" aren't the ONLY things that make a good
story, my friend... (I 'DO' have my moments of "Lucidity"...
LOL) A *Truly* loving partner can make all the difference in the
world... And it doesn't take "Master PC" to accomplish it.
Thank you for listening to my little rant, Sir...
Joe,
10 Apr 2005
Regarding
Awakening
New Desires
. Just Too Hot! Thanks.
GemSki,
9 Apr 2005
I first read
Cassandra
- Vampiress
years ago and then
Master
PC
. Both are my two favorites in erotic
works. Formula SBF-37 is of the same quality.
Michael
O., 4 Apr 2005
Hi, I've been reading on your site and following
its links a while now, so I figured I should e-mail you and let you how
great I think your site is. I've been checking out some of the book
reviews too. I read "The Book of Common Dread" about 10 years ago and agree
with your high rating. The scene where DeVilbiss seduces Frederika is gold.
I've been reading some of the Master PC stories too. One complaint
I'm sure you'll share is the real shortage of decent MC in films. Hopefully
that will change at some point. I had a question or 2 about one of
those Russ Martin books for you, if you have time. Anyway, keep up
the great work.
G, 3 Mar 2005
Sir - I am a soldier stationed in Iraq for
the next year or so. Like many other soldiers, we have taken to the
internet to use during out rare but eventual downtime periods. It
was during one of these times that I came across your website. Let
me tell you, I love it! I have begun visiting this site a few times
a week and I read about 4 stories each time. The reason I'm writing
is to tell you that there is someone who does not believe that there is
no market for erotic movies ... and I was sad to read the emails from Rolfe
Kanefsky stating that. As a fan of his erotic genre (along with Alain
Siritzky, I love it when they work together), I believe I own all of his
DVDs that have been released of that type. Perhaps one day, your
movie "
Ring Of Desire
"
will finally turned into a more visual media piece ... along with other
stories of yours (the Master PC series is just screaming to be done).
By the way, is there any way that I can get to read the story for Ring
Of Desire? Just wondering. Anyway, I just wanted to say that
I fully support your website and your work. I've even made a donation
to your website because I enjoy it so. Keep up the excellent work
and take care!
Genesis, 24 Feb 2005
Dear JR, Finally got around to reading
Master
PC
and the follow up. I takes me bowler
hat off to you sir, fine stuff. Are you still interested in submissions
for it? I may have something in a few weeks, I have already being
planning it but the Master PC Universe seems an ideal home. It will be
set in a UK University campus - and the working title is Master PC: The
University of Life, unless this encroaches on anything you have planned.
Best wishes, and remember MC rules :)
Yotna
El'toub, 20 Feb 2005
Hello, my name is Donald. I read your
story and was curious, have you tried SBF-37? I got the same junk
mail today and I remembered reading your story.
Donald,
17 Feb 2005
OK took a look at your
"Witchcraft
for Hire"
and here's my feedback...in a different
context, maybe there's something here you can use.... I think you
have all the same basics that I have (grammar, structure, spelling), and
while your taste in stories is similar to mine (but not as good (!)), it's
probably close enough to say you're in the same place as me. So my
stupid feedback on the Witchcraft story is... Too much initial backstory
& explanation made me start skipping, by the time I get to the agency
there's more characters than I'm ready to handle (having skipped), and
I still don't know what the story's about. Then there's some sex,
but what happend to your advice about explaining what's going on in girl's
head's (as far as those sex scenes).
So... by now the stage (% progress through
the story) is set for a purely mechanical look at the rest of the story.
I mean, I (the reader) am not there, down inside the story with you.
You didn't ask for advice, but here's mine: Take another shot at
the story. Forget any backstory and start telling it right at the
point (or a little after) the subject of the story comes into play (i.e.
converting women) and try telling it from ONLY the do-er's or do-ee's perspective
(in first or third PPOV). See how it comes out. If it seems
difficult, scale back the scope that you are going to (e.g. from like a
grand, takeovertheworld conspiracy story to just one takeover/conversion).
As far as I can tell if you get some following for a story after capturing
their interest, they're more willing to go back and fill in blanks/expand
scope in later chapters. Later,
Erstwhile
Ether, Writer, 23 Jan 2005
Hello JR! I started reading Code Name
Dominoe - Daughter of Desire
, after being
warned that it could be read as a stand-alone chapter, but that you highly
recommended that one should start from the beginning and continue on throughout
this exciting on-going saga. Actually, I did not expect it to be this well
written and exciting (by the way you now have another fan and I will be
reading all that you write). Now, I find, before I continue, I must
read the preceding chapter. This story is great, but I need the background
of it's predecessor to really appreciate what you intended for your readers.
Please forgive me for being so stup...lets say inexperienced. I can't
find it. This story was under "Erotic Mind-Control - ff." Could you
please help me find whatever preceded this? Sorry, I'm a novice reader.
Thanks in advance for any help.
Len,
7 Jan 2005
After complimenting the author of "The Blue
Djinn, Succubii Sisters, and a Genie named Jeannie", the author wrote back:
Thank you for your positive comments on my work! I have visited
your web page and enjoyed many stories there. I would be honored
to have my story included there in your Hall of Fame.
Krellscholar,
3 Jan 2005
CRAVINGS (from BE Story Club)
- that story was fucking awsome, i mean seriously, make a sequel and plz
send it to me!!! it was great, I loved the story line, reminds me
of one of those japaneise anime things!! WOW,
Brian,
3 Jan 2005
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