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"I have read your most recent masterpiece of a story (Young Sorceress) and absolutely loved it.  It is definitely one of the greater ones on the site.  You're a damn good author and I encourage you to keep up with your good work!  You probably know what you're doing, but a suggestion about a "Part 2" would be to have the Sorcerer find a spell to break the curse and all of Laura's artifically induced emotions would escape her, and then proceeds to get revenge.  Whatever you do, you've got my support and encouragement!"  Kemp, 30 Mar 2001


"i love Veronica Doll... AKA Barbie and Young Sorceress .  I have been a fan of yours for two years.  You are the king of erotic stories.  Im looking forward to the sequal to Veronica Doll... AKA Barbie.  thanks for the great stories."  Bman, 29 March 2001


"Hi!  I kind of liked the story (Young Sorceress) , but I would like to have seen Laura come up with a way to turn the tables on Serena.  I know given how it was written it might seem impossible, but I just don't think that it should end on a kind of a sour note like that.  In any event, I would like to see more of your wonderful writing.  Keep up the good work!"  Sincerely, Kelvin, 28 Mar 2001


Subject: veronica doll... A great story but the opening lines about Wellington being in Australia is so wrong I felt I should point it out to you. Its the capital city of New Zealand and has never been any were near Melbourne a land locked city with no Harbour Thank you again for some great storys  Regards." Vickers, 27 Mar 2001


Hi I read the 'Young Sorceress' at mcstories. I like most of your stories so I was expecting some thing a bit more enjoyable. The NC element is quite off putting. Could you possibly write a sequel in which Laura gets her revenge on Serena turning the tables and becomes her mistress as well. regards." King Kong, 27 Mar 2001


JR, Well done!  Young Sorceress is a super story!  KUDOS.  I saw that you are working on another.  Keep up the super work.  A great ending - I thought that you would enslave the aunt tho...Did you ever consider that?"
jdw, 26 Mar 2001


This is just to say that I enjoyed your latest story (Young Sorceress) .  I especially liked the idea of Serena using Laura to avoid having to use her own magic and thus making her not liable to her own curse.  I can't see the Sorcerer and Laura's aunt giving up, not to mention Danielle's family. Sequel, please?" Fast Frank, 26 Mar 2001


Dear Sir, First, let me say that I am a big fan of your work, especially the MasterPC line. On almost every occasion, you continue to out-do yourself, except for this one (Young Sorceress) . I gotta tell ya, considering the way this story ended, I was very disappointed to see no mention of a Part 2. I know, opinions are like assholes, everybody's got one, but in my honest opinion as a long-time reader of your body of work, I think Laura really needs to be able to find a way to break this curse and strap Serena over a barrel. I liked the Sorcerer himself, and for him to be so powerless is not accurate. Don't think any less of me and don't assume that I'm clinically insane for saying this, but I myself have studied and practiced various forms of witchcraft and spellcasting for several years now. Although nothing like what you described in this story can actually happen, one constant is that everything can be reversed and corrected. There is no "perfect" spell or curse. I think you should find a way for the Sorcerer to eliminate the mental portion of the curse, but let Laura keep her body and Danielle if she truly chooses to. Then, it's bloody vengeance time on Serena. I would probably write this story myself, but as much as I get some really good ideas, I fail miserably in the execution. I hope you accept this criticism and this idea, but if you do not, that's is your call. You're the professional in this case. Thank you for your time.  Sincerely,
Slade, 26 Mar 2001


Hi!  I found the story (Young Sorceress) pretty nice - thanks  Keep on good work! Ulrike, 25 Mar 2001


Young Sorceress: JRParz found some more time and was in a writing mood.  I may just be in some kind of odd phasing with his work, but--while I sometimes find different motivations he says he didn't intend to put in--this time, though he was doing something more playful, I saw this as having some very dark overtones. The betrayal by one character, the helplessness of the victim's support network, the final roping-in of what had looked like someone who'd gotten to walk--all this is great from my perspective, just an intriguing contrast with the almost WB flavor of the setting and characters.  - The end pairing of  slaves--which JR's MCers like to do, whether from kindness or just a desire for a quiet harem--seemed more than usually  predatory. (Again, liked that.)
Trilby else, 25 Mar 2001


JR Parz returns with YOUNG SORCERESS . Now, since JR and I share a number of kinks I got something out of this but I would have been happier if the story had flowed more or had a clearer focus. I'm not sure what it was about it precisely or where the narrative was centred. A clearer idea of how magic was working and what the rules were would have been nice too. I enjoyed the sexual ideas but would have preferred if the reason the heroine got trapped was clearer.  Boris Ludmenkov, Writer, 24 Mar 2001

" The buffy story (Buffy's New Reality) kicks ass.  thanks." sofia, 23 Mar 2001


"Hello, again. I've just finished reading the first two sections of Master PC . I don't understand why you permitted Samantha to completely remove Adam's sexual functionality. She could have left him able to service Heather, but nobody else. I think Adam and Heather deserve each other. Apart from the downer of an ending, the story was, I thought, up to your usual standard.  I do have one question, though. Just to be nosey. Are you male or female? Just curious. Great Writing", Clive Rockel, 6 Mar 2001


"I came across your stories, and I'm finding them very nice.  I was wondering why some of them are posted imcomplete?  The first one.  Alien's Gift (1 of 6)  stops, just as it got good.  Do you know if you can do anything?  If there is other records, or copys of it I could read, to get the full story?"    Tal, 27 Feb 2001

"When it comes to BE as well as mc stories, I look for believability in the use of what are obviously psuedo-sciences. Parz is, time and time again, a master in that realm of the genres. And he proved it again in 'Pleasure Chips' .   Also, the story is lots of fun. It merits a sequel as they get into the slave trade."
Mothman, 24 Feb 2001


"I have for a long time wanted to write and thank you for the stories you have written and the time you take to run this site.  I have been a regular at your site, although have seldom written. What got me off the dime was how much I enjoyed your last story, Veronica Doll .  Really well done.  I wish I could sing its praises as eloquently as trilby or for that matter the praises of many of your other stories like sex jeinie,wishcraft, alien gift and many others but unlike you and the other authors I have trouble writing down on paper what's running around in my head. So I will put it simply THANK YOU for all you do." A fan, 24 Feb 2001


"hi   just wanted to say i love the whole agency collection of stories .  are you planning to add new chapters to it soon?"  k, 24 Feb 2001

"hello...i'm lauren   i am a trophy fem for a lipstick lez.
please continue with your (Veronica Doll aka Barbie) story."
lauren, 21 Feb 2001


"Hi JRParz.  I just want to tell you, that I really enjoyed your new story (Veronica Doll aka Barbie) . Please keep up your good work. Bye", Oliver, 20 Feb 2001


"Hi, I've read a some of your stories regarding ' The Agency ', the ones that I've read are as follows: The Agency's Early Years chapter one and two , and The Agency, Chapter One - Recruitment Practices,Chapter Two - Roommates and Chapter Three - Ties that Bind , I loved them, do you by any chance have any more? Have you published them? Thanks in advance for your reply." Atle, Norway, 20 Feb 2001


"Your story, Master PC is one of my favorites because it deals with mind control. The idea of total control appeals to me. Now the reason I am emailing you is, I plan to write a M.C. story of my own. This story will have some ideas which, you could say that I stole from you, but it wont be an exact duplicate of your work. I plan to "borrow" certain ideas from a couple other favorites along with some originals and incorporate them together into my ultimate fantasy. Now I ask your permission to use those ideas so that no one will be mad at me for plagiarism. I will be asking permission of the other authors at the same time. If any of you say no then I will still write it but it will never be published, I will keep it for my own private viewing pleasures, if I am allowed then I will publish them on mcstories.com and storiesonline.net, perhaps I might publish it on literotica.com. These and asstr-mirror.org are the only free adult literature sites that I know of. I will put your names and or stories down as a reference. I hope that you will agree with my plea. sincerely."  G8Ball, 20 Feb 2001


"Hey JR, Big fan.  I've been visiting your site for a while now and I've read many of the stories that appear here as well as on mcstories.com... I've been writing screenplays for over 5 years.  I've written all sorts of genres and 6 of my scripts have already been copywritten and registered with the Writer's Guild of America.  I've even had producers look at my work.  As of now, the only thing that has held me back is laziness and getting an Agent.  Once I ditch the laziness and find myself an Agent, I can finally start putting my scripts to work.  I'm writing you because my latest script deals heavily with the themes on your site.  You can almost call it the bible of bimbofication." Dennis, Screenwriter, 17 Feb 2001


"OK. I have read ' The Agency '. I think, personally, that it bears much resemblance to the way the Agency is described in ' The Agency's Early Years '. Most importantly because the method of control seems to have changed. Plus there seem to be a few other discrepancies. In particular the method of boob enhancement.  I would like to see how you get around the OSO investigation. Just for interest, mind you.  On the whole, I like your style of writing, and these stories in particular. They are good reads."  Clive Graham Rockell, 17 Feb 2001


"Greetings from New Zealand. I have just finished reading 'The Agency's Early Years' , which I assume is yet to be completed. I quite like the story, thus far. The ideas you have used here are very interesting, to say the least. I am just about to read 'The Agency', and will contact you with my thoughts when I have done so." Clive Graham Rockell, 17 Feb 2001


"Dear Mr. JR Parz.  (How would you pronounce that anyway?)  I am a sort of fan of your site.  A frequent visitor anyhow.  I really enjoy your site, actually, and am a fan of several of your stories.  But I can't say that I like the way that you finished the Charmed Trilogy .  Anyway, you know how you have a picture of Katherine Heigl and Jessica Alba on your "What's New" page?  Well, I came across a picture archive site, that had much similar, but also more diverse pictures.  Of both actresses and others.  So I'm sending you a picture or two of Jessica Biel, from 7th Heaven.  It might make a good addition, if you are even adding to your site anymore."  annonymous, 14 Fenruary 2001

" Veronica Doll was great! I remember reading her original comment in your reader's write section a long time ago, and I almost wrote a story myself. I've always thought that was a great concept, a living Barbie Doll to be enslaved. I'd be interested to know what she thought of it. The VR scenes were incredible.  I liked that part with the poodle. :) Also I like the list of lessons they endured, especially 'giggling.'  Very funny. Loved it all. Great writing!"  Trent Wolf, Writer, 14 February 2001


"I love your Agency stories and thought I'd just drop you a note of encouragement. Keep on writing, you have the touch." Lefaye, 14 February 2001


"Top of the list this week is J.R.Parz's cheerful sociopathy in VERONICA DOLL .  I'm not at all sure where he can go that's up from what's in this one but I'm looking forward to finding out."
Boris Ludmenkov, 13 February 2001


"First of all, I enjoy many of your stories. Alien's Gift was awesome.  Tempest and the Twins was great, could have used more sexual descriptions (especially Stephanie & Lisa) but it was a great read.  I enjoy the Master PC Universe as well.  "Veronica Doll aka Barbie" sounds like it could be your best yet!  Please keep the story going!"  Torrie, 13 February 2001


MC Forum Review on "Veronica Doll aka Barbie"   JRParz is a prolific and fun author. His work is loved by many. This story uses many of his stronger elements in what amounts to one very hot story (I use the word hot a lot). I could not really enjoy this story because I kept wondering where Wellington Bay is in Melbourne. Melbourne is my home town and I have never heard of it. I even looked in the Melways. Is it a boutique bay that is left off the maps, or does he perhaps mean Westernport Bay or some other bay along the coast?  For anyone not from Melbourne, then you'll really enjoy this story."
PretentionPlus, 12 February 2001


MC Forum Review on " Veronica Doll aka Barbie"   JRParz credits an e-mail correspondent with the inspiration for this: interesting person. He finds his customary balance of nice heroines in trouble and a smug MCer even nastier than his usual kind. Keeping sight of his arousal goal, he makes the girls' bitter struggle against their enslavement hotter by detailing how it's happening to them. I like gloating-villain exposition when it works, and it does here." Trilby else, Writer, 12 February 2001


"Interesting story (Veronica Doll aka Barbie) so far--but I was kind of expecting a real-life story of how she became a submissive Barbie doll.  This seems to fall into the category of, "I've got a great idea for a story--could you write it for me?"   These are usually proposed to noted professional authors with the notion that if it's a hit, they'll split the proceeds 50/50.   Most professional authors scorn these offers, but since there are little (if any) proceeds to split in MC fiction, I suppose it doesn't hurt to accommodate them if the author wishes.  What I wonder, though, is why she didn't try to write the story herself, at least for her own sake.  In Douglas Adams'  "The Long, Dark Tea-Time of the Soul"  there's a line spoken by the god Thor about the relationship between gods and humans  ". . .You made us to be what you would not dare to be yourselves. . ."  I think that's the way many people feel about performers--they invest a lot of their own dreams and ambitions in the talents and accomplishments of others, and forget about accomplishing anything for themselves.  Yes, there are a lot better stories on the EMCSA than mine, written  by better authors.  Does that mean I'm going to stop writing stories?  Hell No. Because nobody else can write My Stories better than me.  And even if you can't do better than the other guy--as long as you're enjoying yourself, why quit?  My father is nowhere near as good a golfer as Tiger Woods, yet he still plays golf every chance he gets, because he truly enjoys the game.  Who knows what Veronica could have turned out had she written the story herself?  We might have had a new author join the Archive, to feed our fantasies and our fetish.  And she might have become better for discovering the talent within herself.  Nonetheless, I look forward to the rest of the story.  I just hope it doesn't have her get "plasticized"  like in `Julie's Gifts'  or---ughh--`Brainwash In Warm Water to Prevent Shrinkage' (Shudder, shudder. . .). Maybe you could publish the e-mails themselves as an addenda to the story once it's finished.  Take care----wcw43921
P.S. There was a porn star in the early '90s called Veronica Doll.  This wouldn't be the same person, would it? P.P.S. Have you met Veronica personally?  Did she promise you anything in the way of compensation for you writing her tale? ;)" wcw43921, writer, 12 February 2001


JR:  First rate story (Veronica Doll aka Barbie) !  A new concept in EMC; not an easy thing to do these days.  And very nice character development.  This one goes in my top ten."
vendatrix, writer, 12 February 2001


"hi, love your story about "v doll" (Veronica Doll aka Barbie) .  i can't wait for the next chapter to see what barbie and bambie are going to be doing."  little, 12 Feb 2001


"Hello.  I was reading about your inspiration for the agency and was intrigued by your mention of Russell E. Martin.  I have read everything Jack Chalker has written, and any author who is mentioned more prominently than his as regards erotic mind control is definitely worth a look.  I have had no luck finding any mention of his books in the major online bookstores (even in out-of-print sections).  Could you tell me where I can find the six books of his that you mentioned?  Thanks.  I also wanted to complement you on your work; your are among my top favorites in the area of erotic mind-control fiction (along with Downing Street and Boris Ludmenkov).  I look forward to hearing from you --very sincerely,
Nick D., 11 February 2001


"Really a good read (The Charmed Ones Trilogy) , although I am not familiar with the series or movie, the story was great. Any possibility of a sequel?" lin, 8 February 2001


"I just read the Unholy Desire series . I loved it! It is a true work of art (odd as it may sound to call something like that a work of art.) You let your true abilities shine through. I espccially liked how you made Jason so dark and evil, but at the same time slipped some humor into it. I just wanted to say great job and encore. If anything you are working on right now is half as good as that, it will be worthy of highest ranks." signed, your fan, 31 Jan 2001


"Ok, i read the story (Veronica Doll... aka Barbie) .  its very well written.  slow to build up, but worth it for that end part where i realize my new name is Barbie.  my fav bit in it so far has been the pink sweater.... the part where we act like Bimbos in front of those two guys and i twirl my hair (bc i do that all the time!) and the best was the binkys.  i LOVE the way they were plugged up in our pussys and i had to where Roses in my mouth with all her juices on it.  nice touch!  i didnt like the way you played up the lesbian angle to much.  i also dont like the way im nude so much.  i dont mind being nude, but i prefer the tease of lingerie.  and ALWAYS heels.  focus more on the changes.  the nails... the hair... and especially the mind.  great start!  whens part 2 coming???  barbie, (Veronica Doll), 30 Jan 2001


" Great site... wow!   I just wanted to commend you, a wonderfull web site. I have had a few small sites of my own and understand the work involved without much rewards. I will endeavor to write something for your site, I also have 17 original works of art in the fetish/mc vain you are welcome to have for your site or any other. I find I enjoy now sending my work out there via wonderfull sites such as yours, the world doesn't need more sites , needs more great free content; so I will do what I can. Let me know if you are interested in the pics; I will send a zip of 15 off to you at once, if not , all the best, congratulations on a great site, I will be back daily. Best site I have seen so far in 2 years of surfing!"
Mig, 24 Jan 2001


"Hello. I love your website, and have always been a big fan of your writing. I have the first part of your story, ' A Witch Casts Her Spell' , and am wondering if you ever continued it. I can't find it mentioned anywhere on your site. I hope you haven't disowned it. I know your 'back burner' list of stories is quite long already, and many of them are quite intriguing (ie. 'the Pill', 'Batgirl Goes Back to School', and 'The Lesbian Spell'), so I would not want to delay your writing these fine stories on my account <g>. But, if you did write more of 'A Witch Casts Her Spell' would you be willing to send it to me? And if there is anything I can do to help you in return, just ask. Thanks. A fan."  Michael, 21 Jan 2001


"I realize that it's been a while since you posted anything new, but i was wondering if you'd mind if i did a series of stories set in the Alien's Gift universe for posting in mcstories.com's archive... i would, of course, send anything to you for approval first, as it WAS your idea, but i'd like to get a nod to start scribbling first ;) thanks for your time!"
a fan, 19 Jan 2001


"I just wanted to drop you a quick note.  I just finished reading your story, " Gina's Interview" and wanted to let you know I really enjoyed it.  Not too much sex like you warn at the beginning, but the interaction did more that make up for that.  I liked the idea and way of mind control or should I say, body control.  I have had idea for a similar story for a while and my hopefully get it put down to script at some point.  Anyway, your story did what it should have, it made me hot and wet and I will be revisting it later in mind fantasy mode where I can truly enjoy the replay.  I wouldn't mind being Gina at all.  Thank you for sharing and keep up the great writing."
Laura, 15 Jan 2001


"GREAT story (Buffy's New Reality) !!!!!!  Loved all the twists and turns! I do hope Xander gets turned back to a male soon, though.  Keep up the Buffy stories....there aren't enough of them, IMO." Dlgus, 6 Jan 2001


"Hi JR :)  ...btw... added Codename Dominoe: Daughter of Desire to my picks...been planning that for a long time. Well done, and so was I, from the heat of it, after I read it :) Warmly, sara, writer, 6 Jan 2001


"jr, hi, just dropping a line to say that i really enjoyed the story (gina's interview) and most of the other stories you have written. i don't know if you ever use other people's ideas but have you ever thought where a doctor or possibly a policewoman is thinking she is  helping her female patient or victim and is seduced into acting very usual as opposed to there usual conservative outlook on life. just an idea keep up the interesting work."
DukesRule, 5 Jan 2001


"I just wanted to take the time to say that Gina's Interview was a fantastic story and I appreciate you taking the time to share it.  I hope that you have some time to possibly continue on?  I would love to see where else you can go with it." Cory, 4 Jan 2001


"JR- Nice to see you back at the keyboard. (Gina's Interview) ... A very hot read, and the details of 'passion programming' were well-handled.  Body vs Spirit, a good theme.  Welcome back, JR!" Eye, writer, 3 Jan 2001


"JR:  Nice one ( Gina's Interview ).  Gina was drawn so as to be someone worth watching, and her struggle mattered.  Liked the idea of Heather, too, enslaved so deeply she helps enslave others.  (The FF, of course, didn't hinder my enjoyment, either. :))  Thinking about it, I really liked the idea of seeing that from both sides through Gina:  first, as the desperate victim of Heather's calm-cultlike control, and then as a sort of Heather-in-training herself, as she happily contemplates helping to snare the pretty reporter for her master.

There's that dark quality, too:  as Darke himself points out, the essence of this control isn't just being overwhelmed and then reprogrammed.  It's a subversion of the victim's owm drives, and it would actually be more agonizingly orgasmic for a stronger-willed woman, who'd just soak more of it up as she fought.  Thanks.  A variety of posts have hinted that you're busy, so glad you found or made the time for this. IMO anyway, it was well-spent.  See you on-forum, and if we don't exchange in the next 22 hours or so (EST), merry millennium.  :)

trilby else, Writer, 31 Dec 2000


Forum Review:  "Gina's Interview : JRParz recertifies his EMCSA creds with a well-crafted piece that gets into both MCer and victim heads. The smug MCer is suitably nasty/polite but not the complete shit such characters tend to be, and Gina's a brave heroine. The struggle's a bit foreshortened, but the surrounding elements--volumes of implications about the rest of Darke's slaves, the way the conditioning works (and its awful/wonderful inevitability), the way that's Heather's job, Gina's attitude at the end--provide a great deal of MC heat indirectly. Kind of a convection oven :). Anyway, JR has not lost his touch.  Plenty of arousal.

I enjoyed " Gina's Interview " very much, Keep up the writing." BK, 30 Dec 2000


JR, I just read your story ( Gina's Interview ) - really enjoyed it, especially the part from Gina's POV.   like situations where strong-willed women are made to develop a new outlook on life and how they deal with their new situation, and I believe your story relates this quite well. keep up the good work.  cvn88, Writer, 30 Dec 2000


"hey, i just finished reading your "alien's gift" series.. well 5 parts of it.. i don't know if there are any more... in the mc stories archive.. i'm impressed (as impressed as one can be for a mindcontrol sex story) by it.. as i think the
characters and plot are pretty interesting.. for a sex story.. it's got a sort of highlander type feel to it, where there are those with the gift who do their own thing to abuse it and battle it out.. anyways.. at the end of the last one
you wrote that you won't be writing one for a while, but you welcome others to.. i'm interested definitely.. now, i'm not sure if i need to ask you for permission or whathever.. but i think it's better if i tell you anyways.. besides.. look at this as fan mail :) so i'll be writing ch6 soon... also, i'm not sure whehter i need to mail it to you, or just submit it myself.. anyways... if you're wondering, yeah i'm a prolific writer, but never of anything like this... anyways..
sorry for bothering you." Ardin Resolute, 10 Dec 2000


"JR, You're conclusion to The Charmed Ones was outstanding.  I think it was worth the wait and in my opinion was the best of the three. You captured the magical feel of the show very nicely. I can't get enough of reading about Piper Prue and Phoebe. Alyssa Milano is probably one of my favorite young stars. There's something about her that lends itself perfectly to this kind of story. And the villain is probably one of your most original and interesting. He's very devious in his manipulations. Awesome read." Trent Wolf, Writer, 6 Dec 2000


"JR, I have been a fan of your work for only a year, but I have found that your writing style and subject matter has inspired me to attempt to write my first erotic story.  I have included a very rough idea sketch of a story universe I would like to see (and base my first story on!).  I would appreciate any feedback or critisicm you could give me on my idea.  Thanks."  Josh, 27 Nov 2000

" Master PC - Great story!!!!!!!! Got anymore like this????????????????" Slow Rider, 26 Nov 2000


"Hi, I think that this is the correct email address for the author of Master PC . Great Story! I was considering writing a master PC story of my own, but I am not exactly sure what the master PC can do. Here are a few questions:  1. Can the program alter things that happened in the past, or only memories?  2. Can it change inhuman objects like chairs tables etc? How about animals?  3. Is the 100 mile range still applicable?  4. how fast does it work, I gather from your stories, it can change multiple people instantly (when the girls walked into school)  5. If a person is password protected, can they still be hypnotised? (I read that in a master pc story.)  6. Can you change your brain chemistry to form a bio computer and download the program into your head (read that in another story)   7. Can the program read your mind (for example how does it know which Heather you are talking about if there are more than 1) Basically what are the limits to the program? What has improved in the program since adam first got it?  I hope to hear a speedy reply."  John Thomas, 25 Nov 2000


"Will u be updating your website soon and are u working on any new stories do u kow where to find any other good stories like yours." Ggar, 21 Nov 2000

" WishCraft is one of my favorite stories."  Anonymous, 18 Nov 2000


"My word, I just gone done reading "Rings of Transformation" - Cheshire High School? I freakin' went to Cheshire High School (No, really, Cheshire High School in Cheshire, CT)!!! Overall, a weird story. The story was good, and wraps up pretty well. The characters are where I give you mucho credit. The breast descripts were okay, Suitable for the story. When mentioning the permanence of the rings early on, you know that it would come into play somehow. Overall, pretty well done."  Anonymous, 15 Nov 2000


"Hi, I'm Sam. I've read your cool sex stories at your site and i was wondering if you could send me more. Please send them to this e-mail, with uninteresting names because i check this at school. It would be a big favor and i would very much like it. Please do this for me. If you have another site or a site to recommend, please tell it to me.  Thank you big time! Sam  P.S. please tell me your all time favorite story." Sam, 4 Nov 2000


"Beautiful Story (Buffy's New Reality) .  I will never watch Buffy in quite the same way again.  Got any more?"
deano, 4 Nov 2000

"I haven't written you in a long time but think of what you could do with the sabrina and tabitha (teenage witches) story.   sabrina in college and doesn't know that tabitha is there and more powerful then ever.  sabrina could be mind controlled to be in an orgy or gangbang." Levy, 3 Nov 2000

JR, ... As for your latest Buffy's New Reality story... I liked it, but along with some other readers, didn't find it to be among your very best work. Doesn't mean I didn't like it... it just didn't make it to the summit for me. The super-short chapters were an interesting method, and I love to see experimentation going on. Mostly, I thought the characters lacked the personality you usually give them. The story itself (idea-wise and event-wise) was good... I just wish I could have related more to the ongoing and growing lust in each person.  All the best, JR!"  Sara, Writer, 30 Oct 2000


"Hi there, For what it's worth, I just wanted to say how much I enjoy your site and appreciate your efforts.  I'm sure it's a lot of work and I know that you probably don't get enough thanks.  Well,  from one person....  Thank You"
Bill, 26 Oct 2000

"JR, I just got through reading your Buffy's New Reality story. If I were ever going to write a Buffy fanfic, this is almost exactly how I would write it. I have actually thought about doing one, but I don't watch the show regularly enough to do it justice. You have. You included all my favorite characters, although I would have like to have seen a little more Cordelia. She deserves a story all her own though. So does Willow. So does Faith for that matter. She's a great addition to the show. I've always imagined her and Buffy going at it like you so vividly described. I'm glad Giles finally got some too. Man, this story has it all, even Xander in TG.  I'm not really into that, but I found it amusing anyway. This story rocked! I loved it! Still can't wait for Charmed 3.  Trent Wolf, Writer, 24 Oct 2000

Caught your story, Buffy's New Reality , on the asstr and I have to say:  What happened?  What's with the roman numerals to denote scene changes? You used to be able to do transitions. Is this a style thing?  You now write like it's almost a script. Maybe you should go whole hog and do an annotated script style. That may be fun.  I have all due respect for your ability, volume alone, and getting things finished, and maintaining your fine website, etc., etc.

But this one wasn't you're best effort.

You know the show, the characters are depicted fine, but turning Xander into a woman? And not following up?  Just what would Anya think? He used to have the hots for Buffy, she's a nympho, they don't hook up? He just disappears?  Spike is destroyed sexually? He was big Vampire on Campus, and he has some setbacks, but you don't live almost as long as Angel and not have the ability to bounce back.  Maybe a submissive streak, into spanking afterwards. A radical change, like Giles. They're both English, after all, right? :)   And the finale? Drusilla effective at all, in anything, without help. I always saw her as an Ophelia. Crazy as a loon and not much more help.  Mostly though, the ending seemed tacked on.

The ideas are there but the execution is awkward. The asides are disturbing, disconcerting, but maybe that is an asstr thing and will be taken out in final (I hope. Keep them at the bottom.)

I heard a rumour that you're going to change 'Jennifer's Transformation' from a varient 'Reward' story to a 'Derek the Warlock' story.  Resist.  You do not have to force all your stories into the same universe. Heinlein tried and even he couldn't quite do it. You have enough Derek stories now and in the future. You can write outside your usual, you have the talent.

On to a specific, you wrote: Willow still took pleasure in a slue of female subjects... You mean to use slew. I checked.  Take this for what it is, an informed critique from a fan. Comment on it, toss it, write a scathing 'how dare you' reply, your choice.  Thanks,  more later (maybe).  Vahktang, Writer, 24 Oct 2000


"Hi, my name is Kerry, and I'm a volunteer for an Audio-Reader Network, a reading service for the visually impaired.  We record and read various programs, books, and magazines, which are then broadcast to a special radio receiver in the homes of our visually-impaired patrons.  Here's our website for more info:  http://www.uk...

Anyway, I do a show once a month called the Adult Magazine Hour, where I read erotic fiction and letters from various
mazazines, primarily Penthouse and Playboy.  In honor of this upcoming Halloween, I wanted to read on my programs
short stories that constituted supernatural or horrific erotica.  I got on the web, and among others, came across your website.  I perused some of the stories and really liked them and wonder if it would be all right to read a couple of them for my show this Sat.?  I actually record it tomorrow, and I know this is rather short notice, but the idea first came to me yesterday.  Let me know if this is OK."  Sincerely, Kerry, 23 Oct 2000



Hey, i loved you story on Sabrina and Tabitha (Teenage Witches) ... very, very good! i'd love to see another chapter...and the master PC ones really intrigue me... i'd like to see more on them, although I'm not too much of a humiliation freak, i still find that they are well written... keep it up...(no pun intended...) Dark Angel, Oct. 23/2000

Regarding Buffy's New Reality. ..  "Just read this and I thought it was excellent. I'm a long time BTVS fan and I really liked the erotic imagery and characterizations. You say it will "not" be a trilogy. Pity, there is enough plot to extend over quite a bit of story. Regarding Dawn, a good look at her reveals she is quite "mature", she possibly could share in some of the action. I also think reality has been changed, and I'm looking forward to the resolution. Thanks very much for the story, and I look forward to more of your work."  Regis, 22 Oct 2000


     "The whole Master PC story is awsome! I especially like the end!" Cai, 22 Oct 2000

Regarding Buffy's New Reality ; Freaky, man, but I liked it. Could have delved a bit more into the hypno angle, but that's just my like. Still a kick-ass story. Good work." Anynom, Writer, 22 Oct 2000


"Sabrina & Tabitha - Teenage Witches was fantastic.  can you do me a favor...........Can you send both part one and part 2 to my friend, her mail is... tell her that i told you to send, THANX.  LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE."  DOMENIQUE, 21 Oct 2000


"JR Parz, I just sent you an e-mail from the Erotic Mind Control letter forum. But since I'm still not a computer expert and maybe sent it wrong, I'm writing you again.  I found your review/comments of "Ultimate Attraction" "Alien Files 1 and 2". Being the author/director on the films, I just wanted to thank you for the support and am happy to hear that you enjoyed them. I am also a big fan of this genre and have read most of the books on your list. From my first feature "There's Nothing Out There" through my latest project "Pretty Cool" and "Emmanuelle 2000", I have been dealing with mind control, breast expansion, and other fun concepts that seem to have a following. I am pretty sure you'll want to know more about my latest projects so give me an e-mail if you want. I'm at Rolfe@theresnothingoutthere.com  Keep of the good work. By the way, I think your stories are awesome as well.  Best Wishes, Rolfe, 21 Oct 2000

"Regarding Unholy Desire.. . First of all let me say that I like your story.  I have read many of your works, and you seem to be maturing in you style.  I think, however the old saying less is sometime more, is true in many instances. Have you thought about being a little more discriptive and less directness.  Sometime it might help to let the reader use there imagination more.  This in many cases a little suspence gets the reader more involved.  Like I said before I have followed your work, and am looking forward to reading more of your work. I feel in the future if you have not already, you will be asked to submit some of your work to either a magazine, or a publisher.  I wish you all the luck and hope you keep progressing." Davis, 16 Oct 2000

"As with most of your stories, Unholy Desire was pretty good.  I am a long time fan and was wondering will we get new additions to this story explaining the evil within him?" axeman, 16 Oct 2000

"Regarding Beach Babes ... There was a great build up, but a pitiful ending. What happened with the girls and Mike? What happened with the girls and that guy at the end? It was a real let down."  Anonymous, 16 Oct 2000

" Sabrina & Tabitha - Teenage Witches was the best.  can you please send stories like that to my email adress?" domenique, 16 Oct 2000