Did you, or anyone else, do any more with the
5 chapters of "
The Alien's Gift
".
It is a great story line and brings in a sense of responsibility that shows
that 'doing the right thing' in the end is what makes us human. The
old saying that power corrupts and absolute power corrupts absolutely can
be overridden by honesty, love and caring. Thank you for a great
story and hope to see more of it, as well as other stories.
Dick,
23 Dec 2001
J R Parz: First off, I must admit
that the
Master PC
is a wonderful idea/ series! I noticed that you have a new one in
the making... I have a suggestion for an alteration or for the next
one. I would write it myself, but unlike others of my family, I do
not have the gift for writing. This is based on thoughts that I would
act upon if I had the program. My suggestion is as follows:
The lead character (male) wants to give a friend of his a little push.
Actually, it's slightly more of a revenge. To be blunt, she's a cock-tease,
but doesn't realize it - even when confronted. After he alters himself,
he decides that she would be the first target... He starts out small
at first (changes to her would take about a week). You know, the
little things... no longer having to shave, accelerated hair (head) growth,
breasts lifting (she's already got a "D" cup), etc. Also a feature
that hadn't been used/found yet would be a sort of IM window into the mind
of the person, where the user could ask questions and the person would
answer truthfully. The main alteration to what other stories have
had is the addition of a second clit! The thought of that came from
a photo that a friend got from someone off ICQ years ago. The woman,
very attractive by the way, had two clits... one right above the other,
maybe 1/2" apart. Apparently, this was an un-doctored picture!
The guy who had the original showed the negative to my friend and I...
(he happened to live a couple hours away) The irony is that the woman
could not be fully satisfied by one person alone! I know that I went
rambling there, which is why I couldn't write the story myself. I
think you get the idea though. If you do write something including
this idea (the second clit), please email me to inform me when it's due
to be released. I would love to read your interpretation of this
idea.
PoLYMoRF, 21 Dec 2001
JR Parz, I just wanted to drop you
a quick note to tell you that
I love your
stories
. I have read all of them that are
posted
at http://www.asstr-mirror.org/files/Authors/JR_Parz/www/Mainstories.htm. I have a thing for MC
stories, and I have found that you have the best ones out there. Do you
have any stories that are not posted on this site? Thank you,
Daniel,
20 Dec 2001
Hi, I've enjoyed your site for a while
now and as with any of the free sites on the web, I can only be amazed
at the amount of work that you do with so little reward. I'm sure
most of us "lurker" types would not have the skill or patience that you
have to keep a site like this going. That said.... I can only
say that while I certainly hope that you do not hang it up, I can understand
your frustration with new "improved" software that makes it so hard
to keep going. I wonder if the computer industry (Both hard and software)
knows how terrified a lot of people are at trying something new and improved
because of situations like yours. If you do end it or take a vacation
from it, all I can say is that you will be missed. If you press on
(as I hope you do) ...............Thank You. In either case, Good
luck,
Bill, 16 Dec 2001
Hello, I recently stumbled across
your side while looking for some good mind control stories, and can I just
say I was blown away... 5 hours later and I've still got a ton of thinhgs
to read. It's a great site, keep it up. :) I'm hoping you can
also help me. I am looking for a story once available on the MInd Control
Archive. It was Tim's Life I believe. I know it was about a young
boy bitten by a bug in a swamop who learned he could take over anyones
mind if he made eye contact. do you know what story I mean? and do you
know where I can find it? Thanks,
RDC,
8 Dec 2001
JR Parz: I just wanted to let you
know that your link to the above story on your site does not work.
Do you think possibly you could put this story on your site. I have
read other works by this author and really enjoyed them and I would like
to read this one also. Thanks.
H,
1 Dec 2001
Hey whasup JRParz. I just read your
story "Double your Pleasure" and I loved it! I love erotic stories
about females having sex with their exact doubles! Are you going
to write anymore stories on this subject? And if not do you know where
I can find stories or illustrations relating specifically to this topic?
Keep up the good work!
JUC, 28 Nov 2001
Just a note about
Cassandra
Vampireress
.. "Wow" is only a small
comment. Terrific writing style and what a cum filled episode with
all
the right ideas..thanksfor
sharing your writing skills and will soon read more of your stories..thanks
again."
bosco, Nov 10 2001
sir, I am lq...and i want you to know that
I think you are one of the most talented writers anywhere on any list...
I remember your early stuff (grin) and it took me a long time to go back
to you..but a friend urged me to read this hot writer on the list...you...so
I came back and was blown away... from personal experinces if the writing
is really bad...'warts and all.' when i peruse the list i skip those
writers..until I have heard different...what i just wanted to say in general
to list writers is to take better care of their projects before posting.
Spell check and an occasional new paragraph would do...I mention No Authours...Your
name is an example of a solid good writer... I used you because you
are considered to be one of the best authours on the list...
msamaro...aka..lq.,
6 Nov 2001
I have enjoyed stories based on your universe
since you first published them. A year and a bit ago, I started one
of my own. It suffered as my life changed, but I have finished it.
I was wondering if you would take a look at it? I really have
enjoyed your work. I look forward to hearing from you. "
Fred,
3 Nov 2001
I've been to your site and
have read most of your stories. I'm sorry to say though, in my opinion
"The Origin o Hootersville" isn't one of your better ones. I think it might
have been because it jumped around so much. Don't get me wrong, it
wasn't bad, just not as good as many of your other stories. I'm no
writer, just a reader. Most Sincerely,
Dan,
1 Nov 2001.
Hi
there. Just a line to say how wonderfull I think your site is. There really
is some great fiction here. A question. the stormbringer bimboization site
is not working. Do you
know
of any other sites that feature men and women being bimboized? I go to
fictionmania but they don't have a bimbo catagory. Hope to hear from you
soon. Thanks."
Lily, the minx,
1 Nov 2001
"Interesting story about the witch, the
apprentice (
Young Sorceress I & II
).
Do you believe in magic. importance."
Cory,
23 Oct 2001
Great Story! (
The
Origin of Hootersville
) I would've enjoyed
more descriptions of the newly formed bimbos eating lots of cum from the
spigots ofeager males, but, I quibble. What normal male hasn't thought
about having that kind of power. I often fantasized along those lines.
The only additional characteristic I would've added would've been cigarette
smoking (I think it looks sexy with the "right" kind of woman) to top off
the bimbo/slut look. Keep up the excellent work.
Vaughn, 22 Oct 2001
Dear
JR, I just read "
The Origin of Hootersville,
USA
" You ARE a pervert.
You want short girls and only the girlfriends can get pregnant?
wrong, Wrong, WRONG! Pregnant Amazons! That's the ticket!
And while dumb-when-she's-horny is OK, that's not so good if then she's
always horny = always dumb. [Dumb has it's place as a means of getting
sex (though the stupidist woman has instincts to outwit most men), but
if access
is guaranteed anyway, why not fuck a horny
genius? A BIG horny genius! <g>]
Now I suppose we could attribute these lapses
in judgements to the ages of the characters, but then why write about such
a perversely misguided age group. It's enough to make one swear
off (teen) entirely. Besides noting the deplorable lack of impregnated
females, I was also sorely disappointed in the failure of one of these
characters to have an encounter with a mother/father or teacher, who would
no doubt contribute more to his or her sexual enlightenment than copulating
with other equally inexperienced c hildren. I also point out that
mature females are much more appropriate for impregnation. I believe
that a woman should be well established in her career and have an income
sufficient to support a brood of children before she begins to pop them
out annually. (Now if SHE prefers a dumb hunk to stud her, well,
that's her privilege. <g>)
Finally, although like you, I like f/f sex,
I think it should be firmly established that the female turns to it, a
bit reluctantly, only when no male outlets for her normal insane cravings
are at hand. As I said (not "Like I said;" you'd think that by 4040
people would have lernt proper English) f/f sex should be like the overflow
valve on the water tank. In this regard, I failed to understand the
final scene, which shockingly implied that an H-ville girl would prefer
s ex with another girl to that with a BOY! In other words,
I loved the shit out of this story!" Thanks for writing it.
Ciao,
Homer, Writer, 22 Oct 2001
Hey! The
Origin
of Hootersville
was Great! But then again,
everything you write is just great. So you covered what happened with the
gals, but what happens to the guys? I'm looking forward to seeing more
of this!"
Lin Rhoades, 22 Oct
2001
Hootersville
was a great story. Hope to see more later... hey JR, maybe I'll try my
hand at writing. Thanks.
GKGets, 22 Oct 2001
"Nice story (
The Origin of Hootersville
). Very enjoyable.
It is both erotic and amusing at the same time. Keep up the good
work. And thank you for writing!"
Moriarty
21 October 2001
The Origin of Hootersville
is an excellent story. Would like to hear more on it.
Maybe some visitors to town. Thx."
Ohgawan,
21 Oct 2001
"Hootersville
is a nice story.. however I see you didn't have anyone proofread this...
You wrote :
"Huh? What? Are
you saying she's exclusive?" The man asked, surprised... then he smiled
again. "Oh yeah... now that you mention it, I do remember something
about this exclusivity
shit in the history books...
What's today's date?"
"October 20th, 2001."
Ray replied.
"Damn! Two hundred years
off!" The man exclaimed.
"Are you saying that you're
from the future?" Bart asked.
"Yep... from 4001" The man
replied, grinning.
Uhmmm thats 2000 years."
Groupieman,
21 Oct 2001
"Mr.
Parz: I just wanted to say that I really enjoy your stories.
I tried your site a little while ago and am slowly making my way through
all of the great stories located there. Just one thing, I tried the
link to
Marlissa's story "The Conditioners"
.
It doesn't seem to work anymore... By the way, I would have
to say I like '
The Agency
' stories the best and am looking forward to reading chapter 4 soon.
Thanks for the great stories and keep up the great work."
Howard,
8 Oct 2001
"I would love to read more stories like
"Sabrina
& Tabitha - Teenage Witches Trilogy"
...
that was very good."
Moosen,
4 Oct 2001
Hi! I'm a great fan of your stories.
I love them, really...but now I'm searching for
"The
Conditioners"
but I can't find it anywhere...
Keep on writing!"
Chris, 2 Oct 2001
"Hello JR Parz, Just wanted to let you know
that I really love your site, it is the best MC site ever!! However,
your comments about
Marlissa's story (The
Conditioners)
, really interests me, and I
would like to read it. However, your link directly to the story is
dead & I can not find the story anywhere else... But anyway,
keep up the excellent work on your site."
Mark,
20 Sep 2001
"Love the story
(Tales
from the Club: The Mesmerist's Tale)
.
It's a great story and would be a great
script for a porno."
Rob, 15 Sep 2001
"Hi, I am just wondering if there are more
"Agency"
chapters. I have 1-3 and
"The Early
Years"
1-2. If there are more could
you send them via email, and do you have a mailing list of your new stories?
Also, do you have a website with your complete work? Thanks."
Craig, 6 Sep 2001
"Brilliant! I enjoyed the whole story
(Master
PC)
... keep up the imagination. Cheers."
James,
27 Aug 2001
"Is there a continuation to
Beach
Babes
? That story was the shit."
Tainted,
26 Aug 2001
"Dear JR, I like your style of writing...
Thanks for providing such a quality spot for erotic fiction."
Alan, 24 Aug 2001
"Hello! I loved
"A
Warlock's Toys"
. It was fantastic! I'm
partial to well-built, big-breasted blondes, and I love the sheer sexual
power Derek had and the nonchalant way he wielded it. There was something
so sexy about that. I've always been fascinated by sexual power and slavery,
whether by the guy or the girl. Plus, twins, oh my god, who doesn't have
a twins fantasy? I noticed you preferred describing the girl-on-girl
interactions more than Derek banging the twins. I certainly have no problem
with that. Just wanted to say that I read this story and loved it,
thanks for sharing it!"
Seldom, Writer,
22 Aug 2001
"Anyone who hangs around the EMCSA or The
Mind Control Forum would probably recognize the name JR Parz. I recently
visited his homepage and was both amazed and impressed by how much stuff
was on it! He was also kind enough to write some good words about
HypnoFocus
on his favorite links page. I just wanted to say that I noticed it and
appreciate it! :-)"
"Love your website. I was in
your links section and tried to get onto another favourite site, the grey
archive but i have been unable to do so. any ideas if it has changed address.
i've been away for a couple of weeks and haven't been able to access since.
Loved the
charmed trilogy and barbie secret
agent
keep up the great work. cheers.
Michael,
11 Aug 2001
Greetings; In the last month I was
pleased to find your writings and have been hooked ever since. I
am always looking for more stories and hope to be able to start writing
some myself someday. I especially enjoy the struggle you place your
victims in. It makes the story all the more compelling and forceful
and always come away wanting more. Keep up the great work.
Jim, 7 Aug 2001
I've just read your
Tales
from the club story "The Mesmerist's tale"
, and I must say interesting it was my
first Tales from the club story,
and I liked it I'm going to find the rest of them and read them all. Again
JR
great job on the story."
Ares
God of War, 1 Aug 2001
Hello JR, Trailing back badly with regards
to fan mail, but could no longer delay writing about
“Athena’s
G spot.”
Interesting premise. Settled
back comfortably in my chair as the excuse for Athena’s quick interlude
on the other side of the street was provided. There is something about
a clinical milieu that reinforces that predatory atmosphere so prevalent
in MC stories... thankfully, no one observed my grin by the time the clothes
were off. ;-) Variety took us away from too narrow a focus
on the story – with some exposure regarding Athena’s life and marital
troubles. Bambi’s arrival sounds the call to induction, and every syllable
after that takes us a step closer. She was quite scrumptious as her touch
began to have its desired effect on Athena – excellent sequence here, with
a nice gradual slip that uses touches of ‘mantic to produce the desired
effect. The musical recurrence at the end proved the perfect final
brushstroke. Only wish the narrative had stayed on Carla a bit longer (but
hey – I’m spoiled ;)) Nicely done!"
Regards,
-Iago, Writer, 28 July 2001
hi jr, too long? are you kidding? i thought
this (
Tales from the Club: The Mesmerist's
Tale
) was excellent. it didn't ramble and
it was well-excecuted. this new universe is something that could be sorely
needed - things have been getting stale lately. GREAT job."
jack,
28 July 2001
I found your "
Tales From the Club: The Mesmerist's Tale
"
very enjoyable, but I am nagged about one thing. What was done to Theresa
that was so drastic as to prevent the retransference, but seems to have
no other effect?"
Fast Frank, 26 July 2001
"JR, This is a SWEET Tale (
Tales From the Club: The Mesmerist's Tale
)!
Right from the beginning with this line: "Jonathan grunted with every
thrust..." And then it takes off in a well-paced story full of just
the kind of things I like to read and images I like imagine. Even the small
scenes: "Her name is Jillian... She's some congresswoman's daughter."
Jim commented, noticing his appreciative glance. Did the congresswoman
piss someone off?" He asked with a chuckle. There's a story in itself!
Then there is Tara Sapphire. (Nice name by the way). What a sexy
young villain just waiting to be tamed! I especially like the fact that
she is pure unadulterated lesbian, and the way you set her up for ultimate
defeat. That was a great piece of writing and ingenuity at the end in the
climactic bedroom scene. I like everything about this story. The
cool seduction scenes, the teenage dialogue, the planning and execution
by Brandon Darke to bring down his foe. Excellent! Even the way you
inserted the nice little backhistory of some of the characters was seamless
within the story. Well done JR! You nailed this one good. Just as
if you had written it solely for me and pandered to all my particular tastes.
Simply..."a tale worth telling"! Bravo! Trent Wolfe,
Writer & Universe Creator, 25 July 2001
"Terrific job on your site..... one broken
link however.... the story "The Conditioners" no longer seems to work...
any suggestions?" Mark, 24 July 2001
"Hello, I loved
"Jennifer's
Transformation"
. Are you going to continue
with this story and go into other lives and how Jennifer's transformation
effects her family and her relationship with Heather and her family. Are
you going to get Heather's mom or sisters or any female in her family addicted
to Jennifer's scent. There are a lot of possibility's to do here.
Also you can go off into other women Warlock meets."
JC,
21 July 2001
"Just gonna say hi, I never have done much
on that story I'm trying to write. I never seem to have enough
time, but I'm sure you know what I mean. So, instead of being a total
leech on the community, I've decided to contribute a little. I'm
guessing you may have ventured into the Yahoo clubs, there are some very
interesting ones out there. I never could find one that had what
I wanted so I made one. I'm hoping it will prod me into writing more.
http://clubs.yahoo.com/clubs/bimboslutcaptionimages
I
should have a few images up in a couple of days. I was gonna put
some favorite stories of mine in my briefcase for people to access.
I was wondering if you would mind if I put a few of my fav's of yours up
as well? Thanks for the time, I'll talk to you later. PS
Your last couple of stories have been amazing."
Joker,
20 July 2001
"You are a god! I have proboly read twenty
of those stories and never been interested in finishing one. Until I read
your twisted little tail. Thank you. I'm speaking of
"Young
Sorceress"
. The twist being first the
black magic sorceress' traping the good witch and then the sorcerer traping
the bad witch. Finaly the Sorcerer and the evil sorceress trap each
other. Well done. The "happy ending" was what made it for me. This story
being a fairytale in its own right."
My Tainted Soul, 19 July 2001
"Hello, I love your stories and your web
site. I love the idea of half of the stuff you write and publish. I've
found this story. I have reason to believe that I've seen it on another
web site besides Literotica. I was just wondering what you might know.
One of my favorites stories is
Aliens Gift
. I love movies but do you know of any Hentai movies that deal with
lesbian vampires or mind control. Thanks for the wonderful stories and
I hope to see a lot more."
JC, 18 July 2001
"I've just read your revisions of
"Jennifer's
Transformation"
, which just happens to be
one of my favorites, and
"The Mesmerist"
, I'm giving you another thumbs up on the stories I like how you handled
the revisions they're great. I hope your do more on
"Jennifer's
Transformation"
maybe more of Derek's future
conquests or something, but whatever you decide to do good luck and keep
up the good work."
"Ares
God Of War", 12 July 2001
"Since I haven't dropped a line lately,
I thought I should compliment you on
Double
Your Pleasure
and
Veronica
Doll aka Barbie
. You certainly have
a way with getting into the heroine's mind that is incredibly compelling.
Keep up the good work :)"
Farleven, Writer,
8 July 2001
"I just finished reading
Double
Your Pleasure
and had to tell you that I thought
it was a great story. Keep up the excellent work."
Tim, 6 July 2001
"Subject,
Athena's
G-Spot
... Nicely done, my friend, nicely done.
I particularly liked the way you slid in the part about telling the girl
exactly what was going on while she was so 'under' at a time when she was
so far gone she didn't even care. Oh, that was just priceless. >:) I always
like stories like this with a bit of a twist at the end. The only thing
a little confusing was the multiple names of all the men she had been seeing
on the side... did you ever mention her HUSBAND's name? Not that
it mattered any, he was just another device in the story, with no real
presence. >:) You gave a 'shout out' to a woman you knew that had
likewise been 'awakened' in a similiar manner, hmmm? Interesting. I also
find myself attracted to stories based somewhat on RL experiences. I wouldn't
pry or anything, but I wonder a bit if Tony represents YOU in some way,
that you are privy to a lot of secrets from a female friend of yours?
That is so kewl. I had those kinds of female friends in college, but never
did I get shared a story like THIS one. >:) Again, good job. Can't
wait to see what you crank out next!"
J. Darksong, Writer, 6 July 2001
"Athena's g-spot"
!! very funny!! so what does tony get out of the relationship besides good
stories!??? it was good!! and thanks for adding max... mmm... would i do
it again... maybe!! gotta go my husband is here... bummer!!
Athena,
3 July 2001
"Just wanted to let you know that I really
enjoyed
"Athena's G-Spot"
on the latest archive...very hot, with an interesting use of understated
backstory. I feel a bit sorry for her husband, though! :-)
Anyway, kudos. Best wishes.
This Guy,
Writer, 3 July 2001
"I've been meaning to thank you for all
the enjoyable stories you've written over the years and the effort you
put in your website. It is very enjoyable. You are one of my
favorite MC authors and I'm always pleased to see one of my stories on
your Hall of Fame (Dream). Even though I wrote it long ago, it's
nice to know that you think it holds up. I have written others, but
have never felt that any of them are "finished" enough to post. Maybe
someday I'll get around to posting them. Please keep up the great
work!"
Magic Carpet, Writer, 3 July
2001
Regarding "
Athena's
G-spot"
: Sssssssssssssssmokin'!
What a hot read. But in my version, her friend Tony sent her there so she
could be programmed to respond that way only to HIM!"
Dom, 2 July 2001
"I've just read
"Athena's
G-Spot"
it's pretty funny, but a little short
still it was good keep up the good work."
"Ares
God Of War", 2 July 2001
"Great story (
Athena's G-spot
). I very much like the
clinical aspects of this. You should consider submitting this to
speculumpages.com. I like the headphones and subliminals commanding
Athena to masturbate, once adequate programming had been done, and the
domination Bambi has over her. Very compelling. Look forward
to
a sequel... Good work!"
pen_smoke, 1 July 2001
Review By Trilby-else from the MC Forum:
"Athena's
G-Spot"
: JR Parz does some nice recruitment
here, in the midst of a hierarchy where slaves make more slaves.
Nice touches, like Bambi's comment that the senior only acts when she's
training her own staff. Keeping in mind that this is, as JR says,
something written with a particular fan in mind, the 'Tony' subplot both
worked and didn't, for me: it was nice to hear Athena's reactions
(and her reactions to her reactions), but the artifice of the RL tie-in
offset the effect a bit, IMO. But the story itself was a hot read
all the way through.
Trilby-else, Writer,
1 July 2001
"Athena's G-Spot"
Very Nice-- especially liked the twist ending!"
Curvasions, Writer/Poser Renderer, 30 June
2001
Ok, so I finally read all your stories
on mcstories.com. Loved them all. Hope you continue to add
new stories now that I've finally caught up."
Sabine,
23 June 2001
hi jr... Wow... in reading
this story
(Double Your Pleasure)
it made me wish I had what they have... the only difference is I
have a sister who fairly looks like me... sigh.
twin,
22 June 2001
Just read
"Young
Sorceress"
, very good. Anything
else in the works that I might be able to read... let me know, I'll be
waiting anxiously."
Shane, 22 June 2001
"hey, i just read
buffy's
new reality
. it's great. i've
also read your
sabrina and tabitha - teenage
witches
and
the
charmed ones
stories, nice work, but i'd really
like to see more stuff with willow in it. she is the reason i watch
the show, anyways, keep up the good work, is there a gallery of your stories
online? if so, please send me the link, thanx again for your writing,
Al,
22 June 2001
"hello, I am inclined to email you.
I love your stories and i'm so turned on. I would love to be controlled
like that."
shelly, 19 June 2001
"JR, Just wanted to give you kudos
for an excellent little tale
(Double Your
Pleasure)
. I'll bet that was as much
fun to write as it was to read. I smiled all the way through it.
I like the way Jessica took control of the resistant Jill and told her
"Just be happy I'm letting you wear a thong underneath it," when they were
getting ready for their dates. And then when she told her, "I want
Cal to know you're hot for it." Great lines. The theater scene was
great! Especially when they finished the deal in the parking lot.
Hot writing all the way!
Trent Wolf, Writer, 19 June 2001
"double your pleasure"
... great new story.
Bryce, 18
June 2001
A Review by Trilby else...
"Double
Your Pleasure"
: Thinking JR had another
cool genie story, and something similar (MC-wise, at least) happened to
the heroine. Very sweet predicament, and the MCer here is much kinder than
the usual JR version. Liked Jill's reactions when each command was
placed, and the flow of the story made her decision at the end credible--I
found the genie's caution commendable but unnecessary. :)
Trilby else, Writer, 17 June 2001
Great story
(Double Your Pleasure)
! I only wished
that there could of been more graphic and nasty sex between the two double
girls. More of a narcissistic obsession. In fact a whole story
could be about that. Mmmm. Thanks for writing your stories
are some of the best on the net."
Bill
T., 17 June 2001
"You have a
great
site
. I'm spending my days there reading
and learning about MC."
Steve, 16 June
2001
"A great little story
(Double
Your Pleasure)
, there was nothing about it
that I didn't like. I do have to mention enjoying the image of the
genie in a business suit."
Fast Frank,
15 June 2001
"I've just read your story
"Double
Your Pleasure"
, and I must say it's too funny,
but at the same time very entertaining. Your still the man."
"Ares
God Of War", 15 June 2001
"Dear Mr. Parz, As a person who recently
found your site, I must congratulate you. A very well done, very
erotic site indeed. But on to the real reason I'm writing you.
Your story
Cassandra - Vampiress
is excellent. I just got done reading Chapter 7, and I loved it!
I'm a vampire fan from back in the days of the original Dark Shadows, (I
used to run home every day from grade school (Yes grade school!) just to
catch the last few minutes of the show! I also read vampire fiction
and when possible, watch vampire movies. Keep up the good work, and
continue to write such magnificent erotic mind control fiction."
Harry,
15 June 2001
"
Gina's Interview
was a Great story, How about prequel with Lawyer and the actress..."
Eric,
11 June 2001
"Hello there, I read your story on MC Stories,
"
To Serve and Pleasure
," and just want to let you know I greatly enjoyed it. In these types
of stories, I'm always a sucker for two things: mental transformations
and grand conspiracies. It's the kind of story I'd write if I wasn't
the proverbial monkey at the proverbial typewriter. :) I've
liked your stories because the main point of them is always to entertain.
Never do you ramble on and on as some authors do trying to make some epic
of classic literature. I like reading a well-plotted book, but when
it comes to stories of this type, I'm looking to be entertained.
On the other end of the spectrum, you have the writing chops to avoid what
other authors do and turn this type of story into a grocery list ("Then
he said the magic words. Then he snapped his fingers. She said
Yes Master. Etc") So keep up the good work and I'll be keeping an
eye out on your page for what ever comes next."
Unseen
Unheard, 10 June 2001
"Greetings JR, Finally able to write a
bit of fan mail, having discharged my obligation towards one of those stories
that jumps at your throat and doesn't let go. ;) Been itching
to say how much I've enjoyed "
To serve and
pleasure
," actually. You've written
some hot and heavy stuff there, and it's telling of your skill that the
heat you acheive rises way off the chart despite the fact that everyone
remains pretty much dressed for the length of the story. The opening
sets a nice stage, with intensity and emotion. Jessica's caring demeanor
is a sharp contrast to the dark hints of Mc manipulation dropped here and
there in the text. Liked the outfit she chooses to wear in the next
segment, and the usual polica banter, which gives some meat to the story
and camps the characters efficiently and nicely. The motel room shifts
things into high gear. I like mysterious MC, and Amber certainly is a practitionner
of such. I adore how some MCers revel in the power they have, and the young
girl toys with Jessica like a cat grinning at a mouse. Then, it gets even
*darker* - as she outlines in graphic detail how totally powerless Jessica
is. More socioapthic details arise from Amber's casual confession of the
killing... outlining the extend of her influence over females. Mmm...
as if that wasn't enough, we are left with some more intensity, in the
form of a nice closure, which emits intense heat from the implied Heather/Christina
coupling. All in all, a really great piece! Kudos!"
Iago,
Writer, 9 June 2001
"I've just read your revision of
"Cassandra-Vampiress"
,
and must say it's a subtle change, but interesting none the less.
I congratulate you again on another story well done."
"Ares
God Of War", 8 June 2001
"loved the story "
To Serve and Pleasure
" - lets have more!
unlike yourself, too often authors forget that mcstories.com readers are
more interested in the seduction rather than the actual sex- which you
can read anywhere."
Barry, 7 June 2001
"Read your latest (
To Serve & Pleasure
) <g> heh,
what a funny example of GMTA... Read my chapter of IFTL,A this update
for a bit of dejavu (it was actually written last week), though it's MUCH
harder to write such a scene in strict third person <g> ---gotta loved
those mindfucked police officers :-)---
Writerzblocked,
Writer, 2 June 2001
To
Serve and
Pleasure
: Agreeing with Boris' observation
that JRParz likes to pair off characters into lesbian couples. He
also likes to have the MCer create internal D/s balances. This story
was more of a force-of-nature account: the MCer is female but has a common
teen-MCer outlook, variously calculating and heedless, and while it's fun
watching it happen, it just sort of . . . happens. Not a problem
as far as it goes, and it meets (for me at least) JR's arousal criterion.
Trilby
else, Writer, 2 June 2001
"Oh, and of course J.R.Parz's latest
(
To Serve & Pleasure
). The idea of a MCer who goes around making lesbian couples is one
that he's used before but never quite as explicitly as here. There
may be mileage in it."
Boris Ludmenkov, Writer, 2 June 2001
"Greetings JR, E-mailing you on this quiet
saturday night of catching up on my MC reading, to deliver my kudos on
"Young
Sorceress."
Enjoyed it very much - f/f and
m/f moments both, but was also keen on the overall plot, which drove the
story forward seamlessly. There was assurance as it lept forward,
and that special brand of move and counter-move that I so enjoy in MC stories.
Cal's entry in Serena's life resounded as the careful chess move it was,
though it was almost overshadowed by the residual heat of Danielle and
Laura's preceding moments in the tub. ;) Another fine element: serial
recruitment as a means other that simple possession -- shaping slaves into
useful tools. This raises the stakes somewhat, and the story delivers in
this instance of suspense, as it does in the blissful dénouement
of a Serena powerless to resist Cal's demands that she release the girls,
in exchange for worshipping him. Very tight narrative. Excellent
work! (and apologies for taking so long to write!).
Regards",
-Iago, Writer, 5 May 2001
"Hi, I'm just writing to say how much I
liked your last story. After a treat like that I can't help but answer
your plea for feedback. Oh yes, I'm talking about the
Young
Sorceress
. Part of me says it's silly, but
it does push some of my main buttons so I can't deny that I like it. Dominance,
Submission and an overriding compulsion for sexual excess. The story is
one red-head away from perfection. (Does nobody else out there fall for
those crimson celtic lassies ?) Anyway, I hope this encourages you
that you have more admirers out here than you thought... yrs faithfully
(that's an expression, you understand)"
-Penny,
5 May 2001.
"p.s. 10" in a virgin arse...
definitely a fantasy best left on paper..."
"JR Parz: I just found your web site
and I just wanted to say that I love it! I have read your stuff before
and always enjoyed it. I don't know why I never checked out your
site. I am looking forward to reading all of the stuff on it.
I did notice that you had Cactusjuggler's story 'nicknames'. I love
that story and ever since i first read it a year or so ago i have been
looking for part two... Anyway thanks for all of the hard work you
put in your stories and (as I now see) your site. keep it up!!"
Howie.
30 Apr 2001
"I really enjoyed
Young
Sorceress
the first chapter was great and
the second finished just as strong. I know it must be a lot of hard work
to write as you do. I know I can't do it. Its easy to get the Ideas
but putting them down on paper is the trick. it may be selfish but I hope
you continue to write for a long time I have enjoyed your stories greatly."
CLUB
LODI , 29 Apr 2001
"Hello, I liked
"Young
Sorceress"
but only one problem the curse
would only last a maximum of 18 days. The other thing is black magic
is primarily a "Human" thing while sorcery is primarily a "Gifted" thing.
Sorcery is commonly associated with mental powers (psi, teleken, mind over
matter, and reality bending). Black Magic is more humanly magic based
on manipulating natural balance and energy. The curse so to speak
would have to do with the balance of things and the kiss would also have
to do with balance. The girl Selena would also have to be under the
sorceress' control for 54 days as well as having all the spells cast by
her and for her coming back at her during or after that time period.
Thus, one if at all uses black magic wisely so that the balances aren't
upset.
FYI."
Comidore,
27 Apr 2001
"Not a bad story
(Young
Sorceress)
. It comes very close to touching
all of those little buttons. I roleplay on dark fantasy BDSM MUSHes
and MUXes you see. I tend to dig things like magical mind and body
control, compulsions and posessions and such. I wrap well thought
out characters around those things. But that's enough about me.
What do you think about me? =D Nice story. Thanks for
writing it!,
Endora, 25 Apr 2001
Trilby else's Review on the MC Forum:
Young Sorceress
: JRParz removes the fourth
wall, again, at the end. (In a sense, a twist on what he did at the end
of Veronica Doll.) The new Cal's attitude was a little all over the place,
veering from SOB to solicitous, but maybe it was all the hormones . . .
anyway, the new victim's reactions are well drawn out (JR, at least, had
little self-restraint :) in spreading her ordeal over three separate occasions),
though this is more in the school of Trent Wolf's control-through-desire
than more direct MC. - Speaking of direct MC, did like the
Laura/Danielle dynamic--especially seeing their enslavement through
both their own eyes and Serena's--and their reactions even to Serena's
changes. - As for the ending, magus ex machina, but what the hell--it's
fantasy this time more than ever."
Tril, 23
Apr 2001
JR- Your writing is amazing... I just wanted
to tell you that I think
your Spell's 'R'
Us stories
are incredibly well written.
Keep up the GREAT work."
Rob, 23 Apr 2001
(Regarding
young sorceress, part 2
)... i just love
a happy ending! great work. thanks!" TiggrG, 23 Apr 2001
"Dear Sir, I realy liked your storie
young sorceress
. I wish you would continue
the storie or do one or two more in the same realm that you have created.
Terry,
23 Apr 2001
(Regarding Young Sorceress)
... Hello, I'm a long time fan and have read all of your stories....at
least the ones on your site if there are any more they are the only ones.
I must say I've been impressed by your style for over a year now, and I'm
also a up an coming writer myself, and I'd love some advice if you have
the time?"
Kyle, 23 Apr 2001
"
Aliens Gift
is an excellent series, Sir. I was not too interested at first but
on completing episode 5 I am intrigued to see what happens next. Well done!
Keep up the good work."
John, 22 Apr
2001
"I was reading
Alien
Gift
on the ASST website and I must say it
is a lot of fun. I only had time to read chapter one but so far it's
written in that complete fantasy dream that is just funny. For literary
quality, it needs something, either dialogue or some more details than
just the "willing" but for the most part I enjoy reading it a lot.
I never read the breast expansion stories but am familair with the type
of genre. I think it's funny that the protagonist basically has the
powers of Akira (anime reference) where he can control almost everything
except matter--ever give that a thought? I'm already guessing that
the test the aliens performed would be in judging whether a human with
supernatural (intergalatic?) powers would be corrupted and ultimately destroy
himself. Too many Spiderman morals--aka classic Caesarian concept
(I love alliteration too)--and I can't wait to read more. I had to
just let you know how much I enjoyed the story and wanted to wish you luck
with the rest. Good luck in life and in writing.
Stone,
22 Apr 2001
"Super story
(Young
Sorceress)
. Really good stuff!
Thanks."
Dan, 22 Apr 2001
"JR, I wanted to let you know that the
sequel
(to Young Sorceress)
made things quite right!
You have a great way with words and are able to ensnare your readers attention
along with other things. I look forward to reading more of your work. Please
keep turning out great stories such as this one. I am looking forward to
the next tale of Master PC. Thank again."
Bruce,
21 Apr 2001
"Favourite piece this week the
conclusion
of YOUNG SORCERESS
. J.R Parz, you old softie....
A happy ending for all concerned. Well, just this once..."
Boris
Ludmenkov, 21 Apr 2001
Dear Sir, I just read your story entitled
'Veronica
Doll...AKA Barbie'.
I found this story to
be quite interesting and arousing. I wanted to write and thank you for
this wonderful tale. I am quite interested in transformation stories, especially
ones with virtual reality or hypnosis as the form of transformation. I
am extremely interested in these subjects. I have often fantasized about
being transformed myself and becoming a real life 'living doll'. It sounds
very exciting to me. I am glad to find someone who writes these type of
stories, where I can Live out my fantasy vicariously through the characters.
Again, thank you and I hope you continue to write more in this fashion.
Thank you for taking the time to read this message. Take care. Sincerely,
charmed,
18 April 2001
"luv ur story
beach
babes
... more to cum??? xoxo"
wetslut,
12 Apr 2001
"hey there! my name is amanda, i
absolutly loved your story
"veronica doll
aka barbie"
! it was so hot n sexy and
such a great plot! dont u wish all girls could be like barbie hehe
:) i was totally turned on by your story, i had 2 stop during part
2 cus i came and finished it later :) again thank u 4 the story,
i hope u write more with it and feel free 2 email me backxoxoxoxoxo."
amanda,
10 Apr 2001
"hello sir my name is laurie. i really
enjoyed yr story "
veronica doll aka barbie
" a lot. i am more of the "love doll" type but my mistress and i
loved yr story a lot, it gave her some fun ideas for me and me for things
to wear (the pink french maid thing is brilliant)....although i dress more
"love doll/raver grrrlie" it will be fun to incorporate things like that.
so thank you for writing yr story, i hope there will be a sequel.
it is always exciting to read a story i like cus most of mcstories.com
is filler or "turn girls into sluts" crap. ugh. well i g2g
i have a nail appointment at 2 byes xoxoxoxoxo feel free 2 write back!"
laurie, 10 Apr 2001
"You have been the best and most productive
auther I have seen around. I would love to here your opinon of my first
work. It was submitted and accepted at www.mcstories.com . It contains
mind contol, m/f, f/f, masturbation, male dominate, exhibition and humilation.
The story is called SchoolDays. I would be honored if you read
it and told me your thoughts on it. Thank you."
Ghost
Writer, 10 Apr 2001
"tip o' the hat, jr"... "JR, the second
half of your
Veronica doll aka Barbie
story was delightful, same high quality writing as the first half.
Well done!"
Vendatrix, Writer, 10 Apr
2001
Hey there, I just started reading the
Veronica
Doll aka Barbie
story (must have missed it
the first time it came out) and my jaw hit the floor. What made you decide
to go with Smith College? Being a Northampton Native it took me by all
sorts of surprise."
William, 9 Apr 2001
I have very much enjoyed reading the
stories at your site. Excellent collection!"
Rob,
8 Apr 2001
"The Conclusion of Veronica Doll... AKA
Barbie:
JR Parz does another affecting
(and arousing, in case anyone doubted it) tale of slaves adjusting to their
slavery. Veronica/Barbie the submissive, and Rachel/Bambi the diehard,
are both very appealing, and their relationship resonates more than the
one they have with the Master. While he usually disclaims trying for this
effect, JR again makes their fight something tragic--which really increases
the eroticism for me: these woman are being turned into dolls, but they're
being converted from real, individuated people who mourn what they're losing."
Trilby else, 8 Apr 2001
"The Conclusion of
VERONICA
DOLL AKA BARBIE
is prime cut J.R.Parz with
all his trademark weirdness and themes reworked with a few new wrinkles.
I really must make use of the 'virtual lifetime' schtick sometime..."
Boris
Ludmenlov, 7 Apr 2001
"Hello JR. I have really enjoyed
reading your stories on your site that I found by way of the mcstories.com
links page. I was wondering if and when you plan on updating your stories/webpage.
I like to comment on
Young Sorceress
. I like you enjoy MC stories plus FF with close friends/sorority sisters.
This story was a bit of a downer. You see I like for the victims to escape
or think they escape. The story as it played out left no escape.. I hope
to see a sequel in the future.. Keep up yor wonderful output."
Dan,
5 April 2001