This was posted on the PLUME Discussion
Board by Xenos:
"What arouses me, does
not arouse others. And vice versa. I am a big fan of some of JR Parz stories
(
Master PC Part 1
is a big favorite) though some of his stuff (I've tried to get through
"
Barbie - Teen Agent
"
and it just doesn't do it for me though I didn't get very deep before I
gave up - must have been one of those days, but "
Janene's
Wishes
" does...) Granted, I haven't
had time to go read "The Agency" which he claims is his best, so I might
be off base.... Here are my thoughts on JR's stuff, and writing as a rule...
JR has a very "here's the way it is and here's what's happening" kind of
style. He lays it out on the table, and gives it to you. If you like the
"format" then you like his stories. I will be honest here - I'm doing graphics
for one of his new stories, and I love it. I love the fact that people
like his stories. I like the way he writes and I find it fascinating.
But I also - as a writer, mind you, find it frustrating that he takes a
story and tackles it the way he does. I'd do it differently. To ME - I
could make it better. But, then again, I thought I could have done the
orginal Star Wars better. Ya get what I mean? Yeah, you would do it differently
too. As far as context goes (i.e. - those saying they hate MC stories)
That's a matter of taste. I'm the same way, too. To me, there's nothing
more boring than two people meeting and having sex in a story. I can do
that in real life. Any sex site that has stories has these. The BEArchive
has something different. JRParz has something different. MCStories.com
has something different. I applaud these sites because they aren't your
typical "Here is a sex story" site. Gimme both - gimme all!"
Xenos,
From DynaDames: Live the Adventure!, 4 May 99
"I am SO frustrated (literally!) and need
your help. I stumbled onto your site by pure luck, and know I bookmarked
it so I could come back to read at my leisure. But when I tried to
access your site today, all I got was a page saying the website I just
came from had given me a free gift - the Electron Search Engine.
And then I get stuck and can't back out of it. I really want to read
those stories. And I'd much rather have them as my gift than that
stupid ol' search engine. Can you help? Ah, but I haven't got
a mouse. Just a remote keyboard. What I wouldn't give for a
computer right now! But thank you for pointing out another avenue
of access to your work. Please don't take offense, but as a woman,
I can't for the life of me understand why I am so drawn to your stories.
But I am, so there it is."
Patti, 4
May 99
Regarding the Sex Genie:
""Man, this dialogue can certainly get dumb at times." Yes...yes
of course. LOL! Parz you never cease to amaze me. You're stories are so
fun to read. I had been reading stories on Fictionmania and
after three stories in a row, I was beginning to remember why I don't visit
Fictionmania all that much. The stories are too gritty and, well, generic.
I was searching through the recently submitted stories, and I happened
to see your name. I thought, "Kewl. A JR Parz story." So I clicked on it
and started reading. I guess the reason I got so excited was because
it was so much better than the ones I had been reading. I actually
sat up in my chair when I got to the the part about the dumb dialogue,
and that is no small feat. It seemed like everything in that story
was just so refreshing. My favorite part was when the Sex Genie materialized
naked. LOL! And then she starts talking like a valley-girl.
Leviathan,
writer, 1 May 99
Regarding The Agency:
"Great Story! I got wet imagining myself as 'Tracy'. I'm looking forward
to the rest of the story."
kris, 30 Apr 99
Regarding Dominoe: Daughter of Desire.
"JR, Oh man! I have a big smile on my face right now! I just
read your story and let me tell you, I'm almost speechless. First
off, an excellent read. I flew through it the first time like a little
kid on Christmas morning, because I couldn't wait to read it, and then
I gave it a second read to really get into it. I know I'm going to have
to read it again just to get all the nuances.
PERFECTION, my friend. I couldn't have asked
for anything better. You captured Dominoe perfectly and even added a few
of your own cool details, like the capped tooth. This was exactly
what I was hoping for when I came up with this idea, but I'm afraid the
rest of the writers are going to have alot to live up to. (I hope they
don't get intimidated by this.)
The Parz humor, the plot, the pacing, the
characters (Stephanie...mmmm... did I mention arousing?) all added up to
one very cool story. The Grey Archive readers are in for a treat.
My hats off to you! And I'm still smiling! P.S. It's already off
to the Grey Archive presses. I hope it gets posted Sunday!"
Trent
Wolf, Writer, 22 Apr 99
"Great story (
The
Agency
)! I have been collecting Russ
Martin stories. The ones that I have are; education of jen... , rhea,...
resurection of... obsession of ... devil and lisa black... the desacration
of jessica young. Please forgive the spelling, I do not have them in front
of me.. I also have a short story from alfred hic magazine. There
is anouther russ martin who wrote westerns.. I emailed him and he said
that he was not the same author. What else has R martin done? is
there any info about him on the net? i have been looking. I was told that
there was a collection of short stories from various authors in a book
with the number 13 in the title. He has supposed to have contributed
to this. also do you know if it was a pen name? Also do you
know about the Fritzen Ravenswood? Thanks, and I will await Chaper
III for the Agency!"
Jason, 19 Apr 99
"JR, You write some really hot fiction!
You've given me all sorts of ideas for some new pictures. Drop me a line
when you finish that story."
s. carter,
Poser Renderer, 19 Apr 99
"JR, I just finished
The
Sex Genie
. As usual, you have come up with
another sexy, arousing, and humorous story. The erotic scenes were very
well done, and the ending was great! How the heck do you do it?"
Trent
Wolf, writer, 19 Apr 99
"I've been reading some of your stories.
Love 'em! keep up the good work. Heard you'll be working on
some DynaDames stuff too (I'm a member of the Electronic Erotica ring and
a frequent visitor to the DynaDames site). Can hardly wait to read
it!"
JetM, 18 Apr 99
"I was waiting for the second part of a
witch
cast her spell
, any news when you will release
it. I find the first part excellent of course and wou`ll like
to see the rest of the stories... Thanks in advance, a fan waiting
for the best."
Roger, 17 Apr 99
This was posted to the Mind Control Erotica
Forum Regarding a topic called: Mind Control Preferences...
"I don't think it can be broken down by category. I mean, take one
of J.R.'s stories...say
Barbie - Teen Agent
(JR, part three is one of my favourite things to read...). The *device*
to get her 'controlled' is science...but it could just as easily have been
drugs, magic, telepathy...it wouldn't have made much of a difference in
the story. The story is what makes it...the kind of mind control
*usually* is just a story device to get you to the heart of the story.
Another JR...the SpellsRUs stories. that seems to be magic...but if you
changed it so that it was s drug that changed tony to toni instead of a
genie, would that matter? Its the quality of the story, and the writing,
that make the difference. Just my opinion."
David,
14 Apr 99
"I just read
'The
Sex Genie'
and I'm sorry to say that I was
very disappointed. I never used to be into transgender stories until I
read a couple of yours which I really enjoyed. The reason I enjoyed your
stories is because they didn't fall into the typical transgender formula
which I always encountered. The formula always goes that a man is involuntarily
transformed into a woman by another woman as either a punishment for some
misdeed (either real or perceived) or to make him a 'better person'. Unfortunately,
'The Sex Genie' falls into this category.
Specifically, I have two problems with this
story. The first is that you never really say what it is about Tony that
Cheryl thinks needs improving to make him a 'better person'. If it is the
fact that he wanted to make Lori his sex slave then this brings me to the
second problem. Cheryl is an immense hypocrite. She calls Tony an asshole
for making Lori into his sex slave but then turns around and makes both
Tony and Lori into her sex slaves. At least when Lori was Tony's sex slave
she kept her sexual orientation. When Cheryl makes Lori into her slave,
she forces her to be a lesbian. In addition, the only reason Tony went
after Lori is because Cheryl dumped him with no explanation.
You also do something else that I find annoying
in mind control stories. You try to convince the reader that the story
has a happy ending because Tony accepts and enjoys his new role. Once again,
two problems. First, it's probable that the only reason Tony is happy in
his new role is because he has been magically forced to get pleasure from
serving Cheryl. Is that true happiness? The second (and more striking)
problem is ... what about Lori? She was having a hard enough time dealing
with her unnatural attraction to Tony, how would she deal with her attraction
to, not only another woman, but a complete stranger. I can't see how her
subjugation and the loss of her promising career could lead to happiness.
Despite an attempt to make it appear otherwise,
this story is simply another case of a person (or persons) falling victim
to a mind controller who has no regard for their feelings or wishes. In
another e-mail you agreed with me that you couldn't understand how someone
could love another person but want to change them drastically. And yet,
that is exactly what you've done. Cheryl says she loves Tony deep down
but any similarity between Tony and Toni is purely coincidental.
Saying that she did it to make him a 'better person' doesn't change the
fact that she made him a different (I mean really different) person. In
short, she sacrificed love for sex.
I'll continue to read (and probably enjoy)
your stories but in my opinion you struck out with this one. Sorry if I
sound harsh but that's just the way I feel.
P.S. This story could have used a little
more proofreading. Some of the sentences don't make sense and there are
a number of typographical errors. For example, what are like-like poses?
:-) "
MC Writer, writer, 14 Apr 99
"Greetings, I just wanted to write
to say that I have enjoyed your current installments of
"The
Agency"
, and I look forward to more of this
story and any others you write. You are one of my favorite authors
at mcstories.com. Thanks for nice work.
ZeroCool,
12 Apr 99
"Hey JR, i *loved*
the
agency part 2
. some of your best writing
yet. very hot and something of an interesting departure from your
usual mc proclivity in that the agency tries to fool the girls into thinking
that they really love each other. it'll be like the initial (&
unfortunately underdeveloped) storyline in Marlissa's The Conditioners
where the two girls start a torid relationship. I also really like the
detail you put into the "programming."
ae,
writer, 9 Apr 99
"Good story (
Master
PC
), poetic ending i must admit, you did write
in the inability to delete the Master Computer CD though wich kinda leaves
the story openended. Could be interesting if you finish it, leaving readers
in suspence is cruel, but perhaps i can help: (I don't know if you
know this or not) shutting down MacroShaft WinBlows while in the Operating
System and not at the "it is now safe to turn off your computer" is dangerious
cause it can hurt it. perhaps the Master program could go insane and strat
throwing around random commands or something, thats up to you as the author
to descide. Course you could e-mail me the Master Computer program and
i could creat some really great stories for you, hehe. Well one can
dream, anyway keep up the good stories."
Omega,
6 Apr 99
Regarding Alien's Gift 4 (& 5?):
"JR,
Before I say anything else, I must ask you what is your issue with incest?
In my opinion I find that to be a hard issue to cover. If you must
carry on with these tactics, please do not let Colt go all the way with
her. The fact that she (((under remote control))) gave Colt a BJ was risky
enough. As vengeful and evil as Brandy is, she should not go to such terrible
means in order to free herself. If she transfers her powers to Sheri,
how is she going to get them back. If you can, allow Colt to defeat Brandy
-- without conquering his sister (even if she's only his half-sister).
To put it mildly, in-laws are okay (if they are NOT blood relatives), but
actually performing in something of that nature with blood kin should never
be thought of, and NEVER SHOULD IT GO PAST 3RD BASE! Before she throws
herself unwittingly at her brother, let him repair the part of her mind
that repulses to such actions (as if he knew Brandy would go that low.)
I'd also like to see if Colt could rescue Jade or the other women with
PUSH powers so that he could defeat this *___* (use any explicitive.).
It's nice that Colt allowed more freedom in the minds of Leah, Monica,
and Holly. I don't see the purpose in permanently possessing Danielle when
she could just be with him whenever he summoned her, allowing her to live
her life when she wasn't in use. You write a great series, but it
becomes too quickly clouded by the star character fantasizing about his
sister and remolding her into a sex-pot for his personal use. At least
have him to repair her badly damaged mind even if he is never able to possess
her again. P.S.: Explore what possessed Brandy to be so evil.
P.P.S: I Imagine if I had those powers. Professor X couldn't hold a candle
to me...."
Savannius, 5 Apr 99
" Hi JRParz, Just thought I'd finally
drop you a line and tell you how much I enjoy your work. I've been
following your site since last July and I haven't been disappointed.
My favorites are, of course,
Alien's Gift
,
The
Agency
, and
Master
PC
. But, I also like
Janene's
Wishes
. In addition, I am in your debt
for directing me to the BE Archive. So, keep writing. ps. I
can't wait to see the newest installment of
Master
PC
. When I got to the end of part 2
I almost screamed "It can't end this way!" So, I'm glad that it won't.
:) "
zon, 5 Apr 99
I had responded to a enjoyable story
I read on the mcstories.com called; The Thought Controlled Nanite
Interface by Master Spon...Here's his response:
"Thanks for your comments, they REALLY meant a lot to me. I'm a big fan
of yours and was thoroughly surprised when I saw you sent me some mail.
Thanks again, and keep up the good work on your stories!"
Master
Spon, writer,5 Apr 99
"
The Agency
and Other stories... Hi! Just a short note to thank you for
the work you have been doing. I especially like the way the Agency
is going. Have a good one."
Jammar,
5 Apr 99
"great writer! i just wanted to say
that i think you're a great writer. i've been admiring your stories
for quite some time now. where do you get your ideas from?"
Derek,
4 Apr 99
"I read
part
2 of 'The Agency'
and really loved it.
I'm glad that you haven't made Dave and Max and the other members of the
Agency into sex addicts or megalomaniacs like so many other stories do.
The number of stories where someone uses the kind of power the Agency offers
to gain revenge on an old girlfriend or someone who rejected them is immense.
The number of stories where the same power is used to illicit love in someone
the controller actually cares for is far too small. Thanks for helping
to balance things out. Also, congratulations for leaving Gina and Tracy
basically unaltered outside their attraction to their respective bosses.
I've never understood stories where a guy is attracted to a girl but when
he gets the chance, he drastically alters her personality to make her act
completely different. You seem to have realized that, in the real world,
attraction is more than physical and the things that made you like or love
that person shouldn't be changed. Although you state that your story
is inspired by Marlissa's 'The Conditioners', I enjoyed your story much
more because it didn't have many of the cruel streaks that 'The Conditioners'
had (no offense to Marlissa, just my personal preferrence). I voted for
'The Agency' as my favorite story on your site and was disappointed when
it only came in third in your poll but at least it placed. I look forward
to part 3. On a side note, I'd like to make a couple of comments
about
'Master PC'
.
I noticed that many of the readers' comments said that they felt that Adam
did nothing wrong and didn't deserve the fate that befell him. They commented
that he wasn't evil or mean any harm and that the people he controlled
enjoyed themselves. They seem to have forgotten that Samantha retained
all her original thoughts and memories when she wasn't in his presence
and knew she was being controlled against her will. Although he may not
have meant to be evil or malicious, Samantha obviously didn't enjoy being
controlled and, therefore, was understandably upset. I personally felt
that her revenge was far too drastic but I did believe that Adam needed
to be taught a lesson. That brings me to the point of this message (I bet
you didn't think I had one). I see in your description of part 3 that Adam
will probably regain control of the program. PLEASE let him have learned
something from his experience. Hopefully, because of his own experience
with being controlled, Adam will empathize with Samantha and realize why
she was pissed off and did what she did. If he turns out to be as cruel
as Samantha and merely uses the program to gain revenge on her, I will
be extremely disappointed. Don't give in to all those readers who
seem to see nothing wrong with what Adam did and feel that he is the wronged
party and that Samantha deserves whatever gruesome fate Adam can come up
with for her. I can't, won't and wouldn't even want to tell you how to
write a story but please keep these comments in mind."
MC Writer, Writer, 1 Apr 99
"Regarding
Master
PC
... Why -didn't- Adam improve his
own attributes, anyhow? The first chapter was good, the second
chapter was mostly better, but I didn't like the ending. I was wondering
if you would mind me using the Master PC program in one of my own stories?"
Reader (no funny business),
30 Mar 99
"Regarding your
Master
PC
story... I just happened across it,
and I just wanted to say I fucking loved it!! Most of the Breast
Expansion stories get really freaky, but you kept it at a nice, erotic
level. Also, I liked how you explained what all the characters were
thinking as they acted on the commands of the programmer. Great story.
Kudos. And the ending? Fucking mean. It was great;
you are a good writer; I'll give you that, (and that's coming from a writer,
himself). Keep up the good work. I also wanted to note that
a unknown screen popped up while Samantha was deleting the program.
Could this make way for a Master PC 3? I would love to read it.
Just a suggestion. =)"
Thinker, 30 Mar
99
"Hello. I just read your story
Alien's
Gift
and have a small problem with
Chapter
4
. In it Colt had a small battle with
Brandy Snow and towards the end of it you had Brandy transfer all one hundred
percent of her power into Sheri's mind. She couldn't do this because
you had Colt penetrate Brandy's core with; (((You must always obey me,
you want to obey me, and are not allowed to use your gift against me or
anyone else, ever again.))). So even that 'push' Brandy gave to Sheri
would have been - her using her powers and she couldn't possibly
do that beacuse Colt stoped her from ever using them again."
Tel,
30 Mar 99 -
In my defense, I instant
messaged the reader and explained that Brandy didn't use her power against
Colt, she simply gave her power away to Sheri...and by having Sheri in
possession of the power, Brandy could verbally tell Sheri what to do against
Colt because the power was no longer hers.
Tel
pointed out that Colt's 100% intellect wouldn't allow for that loop hole.
We respectfully disagreed. Incidentally, the reader liked the story
and said it was the first time he ever responded to a writer.
Regarding The ending of "Master PC 2":
An
interesting kind of justice. I like it =)"
Trav, 30 Mar 99
Regarding "The Agency, Chapter Two (Roommates):
"Terrific.
You are indeed on to a great story. Allow me to caution you about
a few things however: Never get too many characters in one of these
sex stories. Even in novels, I have found that six to eight main
characters work best. If you have more than that, the reader loses
interest in the overall scope. Graham Watkins, a writer I greatly
admire, keeps the number of main characters in check, as does Laymon, as
does Martin. It makes it easier for you too to focus on the erotic idiosyncrasies
of each character. Nevertheless, one shouldn't limit the number of
characters to merely two either. alt.sex.stories is filled with bad
writers who have no concept of plotting multidimensional works. You
can have any number of small characters with small parts, but main characters
really should be limited. My favorite erotic novels usually involve
three couples going on a vacation together: one couple is worldly, one
naive, and one curious. They wind up
swapping partners. (I am not a swinger,
and don't think this is advisable for the health of the marriage, but it
is erotic as hell to contemplate). John Updike's "Couples" comes
to mind. You are good and getting better--and there is the element
of suspense with Tracy and Gina (i.e., will they, or won't they?).
I am especially impressed with this computerization programming technique
you use to condition the women. That is a terrific angle and one
I haven't seen in erotic horror before. Bravo, for bringing that
over from sci-fi. I also applaud you on the use of compound/complex
sentences. It shows maturity as a writer. Nothing bores
me more than to read simple sentences in sex stories. You are very
creative, but you do need to add some more character traits. Perhaps
Tracy having a habit of biting her lower lip when nervous, or Gina having
a habit of...whatever. For a character to be fully appreciated a
reader must have a lot of detail (this is why I advise never getting
too many characters in a story). CHARACTER MAKES THE STORY
SUSPENSE KEEPS THE READER READING. Also, variety is a key I
look for. You have tapped into this by having Gina as a brunette
and Tracy as a blonde, but don't forget that sometimes women in their 30s
can be incredibly sexy as well. Adversarial psychological profiles
also works. The good girl with the not-so-good girl. The choirgirl
with the cheerleader-that-did-the-team. The possibilities are endless.
I encourage you to continue. You are excellent and I think this is
your best work. I enjoyed it tremendously."
Eros,
29 Mar 99
Regarding "Master PC":
"Started
out great -- Ending sucked seriously! (even if it did fit)."
Xanthos,
28 Mar 99
I had requested to download some Poser Art
from a Poser Renderer...Here's the response:
"JR
- I have been a fan of your stories for some time - I regularly read
at MCStories, and at the BEArchive. I have no problem with letting you
use the images, but I think you might like this answer better - why don't
you let me know exactly what you have going on in a scene - or, let me
take a look at a story you are working on and I'll make some illustrations
SPECIFICALLY for that story. In return, I ask that you let me mirror the
story here in a new section. I'll link up to your site for more stories
by you and you can link up to my site for more stories by me. I'm pretty
sure that you're getting this via E-Mail, but I'm going to E-Mail you now
with some more info on how to get ahold of me so we can talk through our
ideas."
Grumpus, 27 Mar 99
I don't always post what is said on my Forum
- but this was some advice that caught my attention:
"Enforced feminization isn't a turn-on to me. I have read a lot of it,
find it sort of intriguing as a sub-genre over in the alt.sex stories.TG
newsgroups, but to tell you the truth, it just isn't my cup of tea. A writer
must always remember his audience. By and large, since JR Parz is writing
for Russ Martin fans, he should stick to heterosexual mind-control themes.
Other writers should tackle other themes. I will give you an illustration
of a writer who blew it by mixing up his audience. Gary Jennings. He wrote
an absolute masterpiece of eroticism called The Journeyer. INCREDIBLY BRILLIANT.
Basically, the erotic adventures of Marco Polo. Jennings put his name on
the map with this book. Everyone who loved erotic themes couldn't wait
to read his next book. He then wrote Spangle and Raptor. Spangle was about
a circus and Raptor about the adventures of a hemaphoradite. Sales plunged
and Jennings's career was nearly destroyed in the publishing world. He
had to return to his bonafide money maker first book which was Aztec in
order to get back on track. Key: KNOW YOUR AUDIENCE. Don't try to second
guess the tastes of your readers. If you do venture into other themes,
use a pseudonym."
Eros, 27 Mar 99
"i just read your part two of
Master PC
, i must say, i like it, in a way
.. . but i somehow wish there was a much more satisfying ending .. .. ;-P",
Ng Tian Hui, 24 Mar 99
"Just saying nice job JR. Just read
about half your stories in 1 sitting. Great job! My favorites were
Agency
and
Master PC
."
Richard,
21 Mar 99
"I injoyed reading The
Aliens
Gift
so much is there more or can you send
me the whole text or is there a web page that carries the whole story?"
Edip,
20 Mar 99
"jr... I'd love to be magically transformed
back into a pretty, carefree teenager. I'd love to be *made* to explore
bi-sexual fantasies. Your stories have had a definite affect ...
I can't think of anything that's more humiliating (and therefore erotic
to me) than for one woman (normally hetero) to please another woman &
become her slave - forever! Since this is something that males obviously
find pleasing ... it only adds to the humiliation aspect."
allison, 18 Mar 99
Regarding Master PC, Part 2:
"Great ending! I liked the way you left an opening by talking about
a message that she didn't look at, things like that can come back to haunt
you. Keep up the good work."
Ray,
18 Mar 99
REVIEW POSTED ON THE PLUME DISCUSSION BOARD
IN BEARCHIVE:
Review
of Master PC, Part 2
"Reading over Master
PC, Part 2 for the second time, I came to realize one simple fact:
If ever I want to read some of the best and worst of what breast expansion
fiction has to offer, I need look no further than the name JR Parz.
I wish I didn't have to state what is already obvious to most people, but
I fear I must. JR Parz is a master of mind manipulation. The ease
at which he turns a seemingly
uneventful
situation into a powerful battle of wills is unrivaled. It's frightening
when you realize just how morally wrong it is to control someone's thoughts.
I guess the only thing more frightening is the fact that Parz actually
uses this stuff to elicit an erotic response from his readers. I think
there is no better example than when the main character of Master PC (Adam)
seduces one of the girls in his school (Heather). The ensuing spectacle
is probably one of the most disturbing yet erotic scenes you'll ever read
in a BE story. This is JR Parz at his finest.
Content-wise,
there is just very little to complain about. You might find a few minor
spelling and grammar errors here and there, but you probably won't notice
after the first chapter. There's just too much going on. One of the easiest
things to overlook about Master PC, Part 2 is the extremely "polished"
feel of the story. There is a LOT of attention to detail, and no character
goes without his or her share of story time. I hope I'm not the only one
that has noticed JR Parz has a unique writing style that keeps improving
with every story. As the name suggests, Part 2 is the sequel/conclusion
to the now famous/infamous Master PC. Don't, however, read this story expecting
more of the same. Part 2's plot takes a slight detour from the original's
frantic pace. The story moves quite a bit slower, and it spends a lot of
time back-pedaling, going over the specifics of the previous story (and
generally tying up a few loose ends.) At some points, the details get a
little tedious (almost to point of being tiresome). You won't get as intense
as you did while reading the first one. The only real weakness that
I can see for this story is also (strangely) its greatest strength. I've
always felt that getting inside the characters' heads, finding out theirthoughts
and feelings, is a more powerful form of erotic storytelling. Too many
authors pass up the opportunity to strengthen a sex scene or BE scene by
telling the thoughts and emotions of the characters involved. MPC, Part
2 outshines all other stories in this category. You know what every single
character is thinking and feeling throughout the entire story. The only
problem is that Parz went a little overboard. The story spends so much
time dwelling on the individual thoughts of the characters that the action
sequences seem too few and far between. I can already see the more superficial
readers "panic-clicking for porn." Oh well. In closing, I came away
from MPC, Part 2 very satisfied. I think a lot of people miss the whole
idea of what the word conclusion means, but Parz seems to have found it.
Sure, there will always be those people that refuse to read anything labeled
"Part 2," but I
urge those people
especially to read this story. I guarantee you'll remember it long after
you've read it. The ending alone is worth the price of admission.
PS. Oh yeah. Thumbs up."
Leviathan,
writer, 17 Mar 99.
Regarding
Master
PC
: "I didnt like the ending, but I
did see the "hook" to do a sequel... Last message on screen could
have been PROGAM DELETE PROTECTED --COMMAND ABORTED or MOVING PROGRAM TO
RECYCLE BIN. It would be interested in seeing adam get control of
the computer program again but this time use it smarter. He could
have someone else type in the commands to fix his computer problem."
Bruce,
16 Mar 99
"Thank you for sharing your story,
Master
PC
. I enjoyed it very much, because it is
so well written and flows very smoothly. You really have a knack for character
development. I must admit that I was disappointed in the ending --
not in the way it was written or anything like that -- and you certainly
have every right to write anything you wish. Adam's fate, although
well deserved, seemed too extreme, that I felt sorry for him at the end.
You have a great talent, and I hope you continue to write. I will definitely
keep my eye out for more of your stories. Again thanks for your hard
work."
Ben, 16 Mar 99
"Praise for the Master... Loved
Alien's
Gift 4
. A guy could grow to loathe a
chick like Brandy. Thank god she isn't really out there. Can't wait
for 5... Keep the faith... You are the greatest. PS Spicy
Spice for White Intern. She has my vote."
Michael,
16 Mar 99
Regarding
Master
PC
: "Great story but a garbege ending.
Me and a couple of dozen other readers are pleading for you to revise the
ending."
Axeman, 15 Mar 99
I had complimented draka69 for the story
"ReGenesis: Acquisition" and the response read as follows...
"Thank you. I have a couple other ideas on the same theme thought
out, but I'm debating whether to develop them or not. I probably
will, just have to sit down and write them out. I'm sure Amber will
figure prominently in all of them. Thanks for your comments.
I also liked your stories, especially
Sabrina
& Tabitha,
and
Jennifer's Transformation. Pleasure Chips
was good too.
draka69, 15 Mar 99
Regarding
Master PC:
"That was quite a twist for
an ending. The kid got what he deserved but it gave me cold chills.
A beautifully written and highly erotic story from start to finish."
JDG,
15 Mar 99
Regarding
Master
PC
: "You want thoughts on your ending.
Well, I like guys who are gentler to begin with, but I also like happier
endings...and I'll point out that while Samantha removed the program from
the hard drive, she didn't touch the CD he installed it from!"
lee,
15 Mar 99
"Hi... I don't think that was a very
good ending for
master PC
,
though it was original and had a good twist. I don't think it was
very good, plot wise. Are you going to make a continuation?
Because it mentions Samantha did not see the message when shutting off
the computer."
Thorn, 14 Mar 99
"
I love the
site
, I think it's so cool. Why don't you
gather up all your short stories and go to a publisher with them. I think
they would be good enough to have published!!! How long have you been writing?
I have written some stories myself but they usually just end up in the
trash. I range my stories from fantasy to intense erotic, or poetry.
But I like your site!!"
Shdw, 14 Mar
99
"hi, I just finished reading
"Master
PC" part two
. I just wanted to drop
a line and say how much I enjoyed it. I was glad to see he got a taste
of his own medicine at the end. Just wondering, do you have any other
stories along that line?"
Brian, 14 Mar 99
"Hi, Just a quick (real quick unfortunetly)
note to say that I love all the stories of yours I have read so far and
hope to read more. I also REALLY hope there is a chapter two for
"
The Agency
"
in the works, as that is a facorite of mine. Thanks for the awesome
stories!" ~
Term, 14 Mar 99
"You are a nasty person. I just read
'Alien's
Gift 4'
and enjoyed it immensely. The cliffhanger,
however, was pure evil. I can't wait for part 5 and hope you take it off
the back burner as soon as possible. By the way, do you plan on doing
any more with the Suzy Spice stories? I was just wondering. Keep
up the great work."
MC Writer, writer,
13 Mar 99
"Regarding the ending of
Cassandra...Vampiress
;
I was wondering if you were going to finish the ending instead of leaving
it at a little twist. I wanna know what is going to happen next!!! Please
finish it and post it."
Shdw, 13 Mar 99
"Hi, I have read your stories (
Master
PC 1&2
) and must say, they are really
hot stuff. I really loved the first part, (although I had minor moral
scrutinies), but could not accept the ending of the second part. It was
OK to punish Adam for what he did, but his victims had fun in their roles.
Samantha did something else. Being selfish like Adam, she condemned
him to everlasting torture by trying to delete the program. It was cute
to write that she didn't read the last news on the screen. This left an
escape for a third part exept bringing in some new device. I have added
to this mail a modest proposal how the story could continue, leaving the
end open to your disposal. I't love to read more of your works, so please
continue..."
Yours, K.-K. Harden, Germany,
13 Mar 99
"I like your stories very much and I can't
wait for you to finish
Cassandra - Vampiress
.
All of your stories are great but I like Cassandra the best."
Barry,
12 Mar 99
"Hi... My name is Elizabeth.
My boy friend and I love reading your stories. When are u going to
update your page?"
Elizabeth, 10 Mar
99
"I loved your story
Master
PC
. Could you please E-mail me copies
of some of the other stories you have written. thanks."
Coyo,
7 Mar 99
(Regarding Master PC2): "i
love it and hated it, i love the part on how adam was in control of heather's
orgasm, but i am not in favor of samantha dominating the story, if you
can for the third part , if u chose to have it, please change it back,
it is so much more cooler that way, thanks." a big fan, 7
Mar 99
(Sabrina & Tabitha - Teen Witches):
"outstanding...pure
enjoyable entertainment....thanks" adex, 6 Mar 99
"With all honesty, I cannot say I liked
your ending (Master PC2). The
story is great, but the actual ending is a spoiler. Adam never seemed evil
or unkind in any way, so I feel more contempt toward the "avenger" that
the one who is avenged upon. He did not deserve it, so it just leaves me
feeling angry." Matt*W, 5 Mar 99
Regarding
Master
PC 2
: "JR, As I've stated before,
the ending was unusual - not what I was expecting. However, it was
a super story and I thoroughly enjoyed it. Please remember that you
are the writer. Not everyone will agree or appreciate what you are
doing, but it is an art in inself to be able to write. There are
thousands, tens of thousands, hundreds of thousands or more that will read
your stories over the next year or so. Some will love them, some
will like them, and some will hate them. You can't please everybody!
You have the ability to write, and write WELL. Enjoy that.
I don't agree with everything that you write (as evidenced by some of my
comments in the past), but I DO ENJOY READING YOUR WORKS. Keep the
faith, write when you can, and I stand ready to proof/review/comment on
your efforts. Thanks for the work that you do - I appreciate it,
and I know that others do also."
jdw,
proof reader, 3 Mar 99
Regarding
Master
PC 2
: "While I have enjoyed many of
your stories, I am sorry to say I did not enjoy the conclusion of Master
PC. Though I suppose your intent is that the reader feel that Adam 'got
what he deserved', the effective ruin of Adam's life seemed far too vengeful
to me. And I thought there was even less justification for what happened
to Heather. While Adam's actions were obviously wrong, your heroine could
have used the program in the computer to correct the problem
she faced more mercifully. Doing so would have shown she was wiser than
Adam, and would have made it a better story."
Glenn,
2 Mar 99
"I just finished reading the
conclusion
of Master PC
and enjoyed it immensely. I wasn't
quite sure that Heather deserved the fate she received (never being able
to orgasm again as long as she lives) but otherwise it was well-done. However,
you seem to have fallen into a familiar trap that your proofreader didn't
catch. By using very common names when writing a story it is sometimes
easy to confuse them. In this case you use the name Heather instead of
Samantha twice. The first is in part III when you say 'As much as Lisa
enjoyed her sex with Adam, she herself felt consumed with Heather'.The
second is in part IX when you say '"So this is how you've been spending
your time...an amazing little program, isn't it." stated Heather,
feeling much more comfortable in this new role'. Both of these should be
Samantha instead of Heather. Other than that, the story was well
written and very entertaining. I was just wondering whether the message
that appeared before Samantha shut down the computer was an opening for
more possible chapters."
MC Writer,
Writer, 2 Mar 99
"After reading
Master
PC 2
, it reminded me of an awesome writer.
He went by Parker. His stories were awesome. The characters
were well developed, and the sex scenes were HOT! He was my favorite
author. But there was 1 thing that pissed me off. He wrote
the worse endings!!! Meaning unhappy endings. I read through
hundreds of K of text just to find out the leads get screwed! That's
my 1 gripe, but it's very understandable. Everyone loves a happy
ending? I thought it was an unexpected ending. It surprised
me. I identify with the controller, so when he gets the shaft, it
ticks me off. But that's just personal preference. The story
itself was awesome, and I enjoyed every word. Don't get me wrong.
I LIKED the story. The above is just my overall opinions on unhappy
endings. But it seemed the unhappy ending actually fit in better
with the story. So great job on the conclusion. And I look
foward to
Aliens gift IV
.
I look foward to the
Agency
even more! With Regards."
Jonn CM, 2
Mar 99
"
Master
PC
: The Conclusion, eh?? Don't believe a word
of it.... A nice story and an especially nice way to ensure that
there can be a sequel. I can see at least two ways to go... If you
ever find one of those Master PC discs, do send me one. Mind you, with
my luck it would need a Pentium to run."
Boris
Ludmenkov, Writer, 2 Mar 99
Subject: Master PC Conclusion -
"Loved the story up to the end. It seems that it ended rather quick almost
like the castration of Adam. Samantha could have had abit more imagination
on her revenge."
Michael, 1 Mar 99
"To whom it may concern, Great Site!
Wow! I love everything of yours I have read. I have never ever been so
turned on, and I hope you go on writing forever. I would love, more than
anything, to be in one of your worlds, to gain powers over women, or become
one myself as in your stories. If you ever find a way to make any of it
happen, please make the method known to me! Till then, I'll just
keep reading and enjoying the best erotic fiction written. Thanks, JR."
Jaime,
Sydney Australia. 1 Mar 99
"JR, (Regarding
Master
PC2
)... What a super, out of the blue
ending!! A very unusual ending, and storyline. I thoroughly
enjoyed the ending - I thought that you might have had him use his powers
on a teacher, but it was super nevertheless."
jdw,
proof reader, 28 Feb 99
"Is anyone else counting the days towards
the release of
Master PC2
?
Heh heh, sorry couldn't resist. Anyway, on to my point of the post.
I just wanted to say I love the stories here, and I hope you write more
of the Transgender variety. I feel that you have a real flair for them.
Thanks again, and keep up the good work. There aren't many good Mind Control/Transgender/
Breast Expansion/shrinking woman story sites out there."
Rincewind,
18 Feb 99
"Hi, I just finished reading
all
the stories
you have on your website (althougth
it took a while, very much well worth it) and I just wanted to congratulate
you on a very good job on each and every one of them! My personal
favorites right now are the
teenage witches
and Aliens Gift
, and I can't wait for the
newest chapters to be released. P.S. I know this isn't likely
but I was wondering if there was any chance I could get a taste of the
next chapters for Sabrina & Tabitha - Teenage Witches or Alien's Gift?"
Later
on the same day, he said:
"I like
Alien's Gift so far because of how you made cole and his personality, it
doesn't go with the average guy who gets really cool powers making everyone
in a 2 mile radius sex slaves... Keep up the good work and just remember
to have fun!"
Rob, 18 Feb 99"
A Reader Responding to the Poll:
"I
had a hard time choosing between
master pc,
alien's gift and jennifer's transformation
...was glad to see that those three were the most popular in the poll,
as they are all pretty much the same in that they have transformation and
a domainate master/slave theme.. please keep up the good work."
bb, 18 Feb 99
"I'm glad you liked my idea and it pleases
me that you've decided to continue the genre. Keep up the good writing!
You're very talented! One more thing. You don't have to spend your
time writing sex stories on the internet just so you know your work is
published somewhere. I've actually been studying your descriptive
language and the way you write and you have the ability to become a real
writer to be professionally published. You would be a fabulous mystery
writer."
Anonymous, 15 Feb 99
"Hello, I was hoping to find out when part
four
(of Alien's Gift)
would be released as I loved the 1st 3 parts. If it is done I would
love a copy emailed if you dont mind =) thanks Best story
i read in a while."
tony, 11 Feb 99
The "PLUME" Discussion Board on the BEstories
Archive had a post titled:
JR Parz
Posted by Mark Davis on Monday, 8 February 1999, at 12:34 p.m.
"You
are the best man. Really, you are."
This
particular message was followed up by a post titled,
I
agree. Posted by Leviathan on Monday, 8 February 1999, at
1:08 p.m., in response to JR Parz, posted by Mark Davis on Monday, 8 February
1999, at 12:34 p.m.
"Yes, I am starting
to believe that too. I just went back and read
Serena
the Teen Witch
. Wow. This is one of the most
erotic stories I have read on the BE Archive. Parz, your stories
are outstanding. They have a certain flow about them than makes you want
to keep reading."
Leviathan.
I had read and enjoyed a story called, "Wicked
Wanda" by "Ceasar", and emailed him to say so, and he responded...
"Thanks.
I was not happy with the results of the story as I would have liked.
This is rather normal though, what I imagine doesn't necessarily equate
to the written word. :-) No prob, I usually just write for
something to do and only some of what I write makes it to the internet.
I do enjoy your work though,
'Aliens Gift'
,
'Wish
Craft'
along with a short-list of others.
Have a great day and thanks for your comments."
J
(Ceasar), writer, 8 Feb 99
"I'm desperately waiting for the next
MASTER
PC
! Only, please make it so it's not
just the over 16 year-olds; 14 and up! Turn the school into a sex
palace and describe to mass transformation (ex. a green gas spreads through
the school vent system and turns all the girls into sex animals).
PLEASE HURRY AND WRITE IT! I think your stories are amazing but
Master
PC- Chapter 1
was the best!"
Anonymous,
8 Feb 99
A new message posted on the The Plume Discussion
Board (located in the BE archive)
"The first story I ever read was Twins Enslavement- Amber's Tale by JR
Parz on the mind control archive (I have a twin fetish too, anyone know
any stories with be and twins?) and I was impressed by the depth of the
story, and the ending. (liked the BE too). So I wanted to pay my tribute
to JR... YOU RULE MAN! KEEP IT UP!"
Mark
Davis, 4 Feb 99
"jr ... just looked around your site
again for the first time in a week or so... and was tickled to see that
allison elizabeth, writer was *so* effusive praising you!!!!! your
site is like many-petaled rose, just when I think I've seen it all, I realize
there's a little corner I haven't seen ... and I'm in it!
ae,
:>), writer, 3 Feb 99
Allison Elizabeth is a writer who proposed
we write a story together...here's some of the dialogue:
"jr... I found your site via the "Related Sites" list on Simon B.
Sinister's Erotic Mind Control Story Archive. I know you post there.
I first read Amber's Story
(Twins Enslavement
- Amber's Tale)
... not one of my favorites
of your stories, but, again, different strokes for different folks ...
well, i took the link and checked you out ... was wowed by Barbie (
Barbie-Teen
Agent
), of course ... really liked the Spells
R Us stories; thought that
Sabrina & Tabitha
- Teen Witch
was pretty good (know that's
one of your faves) but loved the vampire stories (
Cassandra-Vampiress
).
I really like
Serena - Teen Witch, Meets A
Vampire
where the girl is (age regressed)
back to a child, so that she has to grow up! awesome awesome awesome...
I want to write with you because you like interior thought & you have
good ideas & you'll put a girl in a bad spot w/o treating her like
a complete dog (a la Parker or Deidre on her bad days). I also like the
way you write. I think we can work well together ... i hope!!!!!"
ae,writer,
1 Feb 99
When I saw that my name was brought up on
BEstories Archive's PLUME Discussion Board, I thought the particular discussion
was worth documenting.
Fret Pearson
,
the writer of some really great stories (one of which made my Most Favorite
List, is responding to a female fan of his...
"Sorry, but I began this story (Obsession) just for the sole purpose of
NOT making them (females) smarter in the end."
The
female fan named Ann had written;
"I didnt
like it in one of JR Parz's stories when he left a girl stupid. I thought
it was kinda cruel. I mean, you might think this is silly, but when reading
these stories, I begin to feel a little for the characters in them."
Fret
answers with;
"No, it's not silly
at all. I wanted the girls in "Obsession" to stay dumb in the end, but
changed the last few parts because I felt guilty about what happened to
Jennifer. (She still gets a rough deal out of it, and Megan remains an
airheaded bimbo.)
and continues on to
say;
"I like JR's stories mainly
due to the mental effects, though I'm not as much into the control aspects.
And if you're talking about
"Janene's Wishes,"
that is my favorite of his... The female fan finishes it up by saying;
"I suppose there could be a way of making a girls 'ditzy, bubbly, horny
and giggly' without removing her intellect. The effects of that could be
so cool."
29 Jan 99
"really liked the
4th
chapter of Cassandra
...i was just wondering
if you had written the
4th chapter in sabrina
and tabatha?
"
EAW.
27 Jan 99
"Hello, Just read
"Story:
A Vampire's Seduction Of Laura Jean"
.
Excellent!! Am awaiting future additions. Thank you for your
time and consideration."
Respectfully,
Marie. 27 Jan 99
"jrparz, I wanted to drop you a line and
tell you how much I've enjoyed your work and your wonderful web page. I
think it's one of the premier erotica sites on the web. I've been
trying to put my finger on what it is that I enjoy most about your stories.
I think the first thing is that you try (and succeed) in telling the reader
what motivates the characters. Second, I like the fact that you aren't
afraid of a complicated story. Third, your story lines are fresh, and if
you do a "variation on a theme" you come at from a fresh angle. I
also enjoy the fact that you completely eschew the 2nd person and, for
the most part, write comfortably in son story-telling has its place, I
like for the author to get into the head of all the characters, not just
the protagonist. You also know how to lay a good back story ... so
very few can do that. My favorite of your stories is actually
'Barbie:
Teen Agent'
though it's hard to say exactly
why... Thanks again and with kind regards I am, very truly yours
..."
allison elizabeth, writer, 26 Jan 99
"I Have been a fan of your stories since
I first found the MC stories archive a year ago. Drive on , JR. The erotic
mind is never at a want for material. Hope to find a style and try to write
some myself." Michael, 17 Jan 99
"Although by preference, I'm not a great
fan of mc stories, I want to say that I've just read two of your stories
and have enjoyed the potent mixture of submission/mind control and bimboisation
(is there such a word?). Next week I'll visit your site and try and
download stories so far unread. kind regards" Chris
G, 9 Jan 99.
"Great site. Fantastic.
One of the best on the Net. I had to tear myself away. Please keep up the
great work."
Carl, 8 Jan 99
What can I say but my friends and I
love em :) Ter, 7 Jan 99
A wonderful story ("
A
Witch Casts Her Spell
"). Well written
and it has a fantastic story line that you could continue for many more
chapters.
jdw, proof reader, 5 Jan 99
Regarding "A Witch Casts Her Spell"
Hello
JR... Yes, we know it's only FICTION...because you are Jeff's brother,
we knew that it would come out spectacular. We cannot wait until
the 2nd part comes out!!! I'm sure it will be just as good as the
first. We don't know if you meant it to be so funny, but we sure
did get a kick out of it... It's kinda odd to see something that
is somewhat like our lives, be Sooo VERY different... Good luck in
writing the 2nd part, hope you don't get writer's block... See ya
later."
Kara and Suzanne, stars of this
story, 3 Jan 99
"JR Parz, Nice Site!
I
just wanted to let you know that I really enjoy your site. It's the
second place I go to for new stories about the MC Stories site. The
stuff you have written is pretty good, and I know writers like encouragement
- - I've been working on my own story for a long time and just never finished
it... Your new story ("
A Witch Casts
Her Spell
") got me curious, however.
While I don't like it because lesbian sex only doesn't do anything for
me, I did find the locations you used curious... Thanks and keep
up the good work." Greg, 2 Jan 99