READERS REVIEWS
of JR Parz Stories
Reviews for 1998


"JR Parz,Your Back Burner Page is really HOT!  I see you are working on a lot of things...  Regarding " Barbie-Teen Agent ", Not even started?  How can you do this?  You've got us slavering...  Also, I have recently gotten into Cassandra - Vampiress, 1-4 .  Damn!  Something else to wait for...  Keep writing!!  Cheers..." The Story Writer, Writer, 31 Dec 98


"JR Parz Stories Website...   A mixture of Mind Control, Witchcraft, TG and other fantasy erotic stories.  A really good writer, well worth the visit for the sheer variety he produces." Keith, Webmaster, 31 Dec 98

"Cassandra - Vampiress IV" story...  Very good!  I sort of hope the girls win this one." Dave, 31 Dec 98


"JR, I have enjoyed your stories on all the boards.   However, it is your mind control 'flavor' to these stories that really set them apart.  It is because of you that I finally found the Erotic Mind Control Story Archive.  My question JR is this:  Is there a forum board like the AR board or the Babes of toyland board for Mind Control?  If there is, please let me know.  And also, please keep writing." Sincerely, Lasher, 30 Dec 98


"JR Parz, Wow!!  This is the first time I have done any reading in mind control.  Really enjoyed it.  You have really done a good job of telling a good story (Pleasure Dome, Chapter's 1&2) .  I'm looking forward to the next chapter.  I think you have turned me on to a new wave of good reading.  Thanks.  I have book marked your page.  Thanks again.".   Jerry, 26 Dec 98


"Hi, Can I say first that I love your site.  It is a knockout , you write really good stuff..."  Keith, Webmaster, 24 Dec 98


"I've been a big fan of your stories, especially the SRU ones, for a long time.  I'm so glad to find out you have a website where all your work is available in one place!  It is a very good looking site, also.  I'm wondering if you've read any of my stories which are archived at Fictionmania?  Yours are a lot better than mine, but I'm wondering if you have any opinions on my writing style."  Steve, writer, 22 Dec 98


"JR, I hope this message gets through.  I enjoyed your story, "Pleasure Dome II"   The reason I'm writing you personally is this:  I'm starting a web site soon that will feature erotic fiction from writers such as yourself.  Would you be interested in contributing from time to time or perhaps simply allowing me to publish your work there?  The rewards for your efforts would have to establish/negotiated as the site is not yet commercial..." Joe, Web Master, 22 Dec 98


"JR...  I have to tell you, I really enjoyed Suzy Spice.   This story really got me because ever since I used to watch 'Land of the Giants' on Television as a little kid, I always dreamed of finding a living miniature woman.  The art work was excellent and really added to the story.  This was a fun adventure and I definitley want to read more about Super Bimbo.   You are one of the few writers that can make humor and erotica work so well together.  Great job."  Trent Wolf, writer, 22 Dec 98


"Another great installment! (Pleasure Dome, Chapter 2) ...".   DollLover, Archive Webmaster, 21 Dec 98

Referring to Pleasure Dome, Chapter 2:   "Mmmm.... Sweet, J.R. You have me on the edge of my seat...  Seeya!" Sally Reynolds, writer, 21 Dec 98


"Nice plot deveoplment ( Pleasure Dome, Chapter 2 ). This story ( Pleasure Dome ) is getting intresting. Thanks for the preview of chapter 3."  Mr. G, writer, 21 Dec 98


"I have now read the first three parts of Barbie-Teen Agent.   I like it!  It is moving a little slow in some parts, but it is moving.  I had a question about the long age regression scene of the two agents that become children.  Is all of it necessary?  If the later use in the plot does not justify it, this reader will think he had been had.  But time will tell.  For the moment, it peeks my interest.  I think it would be hotter if Barbie put up more of a fight against her arousal/seduction.  Also, you might have her notice wetness, etc... rather than have her just "feel horny".  Still, I am eagerly awaiting parts 4, 5, ??... cheers."   The Story Writer, writer, 21 Dec 98


"J.R., I was honored to find my story (An erotic vampire story called "Roadside") given an honorable mention in your list of top erotic stories.  I love finding out that people have read and enjoyed my work.  It inspires me to write more (and when the real world becomes a busy and tiring thing, inspiration to explore fantasies are all the more needed).  I also wanted to let you know that I have very much enjoyed reading your work.  I look forward to the final chapter of Cassandra - Vampiress , and to some of the other vampire stories you have under consideration.  With thanks and admiration..."  Brian, aka Telephoto, writer, 20 Dec 98.


"Just wanted to tell you I have enjoyed reading your stories.  Favorites are "WishCraft", "The Mesmerist", "Master PC", and "Lust Potion 69" .  I hope you will soon complete the two incomplete stories in the list.  I looked at some of your favorite authors.  I agree with a few of them...  Keep writing!" Will, writer, 16 Dec 98


"JR,  Thanks a lot for your site and for all your stories .  I'm really on your wavelength in a lot of ways, and I've gotten a lot of pleasure from the stories on your Top 25 list and from your own ideas." Dave M., 15 Dec 98


"I have chapter 1 of "The Agency" and was looking for any subsequent chapters...  Are there any?  Will there be?  Could you point me in the right direction?  Good Start - Thank you."  (I then turned him in the direction of my website and here's his response)   "I MADE IT...  Nice Place, thank you very much.  Another great place to gobble my time, and thanks for your time."  Zardoz, 15 Dec 98


"Hi!  I just finished reading chapter 4 of Cassandra's story and I just thought I'd drop a line and tell you how great I thought it was.  I really liked the way Damien took Jessica and Cindy in the bar, that was real cool!  I'm also looking forward to the next chapter, and although I think Damien is a cool character, I'm really rooting for Cassandra and Theresa.  Anyway, I'll let you go now...good luck."  Kevin, 12 Dec 98

"JR, Just found the time to tell you that the latest Cassandra chapter (IV)  was excellent.  As usual, your story telling skills made the tale flow very well.  Female with female scenes are always a turn on for me, and the scene with Damien, Jessica and Cindy was especially well done.  When I read this story, it plays in my mind like a film, which to me makes it more vivid.  The style of writing even enhances this type of story even more.  I hope after the last chapter is done, there may be a little more Cassandra in the future.  She's a fully realized character that makes the reader care about her.  I could go on and on but all I can really say is...another great work!"  Trent Wolf, 12 Dec 98.

"Hi.  For quite sometime now, I have been waiting for the second part of your story "Master PC" to appear.  After what felt like forever, I just figured that you had given up on that story and moved on to something else.  A few weeks ago, however, I saw that you posted a revised version of the story.  I assumed at that point that a second part was quickly to follow.  As it hasn't appeared, I wanted to write you in order to inquire as to its status.  All I can say is that it is a story I have enjoyed very much.  I can't encourage you enough to please get that story out there.  We've waited a long time now to read it!!" Martin, 10 Dec 98

"I wanted to compliment you on "The Agency" - - great stuff!!!  When is the next installment?"
Marlissa, Writer, 10 Dec 98


"This is my first response to a story writer but I need to congratulate you on "Master PC" ...it is your best work.  The new version is really better than I expected.  Another chapter would be the best thing.  Best Regards."
Marcos Brasil - Sao Paulo, 9 Dec 98

"Wonder Woman, Super Girl & Bat Girl...you've been replaced!  Enter a new player onto the field of for the fight of truth, justice and the American way (With some really good sex while doing it.)!  SU .BE. ( Super Bimbo) is here to play!  I love 'er! ...  Any chance she'll get to party with the big "S"?" r mac (poll), 9 Dec 98

"I wrote the story 'Realizing the Wet Dream,' (on the Erotic Mind Control Stories Archive) then dropped out of sight. I suppose I'm back and around.  Nice to see Mr. Parz has taken my dream of woman-to-slut transformation & made it vast reality. Your posts point to an intelligent man, sir, and I salute you."Copernicus, writer, 8 Dec 98

"JR...You do excellent work, it's worth the long waits between your stories.  Can't wait for more of Cassandra and I'm hoping for a little more of Sabrina and Tabitha. "   KMB, writer, 7 Dec 98

"KMB here, the author of Blood Lust, and my highest compliments go out to you sir.  You have continued your excellent story ( Cassandra - Vampiress IV ) in an original and well thought out manner.  You have a real gift for these types of stories, Cassandra (- Vampiress) and the Sabrina (& Tabitha - Teenage Witches) are some of the best net erotica I have read.  A while back you urged me to read Cassandra and I'm glad I did...but to get back to my main point, great story.  Can't wait to see how it ends."  KMB, writer, 6 Dec 98


"Hey...just wanted to let you know I really enjoyed the "The Agency" .  GREAT JOB!!!!!!"  ~granade, 5 Dec 98


"Hi, my name is the Mind Control Artist.  I have read several of your stories and loved them, especially "The Agency", "Pleasure Chips", "Master PC", and "Alien's Gift" .  I have written several stories and I posted one on the Mind Control Archive.  It wasn't until I visited your site that I noticed my stories are missing emotions from the girls.  I am in the process of writing several stories right now, and thanks to your personal introduction page on how to write erotic stories (Meet JR Parz), I'm going to revise these stories before I post them...I just wanted to thank you that suggestions page, and tell you that you do great work and keep it up..."  The Mind Control Artist, writer, 5 Dec 98


"I just wanted to send you a note to let you know Part One of my new Star Trek story has been posted on the Grey Archive.  Check it out when you get a chance.  Let me know what you think.  I respect your opinion since you seem to be one of the most prolific Mind Control writers on the net...  Later..." Trent Wolf, writer, 5 Dec 98


"Just saw your site - excellent job!  Did you write the Super Bimbo story before adding the illustrations, or did you use the pics for inspiration for your writing?  Either way it's great!..." ddral, poser artist, 4 Dec 98

"I guess I enjoyed Master PC more than I disliked it.  It's definitely not my idea of the ideal BE story, but it does a good job of doing what it's supposed to, and I congratulate JR Parz for that.  Even though I don't even partially agree with the offensive material, this story gets a thumbs up from me.  I think most people will feel the same way:  they might not agree with the content, but they'll probably read it anyway just for shock."
Leviathan, Reviewer, 4 Dec 98

"JR Parz, I admire your prolificness and how you stay true to your mind control roots--I don't always like your stories, but I admire GREATLY a guy like you, who gets such harsh reviews and continue writing (On R&D) -- It's almost like you're the literary Rocky." Adrian Burns, writer, 4 Dec 98


"You have done an excellent job with your site.  I think it's great."  ~master~, 4 Dec 98

"Excellent Story, J. Parz!  ( "The Agency") The notion of the girl being compelled to read the book and absorb the lessons of her own subjugation was subtle.  And the intelligence regulation was a nice touch." Ven, 2 Dec 98

"Great Job!!  ( "The Agency") I too am a huge fan of the author Russ Martin.  I am glad to see there are others who respect his talent.  I always felt that he had a potential gold mine with his theme of possessed woman, but he was never promoted right by his publishers..." Blalvis, 2 Dec 98

Regarding "Alien's Gift"... "Where can I get the rest of the story, its great."  Ken, 1 Dec 98


"Alien's Gift" is an Excellent story.  Part 4 coming soon, I hope."  Tim, 1 Dec 98


 I give "The Agency" a AAA rating...good start...can be a real thriller!"  ~master~, 30 Nov 98

"I just wanted to send you a note to tell you that I just finished reading Chapter One of "The Agency" .  The set up was very well done and your descriptions of the woman were excellent.  I'm looking forward to the next chapter.  Good Writing!  Keep it up!" Trent Wolf, a writer, 30 Nov 98

"WONDERFUL STORY ( "The Agency") !  has chapter 2 finished?!?" Warrior, 29 Nov 98

"I have finished the first part of your story( "The Agency") !  I think the premise is good."   David,  29 Nov 98


"Master PC" was definitely an original...it is amazing, seldom that I come across a story that linked mindcontrol and computer.  Keep it up - is there a second section to this?  It would be interesting to see the next day when all the girls breasts grow to 44DDD's...just a thought"  anton, a fan, 25 Nov 98


"Hi...  I was reading your stories in mind control, and I especially like the "Alien's Gift."   I thought it was incredible!  I loved it!" anton, a fan, 24 Nov 98

"Just wanted to drop you a line to tell you that I loved the first chapter of "The Agency" ...  Great site btw."
bb, 24 Nov 98


"I've read 1,2,3 of the "Cassandra - Vampiress" story and was wondering if chapter 4 (or more is) out and available somewhere?  The story is very well written...  John, 22 Nov 98

"Please  Please  Please, write the next chapter to your story "Mesmerist" ...Thanks" Robert, 21 Nov 98


"Great Story ( The Agency )!  Where do I apply!  Looking forward to future chapters!  Thanks."  FireFox, 21 Nov 98


"What a terrific story (The Agency) Keep going -- I'm a BIG fan!!!" Marlissa, author of my #1 BEST Story, 20 Nov 98


"I just read your story "The Agency" chapter 1.  It seems like it's gonna be very good, but don't be too long with the rest of the chapters." Dan, 20 Nov 98

"I'm enjoying "Alien's Gift" a whole big bunch."  Ruthie, 20 Nov 98

"Could you send me the rest of the Sabrina series?  I would love to get off on them!" Kelly, 8 Nov 98


"I went over to your website.  Nice place.  I've seen your top twenty-five stories.  Very cool.  I agree with most of 'em.  Celebrity MC, writer, 8 Nov 98

"Hi...  I read your stories at mcstories and I really liked them.  I love your style of writing.
Anil (I'm from India), 7 Nov 98


"Just read one of your recent stories "The Mesmerist" .  I really enjoyed it quite a bit.  Not sure why, but I found it to be your best effort, even though it was short.  The slow (relative to the story) submergence of her personality really turned me on.  Strangely, some of my favorite stories on mcstories are short ones.  Hope to see more of it.  :) ...Keep up the great work.   Celebrity MC, writer, 7 Nov 98


After I complimented an author for a story I read of his, he responded to my stories on my website:   "...I often check out your web page (even though I often have trouble getting in) and I enjoy your stories as well...
MC Writer, Writer, 5 Nov 98


After I complimented an author for writing "Jill Becomes A Slut" , I asked permission to continue his story (See Back Burner's Page)...he responded:   "I've read all of your stories at MC and especially enjoyed the "Twins Enslavement - Amber's Tale"...I think it would be great if you added to it and posted my beginning there.  Sir James, Writer, 4 Nov 98


Referring to "The Mesmerist" :   "Very good beginning.  I'd like to see where you take it.  Keep the MC flavor at least as strong.  If you continue, you might want to explore some of the other powers of the amulet, if any.  Just suggestions.  How far will the harem progress?  I'd definitely like to read more." Cho, 31 Oct 98


Referring to Suzy Spice aka Super Bimbo :   "Hey, cute story Man!  Not a bad blend of humor and erotica." TCShan, author, 27 Oct 98


I asked my new proof reader if he thought I was a good enough to make money on my writing...  Here's part of his response:   "JR,  I was afraid that you were going to ask that one question.  Yes, I think that you have the ability to write for profit.  And, by the way, do very well..." jdw, 22 Oct 98


I read Cassandra - Vampiress Part 3 some long, long time ago...Just wanted to tell you that it was very interesting to me, and I'd love to read part 4.   Eric, a devoted ff story reader, 19 Oct 98

"Hey!  ( Pleasure Dome's ) a Great Story, and I can't wait to read the rest of it.  Krypt Keeper, 17 Oct 98


"Your Cassandra ~ Vampiress story line has been really interesting so far and is probably one of my favorite erotic stories.  The only minor criticism I had was the use of the other "vampette" (buffy's actor).  The character of the other vampette is good but I feel when you are in a fantasy eroticism story, a reference to a real actor, blurs the line between reality and fantasy and while I'm reading your story I enjoy staying in the fantasy world.  Mr. Taipan, Writer, 15 Oct 98


(Regarding Pleasure Dome ) "Wow, you really like to go all out, don't you?  You, sir, are an excellent writer, I like the whole horny-while-you-shrink thing.  I don't have to tell you to keep on shrinking..."  microman, 15 Oct 98


(Regarding (Barbie-Teen Agent series ) "I really like your stories.  Even though they're about some off the wall subjects, they are written in a style such that they are *almost* believable (know what I mean?).  I guess it's a form of subtlety in your outlandish fiction?  Anyway, keep up the good work!!   Dave, 15 Oct 98


"I love the " Pleasure Dome " story so far.  Hope you keep it going and post more of it."  Frank, 15 Oct 98


"A very nice start ( Pleasure Dome )!  I hope to see shrunken Laura too in future chapters.  I wait anxiously for the 2nd chapter next month.  Keep up the very good work!"  C.A.B., 14 Oct 98


"Great story JR!  ( Serena - Teen Witch, Meets A Vampire ) I read it on the message board the other day!  Loved the story a great deal." The Bard, 14 Oct 98


"Thought I'd email to catch you both (also referring to Laura Jean).  Great Story ( Serena - Teen Witch, Meets A Vampire ).  Well written.  Convincing "voice" and POV for the narration.  Nice descriptions.  And, of course, FANTABULOUS material.  AR, AP, MC, BE - it's got all my favorite letters (except maybe SW).  Thanks for writing and sharing...  Anyway, hope to hear more from characters - lots of potential for a hot, bisexual, teenage nymph coming back into her power.  Thank you."  Nomdreserv, Author, 11 Oct 98


"I have read your story Alien's Gift .  Have you done any more of the story of the story? ...I can't wait for the next one."   Kim, 11 Oct 98


( Rings of Transformation )  "I have always enjoyed reverse pregnancy stories, but they are few and far between.  You handled this one particularly well, although I would have preferred that it didn't go by so quick.  Reading your story was like reading 1000 Arabian Knights in that each part of the story led into a side story remembered flashback.  That is a gutsy technique, but a little misplaced here.  I thought a straight narrative would have worked better.  It is a bit distracting in an otherwise good story.  I give it an 8 out of 10.  Anonymous, 2 Oct 98


( Rings of Transformation )  "A quality story with a great twist.  I was really intereted in seeing what would happen next. Ann, 1 Oct 98


JR Parz is back with a rather un-Parzian tale called " Rings of Transformation ", an SRU story about a trio who use magic rings...JR's outdone himself on the weirdness scale this time!   Mark T., 1 Oct 98...Webmaster of BE Stories Archive


"The only reason Fiction Mania TG is an awesome site is awesome stories like this one ( Rings of Transformation )...That was really, really good.  Mindy, 30 Sep 98...Webmaster of Fiction Mania TG


"I've checked out your story ( Cassandra-Vampiress ) and think it's very good.  The plot is interesting, nicely handled and includes a few twists.  Character development isn't great, but it is much better than in a lot of genre Internet sex stories, and you're at least making an effort at it, which is commendable.  And the overall quality of the writing is above average, for the kind of story it is...There is two things about the story that don't thrill me all that much:  the story is really much more about mind control than vampires, to the point that the latter is reduced to a mere plot device explaining the source of the former [this is just a personal taste thing--I prefer vampire stories with plenty of good "fangings." :) ; and the sudden usage of the Scarlet Witch was unnecessary and adds nothing to the story (so far) that couldn't have been provided by Theresa just having an Aunt Wanda who was a stronger witch than she...Still, the above aside, it's an excellent story and I will gladly add it to the site.  Keep up the great work.  Dalan, 18 Sep 98...Webmaster of Grey Archive


"Hi, I have been reading your Cassandra stories (on the Domain of Darkness site) and I like them very much...You have a natural talent for telling stories.  I have always enjoyed a good vampire story...You have done a wonderful job combining the supernatural with the completely normal.  Thank you for sharing your stories.  They are well worth the time spent.  I look forward to your continuations.  Laura Jean, 17 Sep 98


"I enjoy your site quite a bit.  Transformation, both physical & mental, into voluptuous bimbos is a major fetish of mine...I am looking forward to more stories.  Keep up the excellent writing." Dave H., 14 Sep 98


" JR, I really enjoy the stories that you have been writing .  Wish that I could write as well as you do.  However, if you need assistance in proofing your stories, that is something that I do rather well...Keep up the great work.  I know its hard, but you are doing a great job." jdw, Proof Reader, 14 Sep 98


"I liked the plot ( Voodoo At the Fair ).  It was a SIGNIFICANT variation on the themes I had read in your other stories.  I wish it had at least some token BE in it, so you could submit it to the archive and show them you could break your rules."  Dana Short, Author & Proof Reader, 13 Sep 98


"Hi!  This is Joseph S. Genovese and I just wanted to congratulate and encourage you with regards to the ongoing Sabrina (& Tabitha - Teenage Witches) Story .  It is absolutely wonderful.  I just finished reading part two and I can't wait for Part 3.  Once again, keep up the fantastic work!  As I was reading Part 2 of Sabrina I couldn't help but think to myself, 'What a lucky guy Merlin is!!!'...I was wondering if you had ever considered using your excellent skills as a writer to write a stand-alone with...Heck, I'd write it myself if I was half as good as you are!"  Joe, 11 Sep 98


"...You are prolific writer.  I really liked the twins ( Twins Enslaved-Amber's Tale ) story and Sabrina & Tabitha .  Unfortunately for my greater appreciation of the later, I don't know the characters which I suppose to be from television.  As a writer, I would be greatful for any suggestions you have..."   The Story Writer, Author, 10 Sep 98

"I love your sabrina and tabitha stories!!!!!1"  DaIsY, 9 Sep 98


Erotic Mind Control's Reader's Picks:   " Cassandra - Vampiress series "...."Nice graphic depiction at times.  Part III ends with JRParz giving us a whiff of what's in store for our heroine.  In this case it seems that she's about to come at odds with her creator/mentor.  Hopefully that should create both interesting sexual situations and help the storyline have an aim over the next few parts."  Dyssuk, 8 Sep 98.


"Your newest story on mcstories.com  ( Alien's Gift ) rox my friend.  While I won't/can't write them like you, I do appreciate your style."  Cody, 23 Aug 98


"Hey, I just wanted to say I loved your story ( Alien's Gift 1&2 )!  It's at least a notch above a lot of the other fics out there, and I read quite a bit......Keep up the good work!  I look forward to the next part!"   Sunrunner, 21 Aug 98


"Hey, Wanted to drop a line saying nice story( Alien's Gift 1&2 ).  Really liked it.  Hope there is more to come in the near future.....Anyway, again, nice story."   Brian, 21 Aug 98


"Can't wait for the remainder of " Alien's Gift ".  It's nice to see good writing in net based erotica.  You  write the way people talk which is the old Hemingway rule.  Congratulations for staying away from the "giant throbbing member" genre of erotic writing.  Keep it up."Atay, 19 Aug 98


"I just read Alien's Gift (both parts).  Great Work!!  Keep the story going!!   Kevin, 17 Aug 98


"I'd just like to tell you I enjoyed Alien's Gift (I&II ).  I found it to be in the classic spirit of mind control stories.  I prefer telepathy to long detailings of hypnosis and liked how you concentrated on the action.  I liked the characters, and was glad you didn't make Colt an abusive person.....I hope you're considering writing more sections in this series."ZeRoKool, 17 Aug 98


"I really liked your story, Master PC .  Is there a sequel to it?  If there isn't, you should make one."   Pilot,
17 Aug 98


"Good story ( Sabrina & Tabitha - Teen Witches, sequel ).  I'm looking forward to part 3."   Wynegarde, 17 Aug 98


"I just wanted to drop a line and say I like your stories , even though the reviewer on BEArchive is more or less right about them.  Honestly though, you are a decent writer, but could use a bit more variety in your plots..."
Dana Short, 16 Aug 98


"Hi, Just thought I'd drop you a line to let you know that I really enjoyed your WishCraft series.  Very Cool, unlike anything I've ever read before......and your Website is GREAT!"  Nijikon, 16 Aug 98


"Excellent story ( Sabrina & Tabitha's Sequel )  The sex is good, yet it doesn't take away from the plot, rather it is part of it, and not gratuitous.....keep in coming."  Marcel, 16 Aug 98


Erotic Mind Contol's Reader's Picks:   " Cassandra - Vampiress series".........A recent story that isn't quite done yet, but interesting and erotic.  Almost exclusively ff, but well done, and has the same delicious device of uncontrollable desire."  Saint Germain, 16 Aug 98


Erotic Mind Control Reader's Picks:  " Jennifer's Transformation ".......Short, but well-told tale of Jennifer's change.  Seduction in the bathroom is quite good."  Saint Germain, 16 Aug 98


"I just wanted to tell you how much I enjoy your TG stories .  I'm a pre-op TS and I collect TG, TS stories.  At present I've a little over 2000 stories in my collection.  Your work is some of the best that I've read.  I look forward to reading your new stories also.  I have visited your website too, it looks great.  While I personally don't care much for mind control stories unless their is a TG element in them, I'm sure that they are just as good as your other stories.  Keep up the good work." Nora Elizabeth...., 12 Aug 98


"I just wanted to drop you a note to let you know that I have enjoyed r eading your stories on your website ..."
Dan, 12 Aug 98


" Your stories really are great.   I love them.  I'm sure if I tell my boyfriend about them, he'll like them too.  See you later!"   Liz, 8 Aug 98


"I have enjoyed your excellent stories.  I find especially exciting the stories involving young ladies slowly turned into brainless bimbos.  The first person accounts of the slow transformation is very arousing.  Breast enlargement is also nice, especially when it accompanies the mental transformation.........I really liked WishCraft.   The Tiffany character was my favorite character.  I hope you do more with her in the sequel, but please get rid of the TG part of her.  I look forward to reading more stories (hopefully, mind control) from you.  You have a genuine flair for erotic, naughty stories."             Dave, A New Fan, 8 Aug 98


"I came across WishCraft , and I just had to take my hat off to you....Great Story.....although, I didn't care for the ending, but taste is personal........it was a great story, and it was well written.  I visited your web site, and it turns out you have written a lot of the stuff I have read.....Great Work :)   Anonymous, 7 Aug 98


"It took awhile, but I finally finished reading chapter two of Barbie (-Teen Agent ), and I'm eagerly awaiting the third chapter.  Not only am I enjoying the mystery of the kidnapping, but the whole plight of delightfully passive Barbie.  I can't wait to see what Linda has in store for her, and I hope you will allow Jessica to take more and more advantage of Barbie's situation.........."    Scott, 7 Aug 98


"When I read this story ( WishCraft ) I didn't know what to expect.  I think this story is really worth reading.  The storyline is great, many transformations occur and the ending I also liked very much.  Great writing skills have been shown here.  Please continue to write such good material.  I'll be looking forward to read(ing) it."   J.C. Arby, 5 Aug 98


" I love the Web page !  Your stories continue to be top notch.  I like each one better than the last, especially when new beauty comes at the expense of some already beautiful but bitchy antagonist.  Keep up the great work.  It is greatly appreciated." Shap, 5 Aug 98


" Janene's Wishes was excellent!  Actually, I like your short story work more than your longer stories in some ways.  Less time to get trapped in "out of character" stuff.  Short, sweet, to the point and with an ironic twist." Mark T., BEA Story Archivist, 5 Aug 98


"I would just like to say that I am enjoying this story ( WishCraft ) a lot.  I love the way all the transformations take place in the same story."      oriole, 3 Aug 98


"I just read the first part of " WishCraft " and I think it is as great as the rest of your stories.  I think that you have a style to your writing that is far greater than most authors on the net..."       Tesla, 2 Aug 98


"I just finished reading " WishCraft " at your site.  What a fun read!  You hint that there may be more to come; please add me to the list of those encouraging you to write a sequel.  I've looked at some of your other stories and find them to be enjoyable, too.  Thank you so much for turning me on to your site!"     Fred, 2 Aug 98


"Just wanted to let you know that I'm enjoying your WishCraft story.  Keep up the great work!" Martin, 1 Aug 98


"Great story ( WishCraft) .  I have read most, if not all of your stories and really enjoy them.  Keep up the good work."   jdw,1 Aug 98


"Really enjoyed Master PC, Alien's Gift, and Jennifer's Transformation (neat idea to add a chapter to "The Gift" using the subject's perspective.  Looking forward to the rest of WishCraft "     Nomdreserv, author, 31 Jul 98


"WOW WHAT CAN I SAY BUT WOW!!!!!!!!!  I luved it.....a lot!  Coolness!  The part in the end ( WishCraft ) is too cute!  My favorite part is the kitten transformation, but that's just me.  Great work in making Carmen a cat, very good!  Sequel??  Oh please!  This is a very very good story....it ranks up in the Days of His Lives fame in my book."
That AR fanatical Kitten, 29 Jul 98


".....(regarding WishCraft , specifically the Carmen character)...and let me say I have never been so sexually aroused in all my life!  Living Catholic just doesn't give one to many sexual experiences."
Carmen Waverly :), 29 Jul 98


"I am no professional, but it seemed as though you put to much emphasis on part 1 ( Alien's Gift 2 ), maybe some new things should happen in the next part.  To what I don't have any suggestions, but I am getting tired of those same authors that always go for that world female dom thing - ya know what I mean?  I like your story lines a lot, and will continue to read them as you put them on your page......."         Playr10, 29 Jul 98


"Outstanding work...best I've read in some time...I'll be waiting for part 3 (referring to Alien's Gift or Barbie-Teen Agent) "      Jack, 28 Jul 98


"Loved both parts of the story Alien's Gift .  Can't wait for more.  I hope that Colt will use his transformation powers for revenge as well as pleasure!  Thanks again for the great stories."       Shap, 26 Jul 98


"Thanks for the story ( Alien's Gift, Part 2 ) - I enjoyed it.  What do you have planned next?  The field is wide open isn't it.  Again - thanks for your time and energy - this is one of the better efforts I have seen on a.s.s.m.    alobarpaul, 21 Jul 98


"Liked your story ( Barbie-Teen Agent) !  The plot is new and refreshing.  One thing though, I would have love to have a detailed description of Barbie getting younger in the chamber."              Netman99, 13 Jul 98


"Very smooth, and easily your best yet ( Cassandra - Vampiress, Part 3 ).  Your evolution, from your earlier stories (Cassandra - Vampiress 1 & 2) to now is clear.  The introduction of the Scarlet Witch is quite natural.  The idea of a witch casting a spell on herself is excellent.  I hope you keep having fun with this piece......" WhyNow, author, 12 Jul 98


"I've read your last 2 stories and I think they are very interesting........I think you have great potential so keep posting."        CMarvel, 8 Jul 98


"Nice story.  ( Barbie - Teen Agent ) I look forward to the remaining chapters."  David, 8 Jul 98


"Definitely a good read ( Barbie-Teen Agent )...  I found it quite arousing and can't wait to read more!!!!!"
      Lisa, 7 Jul 98

"I found your story ( Alien's Gift) one of the most wonderful I ever came across....."    Rotten, 4 Jul 98


"Hi, I just read your story ( Jennifer's Transformation ) on the Mind Contol Story site, and found it to be very good.  You mention the story The Reward which is also very good.  I urge you to keep writing in The Reward universe. B.W., 2 Jul 98

"I've read a couple of your stories in the past, but Sabrina & Tabitha is the best yet...Keep those great stories coming.  Jonathon, 7 May 98

"Brilliant! ( Twins Enslaved - Amber's Tale ) Just Brilliant! KoolKat, 7 May 98


"After reading the full story ( Sabrina & Tabitha - Teen Witches ).  I find it wonderful.  A sequel could be considered but a slight re-write might be necessary.  Learning more of what Tabitha has in store for Sabrina would be good.  I particularly like her dark and evil side.  A good side would be Salem and his pets.  cy101, 7 May 98


"That was a very good story ( Sabrina & Tabitha - Teen Witches ).  I hope that it won't be long before part two is on the way!       dangerbunny, 6 May 98


"I really like your story ( Sabrina & Tabitha - Teenage Witches ).  The writing is very good.  The prose keeps me at the edge of my seat.  Keep up the good work.       cy101, 6 May 98


"Fantastic Story (Sabrina & Tabitha - Teen Witches) .  You've just got to continue it!  A bit of m/f (or m/f/f) action, as well as Sabrina and Tabitha getting it on would be good!  Please tell me that you're writing more!"
   KoolKat, Author, 5 May 98


"I just finished reading your story Master PC from the mcstories.com and I like it....I really want to read the next chapter.."     Amichay, 5 May 98


"Excellent - Loved both parts ( Cassandra - Vampiress I & II ), really easy to read and entertainingly erotic.  Thanks and can't wait for part 3."      rbruzz19, 3 May 98


"Cassandra (- Vampiress ) is a great story of seduction.  Loved reading it and found it to be very erotic.  I can't wait to read more."     Anne, 30 Apr 98


"I enjoyed your story ( Master PC ).  Good premise and pretty good layout, but got a little repetitive.  I like the slave girl theme.  I would have liked to see more.  Hope to see more of your work.....keep on writing."      Jeff, 29 Apr 98


"I read your story ( Master PC ).  I really like it a lot.  I'm interested in growth like the breasts and all that.  I have my own story, Kathy's Power......."      Alicia, Writer, 29 Apr 98


"...(referring to Lust Potion 69 )......Well Written and certainly fit beautifully into the SpellsRUs universe.  This is a Well done! and  a Thank You."       Edward Winston Bear, 29 Apr 98


"I just read your story, Master PC , and I want to tell you that it is great!  I hope you are writing more in that world, and I look forward to reading more, though, I wish you would spend more time describing the sex scenes........."        M.W., 28 Apr 98


"Wow this story ( Master PC ) is great!....................You have a great imagination!"       memi, 26 Apr 98


"I read both part 1 and part 2 of Cassandra - Vampiress , and found them to be very beautifully written.  Honestly, I wish that there are more of such good stories."          Daniel, 26 Apr 98


"This story ( Cassandra - Vampiress II ) is fantastic!  I think it is better than the first!  I love the fact that its shorter, for one, but there seems to be a lot more happening.  Its great!  It moves faster and it got me pretty excited!  Keep up the great stories!"     Sxy, 22 Apr 98


"Hey, that story ( Pleasure Chips ) kicked ass, too.  You are one hell of a writer.  Where do you get all your ideas for this stuff?  Where ever you get em, they're great.  I especially enjoyed it because it could actually happen in the future with all this shit about microchips and shit."         SBNasty, 6 Apr 98


"I must say you are a fantastic story teller.  I luv the way these stories of yours flows.  You seem to have a natural talent for them!  The part I like best in this story ( Lust Potion 69 ) is how Serena's idea of perfection is herself....I like that."          Angel, 5 Apr 98


"Your stories ( Cassandra - Vampiress I & Lust Potion 69 ) are incredible!  It is obvious you have put much time and thought into them!  I was fascinated by the level of dialogue and plot...."      Sxy, 4 Apr 98


"I just read ( Cassandra - Vampiress ) and I really like this one.  Especially the part where the vampire turns one girl into the others sex slave!  Wow."        Mirebelle, 4 Apr 98


"I hadn't realized until I saw the repost today that you were responsible for Master PC which was a very enjoyable story.  It reminded me of <The Reward> which remains one of my favorite MC/Body Control stories."
    Boris Ludmenkov, Author, 3 Apr 98


"I was just writing you to congratulate you on a terrific story, Master PC .  I read it at BEarchive on the web and loved it.  The story was very entertaining.  I look forward to reading your other stories.  This story was one of the best that I have ever read!" Joseph, 23 Mar 98

Master PC was the first story I submitted...  The response was overwhelming!