It starts with a castle

In progress...

I was frantically stroking between my legs, wishing I had his cock inside me, wishing I could feel like Kath, wishing he would stroke me like that.

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It starts with a castle - Jun 04

It starts with a castle Part 2 - Mar 05

It starts with a castle Part 3 - Mar 05

It starts with a castle Part 4 - Nov 05

It starts with a castle Part 5 - Mar 06

It starts with a castle Part 6 - Apr 06

It starts with a castle Part 7 - May 06

Feedback

Recent feedback

Feb 2011
Was very well done. I liked it a lot.

Dec 2010
Brilliant piece of work.

Jan 2009
Ahhhhh. I just realized that I hadn't read the first three parts. Damn. Nice story though. :)
      GBF: I can't take the blame for that! :-)

Aug 2008
This is one of the very best--definitely top-10, maybe top-5--erotic stories of all-time, bar-none, hands-down. Your usually superb dialog shines brighter than ever.
      GBF: The cheque's in the mail. Seriously, thanks.

Jun 2006
WHEW! It took me three decades to get as far as Alys did in..what a week??? I guess some lucky gals are early bloomers! ;-D Fast, but good action, good story, good images!
      GBF: Yeah, I gotta get back to this, and get her in more trouble!

Jun 2006
Wonderful

Jun 2006
well writen and a really good story, however i am disappointed with Alys. I also apologize if this jumps around a bit but i have a lot of thought and somewhat tired right now.
      GBF: Thanks. That , by the way, is HUGE. This piece of feedback is almost as big as the story. The only thing I have to say in response is that it's just a story. No real people were harmed in the making of it.

Jun 2006
very good.

Jun 2006
This is a great story. Lots of love and young sex. I really like the way Alys and Dom have "learned about sex"! All by themselves. This makes their relationship absolutely UNIQUE to them! This fact alone makes this Part a 10! Too bad that
      GBF: Thanks

Jun 2006
Given the last bit of feedback I saw from this, I thought you could use a compliment. Best part is, I'm such an ass I won't hand these out when they're not more than aptly deserved. You know it's sincere when it comes from the hypercritical jackass in the
      GBF: I'm not much of a drinker. Perhaps I could watch too? :-)

Jun 2006
I enjoy your story very much. I get carried away with the feelings and I get a very good hard cock.Which is what I want! I am almost 80 yrs old but reading your story makes me feel very young again. I don't get much sex anymore as I am Divorced and live
      GBF: I thought people were reading this for an historical perspective. :-)

Jun 2006
Crap. What a load of bollocks
      GBF: Speaking of bollocks, strangely enough, I would have cared much more if you'd had the balls to leave an email address to discuss it. Go soak your head. Refunds are available at the door.

May 2006
When I first read this story it was the innocence and romance that caught me, putting it among my favorites. However, it keeps going further and further from it(I do understand that innocence can't last to part 7) But does she have to turn into such a ska
      GBF: Wow, sorry to cause that reaction. I understand what you mean, but I have some very firm plans for this story, and they can't always be nice, I don't think. I have, however, plenty of others for you to choose from. Sorry again.

May 2006
Alys... that girl will wear herself out! The little minx - she's spectacular ... Where will it stop? As you may guess I'm loving the story. Even though she's something of a slut - in the nicest possible way - Alys just keeps getting under this reader's
      GBF: Skin, huh? :-)

May 2006
Excellant, it just keeps getting better. Alys is a very horny young lady, were does she get the energy?
      GBF: She eats a heary breakfast. Well, if she can find Dom. :-)

May 2006
It made us soooo hot and wet we diddled each other then jumped into bed for an encore 69. Nice going (and cumming)Gentle!
      GBF: Well, that was more than I expected. :-)

May 2006
A very hot story about a very hot farm girl. Wish I knew an "Alys" in my younger years ;-)
      GBF: :-)

May 2006
To little plot and to much girl/girl.
      GBF: Bummer. Expect a return to our usual programming.

May 2006
It was wonderful. There's nothing like two girls enjoying each other and giving total pleasure. I waas completely entranced with this story and I have to admit, I got really excited with it. The closeness while they both got excited was very good and lead
      GBF: Well, it was an aberration for me... But who knows? :-)

May 2006
Another excellent segment of the series. I am not that much of a fan of girl-girl action but found this curiously exciting. Good job.
      GBF: Oh, so any idea why? :-)

May 2006
Helluva story, sir. Yep, HELL of a story. :-) I give it an "8".
      GBF: You just liked the stable action. :-)

Apr 2006
feelin' hot hot hot!
      GBF: You and Alys, huh?

Apr 2006
One of the best stories I have read...very HOT.

Apr 2006
I was wondering, is alys going to ever have kath? She seems like the type to explore it all???? I loved the story, you are truly a gift of seduction. By the way, congrats on the award... you deserved it.
      GBF: Keep wondering. I'm not telling. :-) And thanks.

Apr 2006
So Alys took the initiative with Paul - the little miss! Beware the men she fancies - and now it's Dominic's turn. The more I read the more I like Alys. Thanks for writing - and don't leave this reader in suspense!
      GBF: I'll try not to. Thanks.

Apr 2006
This is the only chapter I have read, found it very interesting and well developed. It is very sexy; Alys has two really different lovers. I have to read the previous chapters. Until further complete reading..
      GBF: Hank, you've given me feedback on parts 1, 2,4 & 5. I'm pretty sure you've read them, buddy.

Apr 2006
Very nice, indeed! Alys definitely seems like the type to make sure her 'animals' are well cared for. It would be a singular pleasure to feel her lips upon me.
      GBF: Just remember, she's difficult to control!

Apr 2006
Another excellent saga of the castle and its crew! Great story.
      GBF: Thanks. More as soon as I find the time!

Apr 2006
A dream, eh...I bet! She is getting quite a bit of action now, the saucy wench. Well done, sir! Pray continue to get her into more difficulties.

Apr 2006
Oh yeah. . .
      GBF: Yeah?

Apr 2006
I think you have taken Alys & me to new heights, :-). Your writings are as usual very wonderful. Thank you. You made my Monday and week and hope yours is super also.
      GBF: Thanks.

Apr 2006
A most beautiful story. I love the way Alys took charge to get her feelings satisfied. It seems that she will have two lovers today and that is great. She is a loving girl that wants to experience everything she can. And there are two willing partners tha
      GBF: Hey, no stealing the punchline. I'll get to that! :-)

Apr 2006
Very sexy! Ooo, yes, very. Mmmmhmmm.
      GBF: So that's a yes? :-)

Apr 2006
Oh God she's such a slut. How do I meet someone like that??!
      GBF: You need a castle...

Apr 2006
I love this series, pls see it through to a few more chapters.
      GBF: I have plans... Just no time. :-)

Apr 2006
GRRRREAT!
      GBF: Coooooool!

Apr 2006
Nice. Nice twist at the end. And not nearly so much of a period piece (pun entirely unintentional) as Mathilda
      GBF: Pleased you liked it. Something wrong with Matilda?

Apr 2006
the best
      GBF: You are!

Apr 2006
I've abolsoutely enjoyed reading this series! Do you think you could do another one with Paul in it?
      GBF: Oh yes? Why?

Apr 2006
i liked it :). it is hard to give a numerical score;- i have no basis to remove points when so many stories of barely competent grammar and presentation get 10s for scratching the reader's mind just right. so a 10 for grammar with another 10 for the plea
      GBF: I might have to change my system. Thanks very much!

Mar 2006
Freaking excellent. Why? 1) Gave my girlfriend ideas 2) Got stuck in my head. Not that I mind. This, and the story involving Alys... can't quite remember the title. It Began With a Castle, something like that? Damned good, thanks.
      GBF: I really need to start charging... :-)

Mar 2006
Another good story with excellent visuals. Hm, wonder if she can continue to separate love and sex ... ?!?
      GBF: Only time will tell!

Mar 2006
I really love this story and the way you tell it. I love how powerful Paul is, but I'm more of a gentle lover myself and I would love to read more about Alys and Dom. Keep up the phenomeanl writing!
      GBF: I promise there will be some more. Not sure when...

Mar 2006
This is a very hot tale that could well develop into the kind of picaresque story as popularised by Henry Fielding in "Tom Jones".
      GBF: Thanks. I bleeped out the rest of your comments, because you got just a little close to my real intentions. :-)

Mar 2006
Gentle This is a great story which Alys learns the difference between Love and Sex. And she likes them both
      GBF: Shhh... It's supposed to be a secret!

Mar 2006
great chapter, she has a seriously good time between Paul and Domenic. I like that. Light and shade. Makes for a believable yarn. One minor slip ... You left off the :I: at the start of Chapter 5 ;)
      GBF: I'm not sure what you mean.

Mar 2006
Have I told you how much I LOVE LOVE LOVE your Castle series?
      GBF: Yeah, but tell me again!

Mar 2006
Thoroughly enjoyable. It's been quite a while since your last contribution to my pleasure.
      GBF: Hey, you keep your pleasure to yourself. :-)

Mar 2006
You got my number big time with this part of the story! *blush* Damn.......that was hot~
      GBF: Sit closer. :-)

Mar 2006
Ooooh Yea~ *giggle*
      GBF: Come sit next to me. :-)

Mar 2006
Lovely story gentle......you're never one to disappoint!
      GBF: Gee thanks!

Mar 2006
Naughty Alys, the bipolar minx, can't decide so she wants it all, poor girl.
      GBF: That's the least of her worries! :-)

Mar 2006
This is very interesting and I love it. The idea of being caught makes the story lively. Thaaction described is very warm and makes one wish he had a barn to work in.lol.
      GBF: Hell, knock one up. :-)

Mar 2006
So, she gets the "best" of both possible worlds...love and lust...Why do I have the feeling you won't let her enjoy it too much longer...LOL
      GBF: Because you know me too well! :-)

Mar 2006
And all this time I thought servant girls had it rough...
      GBF: They LIKE it rough!

Mar 2006
What do I think? Clearly, quality takes time.
      GBF: That's very... Unclear. :-)

Feb 2006
Wow!!! Your stories continue to amaze me. As a new reader, I'm astounded and aroused (needless to say) by the difference between your thoughtful, romantic erotica and the slam-bam-get-to-the-action-Mam stories that are the usual fare on other sites. The
      GBF: Thanks a lot!

Jan 2006
an easy 9 really enjoyed the 1st 4 parts
      GBF: Glad you're enjoying it. I must get back to it...

Nov 2005
Hummmmm, Alys really liked that, and so did I. It was soooooooooooo enjoyable......Thank you.
      GBF: Shhh... Don't tell. :-)

Nov 2005
lovely wonderful you do continue to spoil us please don't stop!
      GBF: Not yet!

Nov 2005
I enjoyed this chapter very much. Was somewhat surprised by Alys. She is a real sex hound where I had thought of her as a more loving but very sexy young woman.
      GBF: Thanks Hank. She's supposed to surprise you!

Nov 2005
The entire story is so very romantic and I think reflects the needs and desires of most young women. I know it does mine. I can't wait for some handsome man to take my cherry and make me cum and cum.
      GBF: Hey, the boys don't do so badly either. :-)

Nov 2005
Excellent! Each part simply got stronger and stronger. In this one, I could feel the tension of the connection between the two, could sense the sweat from his exertions, the agony that follows the ecstasy. Great story. More Parts?
      GBF: When I find the strength. :-)

Nov 2005
Very Good. This story gets better as it goes along.
      GBF: Whew.

Nov 2005
Good setup story line --- let's see what follows.
      GBF: Quite a lot, I hope, after all this time...

Nov 2005
Well done. You handle dialogue well. I'd say you're experimenting and succeeding admirably. I liked the 'no romance' declaration without brutality.
      GBF: Thanks. Let's hope I can keep it going...

Nov 2005
I love this story.......it's absolutely amazing. I had a great time reading it
      GBF: Cool!

Nov 2005
To show such restraint by an adult might not be believeable but it makes an excellent story. Thank you for taking the time to create this for others to read.
      GBF: Who's showing restraint? :-)

Nov 2005
Loved it. Glad to see the new chapter.
      GBF: I guess that means I should do it again. :-)

Nov 2005
Yay! You finally continued this story! Not as good as the other parts, but the situation is interesting. I hope you won't stop here!
      GBF: Damn!

Nov 2005
Erotic of course, but i know there is much more to cum can't wait till you bring that one to me
      GBF: More? Damn. :-)

Nov 2005
I read all four parts and it was a very good story. I really enjoyed how this young girl got to learn and enjoy sex with different guys. your telling of this is exciting and makes you visuallize just how it was. Hope you will continue to write these excit
      GBF: I can't seem to manage to stop. :-)

Nov 2005
Like I said Gentle..........You are superb with prose. It was excellent. Alys is a female I would have loved to have known. (An extention of Your mind). Very well written and arousing....an easy 10
      GBF: Thanks Boss! :-)

Sep 2005
Would you please continue the story? I've been waiting along time.
      GBF: Yeah, sorry about that. I had other things on my mind. I'll do my best.

Jul 2005
ok where is Castle Part 4???LOL Kudos!
      GBF: Soon. Promise.

Jul 2005
I rated this a 9 because, though when I first read it, I found the conversation pedantic, slow moving and became slightly bored, but then I thought.. how like real life. People often take time circumventing difficult/awkward subjects,.. how clever of you
      GBF: Well, thanks for the comprehensive feedback. I thought I'd fixed that...

Jul 2005
I liked it... just wondering, how do you pronounce "Alys"?
      GBF: Like Alice.

Jul 2005
I know where dom went! He ran to my house (haha, i wish) Kick ass writing, im waiting for part 4 :D
      GBF: Oh, oh... Pressure!

Jul 2005
WHAT????? What are you waiting for??!!! Where is Part 4????? LOL! I'm eagerly awaiting it's arrival....
      GBF: Me too. But for some reason it's expected that I WRITE it!

Jul 2005
All your characters are so different and so interesting. I can hardly wait for the continuation! I get the feeling Alys' spanking is ahead! LOL.
      GBF: Yeah, but they're all pretty horny! :-)

Jul 2005
Love it. Nothing contrived, just natural mutually enjoyable events is a middle agesd setting.
      GBF: When I opened this email, the first thing I saw was 'contrived'. I'm relieved. :-)

Jun 2005
What is it, dear Gentle, that makes a girl tingle with need when someone class her a wench? Do you know? I somehow think you might. And my favorite part - the older woman educating the younger, often overlooked, but you include it in a fabulous way. J
      GBF: They are just hanging around... :-)

Jun 2005
Gentle, The conversation was so real in this story I couldn't help but think "Gosh! That sounds like me!" Besides I can't help but admire a girl who is brave enough to ask for what she wants. I think I probably need a lesson in assertiveness from her. In
      GBF: Who do you think it was based on?

Jun 2005
I think you should call in sick tomorrow and write Part 4! :)
      GBF: How did you think I wrote 3?

Jun 2005
Typical male. ;-) Great chapter though!
      GBF: I might have to withdraw my to your comment on the previous chapter now! :-)

Jun 2005
Hotter than the sun!
      GBF: Will you marry me? :-)

Jun 2005
I loved all 3 chapters of this story... *pleads for more*. Your brilliance shines once again,Gentle.
      GBF: No need for pleading. I have plans. :-)

Jun 2005
Great

Jun 2005
Awwww, how sweet this story is wonderful, humorous, and romantic. Plus the dialogue is wonderful. I can't forget the best part it is real sexy!!!!!
      GBF: Ah, sexy. That was the plan! :-)

Jun 2005
This story is real hot, fun, and interesting. I really liked the dialogue it was pretty funny. You did a real good job. Can't wait to read part 2.
      GBF: Thanks. I thought you might like it.

Jun 2005
Looking forward to many more chapters!
      GBF: Oh oh... :-)

May 2005
Well done. Excellent stories. Keep up the good work.
      GBF: Thanks. Keep reading!

May 2005
What a great story! I can't wait till the next!!! Please Hurry I need to know what happens. You are a great wrighter!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
      GBF: Well, thanks. I can't work out why this is so popular the last few weeks, but I'm not complaining. The next piece is in my head. I just have to get it out.

May 2005
good story! Will you ever write a sequel, telling the story of the confrontation between Alys and the stablemaster? I hope, I hope, I hope!!!
      GBF: I will, I will! I just need to find the time...

May 2005
nice story, is there a next one? i like the relationship between dom and alys. i would like to see some jealousy between them, a growing love? i like romance :)
      GBF: I'll see what I can do...

May 2005
boring
      GBF: So is your feedback.

May 2005
Oh I love and I can't get enough of it. Please write another!
      GBF: I will, I promise.

May 2005
part 4
      GBF: :-)

May 2005
what's gonna happen next? i'm captivated...it's a fuckin awesome story!!!can't wait for more!!!I LOVE YOU!PLEASE hurry with the next one...can't stand waiting
      GBF: Feedback of the week! Easy. :-)

Apr 2005
hmmm, it was good some things in it a little crazy, hey but thats me.
      GBF: Yeah, this one is a little crazy.

Apr 2005
As always, your stories impress me, and I was especially delighted with this one. Wonderful sex with a humourous dialogue does it for me. You have an affinity for youthful thoughts and feelings. I'd like to know if the 'Staples'come back.
      GBF: I'll let you know.

Mar 2005
i was aroused
      GBF: Why only a 5 then?

Mar 2005
I like Your writing style.
      GBF: Thanks. Likewise your feedback style.

Mar 2005
Nice story! A bit more erotic detail would be appreciated.
      GBF: More? :-) Surely not!

Mar 2005
I think that "It Starts With A Castle" is an extremely well written piece of erotica that stimulates the mind and senses. It places the reader in the center of the story and hold's ones attention. When Alys watches the couple making love on her bed and li
      GBF: Thanks. I'm enjoying writing it, as well, so it's all working out...

Mar 2005
Alys is a very intelligent and very witty young woman; one that I'd enjoy meeting. Thanks very much for your story. (ies.)
      GBF: I'll see what I can arrange! :-)

Mar 2005
I think what I always think about Gentles stories, they are sweet and romantic stories, that gets me turn on, i hope yall like them just as much as me.
      GBF: Thanks. You are sweet and romantic yourself, to say such things.

Mar 2005
Hey this is wonderful I love all 3 parts. this is a great story. I am looking forward to the next part.
      GBF: This feedback is wonderful too. I wish you'd left an email address...

Mar 2005
Nice to read a continuing story from you. Just finished chapter three, and I'm really enjoying it. Looking forward to the next installment. Thanks for sharing your work.
      GBF: Yeah, well, should I leave it another year now? :-)

Mar 2005
A weeks good. I'm still wondering where we are going but the sex keeps me interested. Thanks
      GBF: So it's just the sex? :-)

Mar 2005
I loved all 3 parts. I am, of course, very curious as to what the stable master wants (though I have my suspicions). Wonderful writing, good characters. Keep up the good work!
      GBF: Your suspicious nature is... Probably justified! :-)

Mar 2005
Wonderful continuation of an excellent story....can't wait to see what happens next. (Unzip...button...hell who cares, I'm to involved in all the action going on!!) Alys & Dom are wonderful
      GBF: Thanks. You want to be in the next chapter? :-)

Mar 2005
This, my friend, is a very peculiar story. In my opinion, there is a vast difference between this one & the others, but then, I've only read about 20 so far. It arouses my deeper senses and has created an appetite for more. For now, I'll settle with more
      GBF: More? Not yet...

Mar 2005
yeah baby fuck me that had a good wank on it
      GBF: So... You're a writer too? :-)

Mar 2005
What a wonderful weeks work......You are very incredible.....thanks again Gentle......loved it...
      GBF: Oh, thank you!

Mar 2005
Alys is a great character! I can't wait to see what happens next! Funny how Dom unzipped his trousers, but afterwards he buttoned himself up... he must have some funny pants, especially for a medieval setting. :p
      GBF: Damn it! Fixed now.

Mar 2005
As usual your mind and script have totally blown me out of the water... all i can say is bring on the next chapter... im waiting
      GBF: You can stay!

Mar 2005
Very very stimulating.....nice....loved it....
      GBF: Oh, just what I planned... :-)

Mar 2005
Mentally evocative. This is going to be a very interesting journey, I think I like 'Alys.' I like that she is honest, curious, and...fun. "It's okay to be alittle slutty sometimes," right?
      GBF: She hasn't BEEN slutty.... Yet!

Mar 2005
Very enjoyable - even more than part 1. It's refreshing to see a story where the writer doesn't assume virginal women are naive and skittish. (And humorous to portray the guy that way!) Inexperienced doesn't have to mean silly, and you've shown it. :)
      GBF: Thanks. No, really, thanks a lot.

Mar 2005
Part 2 was much better than part 1 in my opinion. This is because I felt that I knew something about Alys ...... It is a fun story with a lot of future opertunity for further development.
      GBF: Much? But you said part 1 was great! :-)

Mar 2005
Part 1 was great. Will read part 2 in few minutes. You get a 10 for part 1
      GBF: Thanks. Now what about part 2?

Mar 2005
i was so aroused while reading the story.
      GBF: Well, good for you!

Mar 2005
I think I like part two much more than part one. It probably has a lot to do with the clever dialogue, I'm a sucker for that and you do it so well. I hope you take this one and run with it. It deserves several more chapters and I know that you have th
      GBF: Oh oh. Thanks. I'm even more impressed that you want more, given the eight month wait for this one!

Mar 2005
Awsome!Gentle i've said it before and i'll say it again you are the best!! I have enjoyed every one of your stories. Well off to a very cold shower,boyfriend is outa state this week.Keep up the great work;-)
      GBF: Hope he gets back soon.

Mar 2005
Hi! Just wanted to tell you I liked your story. Its refreshing that your heroine is a little innocent without being clueless about sex. As for ideas for other chapters, how about...
      GBF: Thanks. I'll keep your ideas to myself for now though...

Mar 2005
This is so good, I can't wait to get to part II. Very well done Gentle.....nice, especially the climax part....
      GBF: Isn't that usually the best part? :-)

Mar 2005
I'm liking this story.
      GBF: Thanks for that. Sorry to snip you, but you gave the story away!

Mar 2005
It's a good piece and 'tis worthy of continuance. That being said, its not of quite the calibre of others you've done.
      GBF: Oh, bugger. And thanks, at the same time...

Mar 2005
Very hot, by the way. Yum. I wish my first was as much fun!
      GBF: :-)

Mar 2005
Nice start, Can't really give you any suggestions. Hope you'll find a good idea.
      GBF: I'll do my best, I promise.

Mar 2005
Great job! Erotic, beliveable, and very well written. I gave you a 10. I can't imagine why the other 27 readers gave you scores that averaged 8.8. I look forward to the rest of the tale.
      GBF: What can I say? :-)

Mar 2005
good story. I'm waiting for the next chapter...
      GBF: Damn, another one! :-)

Mar 2005
Awwww! How sweet! I had never read the first before this, but now I'm going to have to look forward to a third part!
      GBF: Third? Already? :-)

Mar 2005
You really can write dialogues ! wonderful.humorous, romantic.
      GBF: Thanks. Again and again!

Mar 2005
It's perfect. It's so good for those who like innocent men. Thank you so much for writing this. There is only one typo, though. If it helps.. But seriously, other than that it was amazing.
      GBF: I'm not offended. Thank you very much. I'm disappointed you didn't trust me with your email address, but I understand that too. Thanks again for the kind words.

Mar 2005
I'm anxious to see the tie in to the title. Is the prince lurking and will he except a non-virgin. Masterfull telling of a great story. I'll watch carefully for your next post. Thanks
      GBF: Given my delivery frequency with this story, I hope I don't keep you waiting too long to find out...

Mar 2005
This story just keeps getting better. The dialogue flows well, and the action builds toward the obvious and inevitable conclusion. Are you planning to continue this story? If so, you've left a good jumping point... if not, it is nicely self-contained
      GBF: Oh, it's not finished yet... But I must get cracking, or I'll die before I get to the end. Eight monthly chapters just doesn't do it for people!

Mar 2005
Sweet and fun! I like her viewpoint, and you've adapted your dialogue style nicely to the period.
      GBF: Thanks.

Mar 2005
This was wonderful! I loved the first part and was looking forward to this one. It was as great as i expected it to be. This story is my favorite of all you have written.
      GBF: Wow, thanks. It's not finished yet, either...

Mar 2005
good

Mar 2005
it was a nice story

Feb 2005
"...the two of them had shed their clothing, and we standing" It's "were standing." Right? Couldn't find anything else wrong with this story. I got too lost in it.
      GBF: Damn!... Okay, fixed it now. Thanks. Just as well you couldn't find any more! I'm pleased you got lost.

Feb 2005
I thought it was hot. The only thing I wish was different was I wish at some point either after the hot sex or the next morning the three of them would have gotten together. How wonderful it would be to lose yourself in a threesome? I get hot just thinkin
      GBF: Well, you keep thinking about it, because I have other plans! :-)

Feb 2005
Well done. It could rival Sue Johansen and Teresa Medeiros any day of the week, were it a book and not a short story.
      GBF: Oh, no... I don't know who they are!

Feb 2005
A man who likes an audience, how sexy is that. I can't believe I haven't read this yet, I adore 'ancient' stories! Your descriptions are hypnotic.
      GBF: Thanks. I appreciate that.

Feb 2005
Delightful!! Great verbal painting of time, place, the picture surrounding the events. I really enjoyed this..... the sneakiness, the slyness, then the honesty. Wonderful story!
      GBF: Thanks... If only I can get the next bit working...

Oct 2004
I really liked the voyeur scene, good stuff, the dialogue made me giggle. Poor Alys
      GBF: Alys will get her own back soon. I have plans...

Sep 2004
The couples'sex was hot but I liked Alys's solo a lot better. Nice bit of humour a the end. I always enjoy your dialogue. Nice job.

Sep 2004
ROFL! Hot and funny both. Love it.

Aug 2004
very entertaining.It needs a sequel.
      GBF: It's intended to get one. I need some 30 or 40 hours days...

Jul 2004
Hi Gentle. Well, you don't have even to try do you, those lines just roll out of you don't they?
      GBF: They certainly do not! It's a lot of hard work!

Jun 2004
Rather it reminds me of times I've been with a woman, in a situation where we've both wanted to make love... We'd have to be very quiet, and maybe we would be detected, but were willing to accept that. Your story reminded me of those feelings.
      GBF: Oh, good!

Jun 2004
This one was fun! Interesting characters, and an excellent sex scene. I enjoyed the exhibition / voyeur aspect of the story.