The Road to Hell
"Mmmm," she commented intelligently. "Now turn around, so I can see the front."
The Road to Hell - Day 1 - Jan 06
The Road to Hell - Day 2 - Jan 06
The Road to Hell - Day 3 - Jan 06
The Road to Hell - Day 3b - Feb 06
The Road to Hell - Day 3c - Feb 06
The Road to Hell - Day 4 - Jan 12
Oct 2013
Love this story. I really feel for Paul the main character. Any chance of it being continued? ;):D
Jul 2013
great!
Jan 2013
... what a GREAT story. So well thought out and written.
I very much appreciated the read.
Dec 2012
Truly amazing writing. I've been reading erotica for over 20 years and it's very rare, but extremely rewarding, to find an author of your caliber and skills. The pace keeps the reader intensely engaged and stimulated. I can hardly wait until Day 5. Please
Dec 2012
it may have taken you 5 years to complete day 4, but, IMHO at least, the result really is a credit for your work.
I truly hope you'll add a day 5, but I guess it won't happen... :(
GBF: Oh, you never know...
Dec 2012
A lovely story. Your writing is remarkable. I particularly liked the attitudes of the parents. Something not that frequent,in my experience......
Nov 2012
This is your second story I've read today. I'm
really enjoying this one.
Nov 2012
I apparently didn't read the first three days when
they first came out, but I did enjoy the fourth
day.
I'm sure I'd enjoy reading more about them if you
ever get back to it.
Thanks for sharing your story.
Jun 2012
Fantastic ...........so romantic but real!
May 2012
The stories, as always, are excellent.
May 2012
I recently came across this story and enjoyed reading it (thus far). I'm curious ... will there be more chapters posted anytime soon?
GBF: Well, I just added one, but that took me a number of years... :-)
Apr 2012
t's been too long and you haven't lost your touch, thanks for the wonderful and most recent story.
Feb 2012
Well, this is pretty spectacular. Bookmark'd.
Feb 2012
Really good work on the Road to Hell series, I've thoroughly enjoyed it. So does my girlfriend/fiancee, and we've reenacted a couple scenes already.
Jan 2012
Thanks. Really sweet. Reminded me of being young and in love. More heart inducing than lust inducing, and I liked it.
Jan 2012
Although a pushover for love stories, I find all of your stories to be rewarding reads. You have an amazing range and a delightful style, and your heroines are all people I wish I could cross paths with. Most important, the technical quality of your writi
Jan 2012
I love the women who live in your imagination. What I wouldn't give to meet one of them in the RW!
Jan 2012
Long wait but worth it. Don't end here, they still have more exploring to do.
Jan 2012
MORE - MORE - MORE
Jan 2012
Since I read all four chapters tonight, 4 year wait wasn't a problem...yet!
Great story as always. Thanks
Jan 2012
It may have taken 5 year but good things take a long time and this entire novel is great. Your exciting, conversational style of writing is so refreshing to read. Thanks so much for your hard work & effort. I am sure you have made many people happy.
Jan 2012
I would just use 1 word "NEAT"
Jan 2012
Great story, would have liked to do that when I was that young.
Jan 2012
Yes it was a long wait but very worth it. More?
Jan 2012
Helluva story... so far.
Not sure anything written is worth waiting five years for but this comes close.
Jan 2012
...here I am starting over and still think this story is great. Very good flow, gets and more importantly holds my attention. Keep writing, I like it!!!
Jan 2012
Probably the best coming of age vignette I have
ever read here.
Jan 2012
Yahoo! Awesome! Terrific! Thanks for continuing
this awesome story! PLEASE don't make me wait so
long next time :-)
Jan 2012
Worth every word!!!!
Jan 2012
I am so freaking excited that you are continuing this!!
Jan 2012
this takes me back sixty odd years, memories of a wonderful girl who taught me a hell of a lot.
This is wonderful, you have a brilliant touch.
Jan 2012
Great story. E-mail me more...
Jan 2012
What a wonderful new years present, a new chapter from you.
Jan 2012
Awww. It's sweet and sexy - I like it! :)
Jan 2012
I like this. A lot. As in, I want more. Yeah, I know you want an end, but I hope you don't find one anytime soon.
Aug 2010
That one is good enough to finish.
GBF: If I only had time...
Jun 2010
This is excellent and a fun read. Can't wait to read the rest. Great humor.
Sep 2009
Excellent story, really bringing out the subtle changes in anticipation, in knowledge, in understanding.... so erotic, so true-to-life. If only I was that young again :)
Sep 2009
First thing I've read here that seems even remotely like real life! Charming tale, endearing characters, a very nice piece of work. I sincerely, hope there's more to follow about these two delightful kids.
Sep 2009
Very sexy. Every boy's fantasy in words. I had a couple babysitters I wish were like CA.
Sep 2009
Very good story. I liked your style and manner of addressing the subject. Very entertaining. Keep up the good work.
Will there be more to this story? You need to take us to the next level.
GBF: It's about priorities...
Jan 2009
ARG!!!! Where's part's 4, 5, 6, 7, and Fin ?
Lovely story, I like the progression. The characters could use a little more fleshing out. Make them a touch more round.
GBF: I know, I know...
Dec 2008
Excellent story with well developed characters. Please continue this story line...it's more than just erotica; I'd like to see how the relationship turns out. I particularly like CA's slightly sarcastic attitude.
Nov 2008
Another nice one, but not quite up to part 1.
Nov 2008
Super story. Full of details, nice progression, well written without typos.
Nov 2008
I really liked it. Makes me wish I had a young friend like this when I was young.
Nov 2008
I dont know if you're still writing as this was dated a long time ago, but please please continue this story. Im completely interested.
GBF: I have plans... But no time. :-( I'm trying to finish [Photographic Memory] first.
Nov 2008
This has been one of my favorite stories by far. It reminds me of when I was in high school.
Nov 2008
You're a great writter. Your stories evolve with erotism and without being harsh or vulgar. Some of your stuff could be expanded easily with prequels or further chapters. Keep up the good work.
I'm looking forard to reading more.
Sep 2008
Though I certainly agree with her, with regards to Road to Hell. Outstanding writing there.
Oct 2007
Howdy,
Welcome back to SOL!
Could you please, please, PLEASE, PRETTY PLEASE,
finish this story????
PLEASE!?!?!?!?!?!?
Jul 2006
I do hope the Road to Hell is going to be continued. Very well written and highly enjoyable.
GBF: That's the plan. I just need to get some of these other things out of my head. :-)
Jul 2006
Please write more! Hell, I don't know how many times I mastraubated while reading this!
GBF: Like you lost count? :-)
Jul 2006
brilliant
GBF: Thanks.
Jul 2006
Hi Gentle
Marvelous story, with excellent dialogue, interesting situations, and very, VERY hot scenes!
Bravo! Looking forward to reading the rest of the series.
GBF: Damn! :-)
Jun 2006
please please write another chapter, i beg you! in one word spectacular.
GBF: I will, I will!
Jun 2006
Actually I read all three days and was delighted. It was the best tease and oral sex, I've read. Thank you for sharing
GBF: Great. I must add some more...
Jun 2006
i waiting for the next chapter of this story
GBF: I'm working on it!
Jun 2006
I love the innocence in your story...a lot of writers cannot do that, and I really enjoyed your story.
GBF: Thanks for that. I enjoyed your feedback!
Jun 2006
Great story! I'm waiting for what happens next!
GBF: Me too!
May 2006
Haven't you made this cute couple wait long enough?
When will we read Day 4?
GBF: Yeah, I have. My head's been a couple ofother
places.
May 2006
Fantastic! I love it! Please carry on
GBF: I will. I will.
May 2006
allsome story you do innocent awaking enjoyable and beautifully done please do more in this story line love to read more
Apr 2006
Nice ending to a 'full' day once again, but pools are good wow there has been alot of water so far but is the a pool table hmm? wonder? maybe?
Thx again
GBF: Pool table? You sick man...
Apr 2006
Well this is a twist two new people wonder how it will turn out, but I like this whole plot where its going slowly but surely Yay!
GBF: Oh oh. I hope you realise I haven't finished...
Apr 2006
well this is new, never read any phone sex stories before, but it was nice the whole still speaking with her and imagening what they are doing while masturbating had a nice touch but the best must be the fact that it goes on thx for another great story
GBF: You need to get out more... Oh, or read these...
Kitty
Phone for
Jackie
Apr 2006
Just as good as teh first and still keeping the atmosphere fresh with new ideas, and its not only how they are doing it but the 'fun' of it all makes it nice.
I really enjoyed the shower as well personal favourite
GBF: So long as you didn't stick the pages together. :-)
Apr 2006
it was very nice as in the way you made the atmosphere be from every day life to a relaxed sexual sensation from a bit of a 'look' to a bit of foreplay
GBF: Did I do that? :-)
Apr 2006
More! A great story. You need to get to the main event!!
GBF: You mean we didn't have one yet?
Apr 2006
I think it is a great story. It is subtle not slam bam like most. Would definately like to read more. A nd I expect I will.
Jonathon
GBF: Well, you have a few more chapters there...
Apr 2006
You realize this could be an ongoing romance novel, and most likely publishable???
MORE MORE MORE MORE
GBF: Well, I've heard these things before. Get a publisher to tell me that, and then I'll listen!
Apr 2006
I think it's WONDERFUL!
I also think it's time for you to keep writing it!!!
GBF: Damn. More pressure. :-)
Apr 2006
Excellent story.Are you a writer in your work life as well. Can't wait to read how these two "finish" the trip.
GBF: Nope. Find me a publisher. :-)
Apr 2006
Please, mistress; could we have some more?
GBF: I gotta do something about that...
Mar 2006
Freaking excellent. Why?
1) Gave my girlfriend ideas
2) Got stuck in my head. Not that I mind. This, and the story involving Alys... can't quite remember the title. It Began With a Castle, something like that? Damned good, thanks.
GBF: I really need to start charging. :-)
Mar 2006
Your writing is excellent. Your stories involving and ever so sexy. Rapidly you are becoming one of my favourite authors. :)
GBF: Well, thanks. Your feedback isn't bad, either! :-)
Mar 2006
Well, I liked your road tale, especially the two earliest chapters.
But then I'm always a sucker (mmmm, Freudian?) for young people sex, especially when clothed.
GBF: Yeah, that's Freudian, alright! :-)
Mar 2006
killer more please
GBF: You bet.
Mar 2006
I just wanted to let you know that to me these are one of three types of erotic stories that I like to read. Your writing is great and a real turn on. I hope you keep this story going. Your pace in the story is perfect in that it builds slowly chapter
GBF: Thanks a lot. Sorry there isn't room for the rest of your comments.
Mar 2006
Nice work, especially the way u pieced it together, i suggest you use an intersecting chapter with Dawn in it with Gareth. Hey, dont let me stop you! It's YOUR story and you have to the right to direct it =)
GBF: No offence, but fat chance! :-)
Mar 2006
Gentle This was good but not your best. Too predictable and not your normally great dialogue. It is still a 8
GBF: You know, I think you are my toughest customer!
Mar 2006
Good I couldn't stop reading this serie. I loved it, so hot, vivid yet elusive.
Takk fyrir! Thank you!
GBF: No idea what that last bit means...
Mar 2006
That really was a good day. I might need to try one of those days sometime.
GBF: I thought ALL your days were like that!
Mar 2006
Wonderful...I really did like the slowness of this part. O yea an that lil twist at the end. Yep I really do think this is the best story I've read yet. Keep up the wonderful work.
GBF: Oh, wow, thanks!
Mar 2006
loved it now i know who was at the door keep up the good work
GBF: I'll do my best. Thanks.
Mar 2006
I wish I'd been there.
GBF: You wanted to watch, or play?
Mar 2006
Great story - I love your use of dialogue to build the playfulness of their developing relationship. I am dying to read more... ;)
Thanks for your sharing.
GBF: Any time!
Mar 2006
More of conversations
GBF: More of feedback.
Feb 2006
GBF: 1? Bugger. :-(
Feb 2006
That's Great! I love it! Magnifico!
GBF: :-)
Feb 2006
i got an idea. come up with a chapter naming convention that's consistent.
GBF: I got one too. How about you stop being so fucking inconsiderate about things you get for nothing? Or maybe ask for a fucking refund?
Put plainly, ask nicely.
Feb 2006
What a wonderful day!
GBF: I thought so. Thanks.
Feb 2006
Good chapter, I can put that rope away for a while
ROFL
I like the way Dawn handles the situation by just getting in there and enjoying the fun. Sounds like they all had a great afternoon. Wish I could see the pictures
GBF: Just close your eyes!
Feb 2006
= Great.......really great. Up to your usual standards.
GBF: Thanks. Twice.
Feb 2006
AMAZING...its my fav story series to read!
GBF: Oh, good. Thanks.
Feb 2006
I will make it simple.
One of the finest stories I read in a while. Its romantic, sexy and funny.
Great work, sir. Pray continue.
GBF: Simple is good! That way I'll understand. And thanks. Okay, I will. :-)
Feb 2006
Awww..... :-)
"""
You do 'innocent, but sexy' very well, you know that?"
Tramp
That's because I *am*! :-) -Gentle
"""
BIO! BIO!! :-)
GBF: Fat chance! :-)
Feb 2006
This story gets more beautiful every time. Hope you will continue with some more. It is very exciting.Lovbe the way you make things seem so real.
Stirs lot5's of feelings.
GBF: Beauty is finite, you know. I might have to run out!
Feb 2006
The story is romantic, teasing (or is that titalating) and enjoyable.
GBF: Damn, and I was going for raunchy! :-)
Feb 2006
agree totally with Tramp! erotically innocent & sexy! Hehe
GBF: My work is done! :-)
Feb 2006
love playing in the pool.
GBF: Good for you. Anything else happen there? :-)
Feb 2006
You do 'innocent, but sexy' very well, you know that?"
GBF: That's because I *am*! :-)
Feb 2006
Another excellent story with a twist at the end...If I wasn't hooked on this story before, I am now. Can't wait to read what happens in the next chapter. Gread job.
GBF: A hook was just what I was after!
Feb 2006
I have to agree with tramp, This story is so interesting, i wish that I knew to wait until it was finished before starting it. Please finish the next part soon!!!! No eating or sleeping til it's done!
Your fanatically fantastic fan
GBF: God no, please don't start agreeing with Tramp. I have enough trouble with her already. And you! :-)
Feb 2006
The suspense is killing me.
GBF: Oh, good. :-)
Feb 2006
I couldn't wait for your next chapter, and was thrilled when I saw it was ready. I thought this chapter was going to bring some relief to my suspense, but somehow I am even more egger to read the next. I really should have known! Another good one Gentle t
GBF: Nasty, aren't I? :-)
Feb 2006
That ending was totally unexpected. A nice change from the same old.
GBF: Oh, good! And thanks.
Feb 2006
Good - can't wait for the next. Hurry up please.
GBF: I don't do 'hurry up' unless people leave an email address. :-)
Feb 2006
In Chapter 3, his Mum is at work, but Ch. 4 opens with his Mum opening the door only a few minutes later.....
Tryin' to help.
GBF: Nah, she came home in the meantime! :-)
Feb 2006
Gentle I am continually amazed at how you use dialog to support the story. Better than any writer I know. The relationship between CA and Paul is really described by the dialog. CA's humour is great and almost as good as Paul's. They make a "natural" c
GBF: I'll do my best. Thanks a lot.
Feb 2006
Oh, shit.
;-)
So good, so far, but let's see you get yourself (and them) out of *this*.
GBF: No sweat!
Feb 2006
I am enjoying this story, though I have no idea quite where you are going. As far as rating the story so far, in an honest rating, 85 of 100. Good start, Believable characters and plotline.
GBF: 85? I can handle that!
Feb 2006
Damn you for a wicked cliffhanger ! :)
GBF: Up yours too, buddy. :-)
Feb 2006
Lynched? That would be letting you off easy. It will be slow and drive you mad. Do not let it happen again.
Enjoy your writing.
GBF: Roger! :-)
Feb 2006
I think it's great.Love the fact that they might get caught. Makes it exciting. Please write more.
GBF: More? :-)
Feb 2006
You better be writing fast, I can see some folks gathering some rope
GBF: Bit of suspense won't hurt... Too much. :-)
Feb 2006
I soooo love it. But I didn't expect anything less from you.
GBF: Damn expectations. :-) Thanks Wanda.
Feb 2006
Oh, yeah :-)
Very good! Great, even!
Keep them coming!! ;-)
GBF: I'll do my best. Thanks.
Feb 2006
I'm 59 and really enjoyed the story. The humor combined with the sex was entertaining. At this point in life, thinking back to my youth and how I would have loved to have had an experience like the one in your story. Keep up the good writing.
GBF: No need to look back. You're only 59!
Feb 2006
A very fun story.
Feb 2006
very goo keep it up!
GBF: That's very Freudian!
Feb 2006
A little slow, but, I think that's what makes it so good!! Keep up the good writing and please DO continue sending me updates.
GBF: I'll make the next one faster! :-)
Feb 2006
i like it who was at the door did you continue this I like it as well as your other stories
GBF: Hell, I only wrote this one yesterday!
Feb 2006
Great story, good characters, hot sex, and a suspenseful ending (to this part).
GBF: You realise people are telling me off about this suspense? :-)
Feb 2006
A delightful story. I love CA's playfulness and daring. It is a lot o fun. I really enjoyed the way the guy made her *****. That was fun.
GBF: Fun is good!
Feb 2006
Wow! The ***** was 'telegraphed' for a long time, but this ***** twist at the end was definitely not expected ... and the suspense of finding out who they are and what will happen next is lovely...
GBF: Good!
Feb 2006
These two certainly are quick learners ... at it like pros already. I guess I was probably hoping for a little more shyness and innocence from CA, but nevertheless, still a very readable read - just too much like all the other material out there.
GBF: Shyness? Not much. Sorry you feel that way.
Feb 2006
gentle and beautiful
Feb 2006
Hey, Gentle, I finally got round to reading Day 1 and now I'm definitely gonna flick the calender straight to Day 2. I love the innocence and youthful experimentation of this story and look forward to seeing it develop. More later perhaps.
GBF: Best of luck!
Feb 2006
Very, very good job of building excitement slowly through dialogue and little else. Takes talent. I'm envious of yours.
GBF: Oh, thanks. I just can't describe things! :-)
Feb 2006
You're a right bastard for that ending -- you know that don't you?
GBF: Yeah! :-)
Feb 2006
Ok, this should be one of those ones where you've written it all already because I AM HANGING ON THE EDGE OF MY SEAT! Who are those people?! :-)
GBF: Not telling!
Feb 2006
Really great!!!!!!! I am looking forward to part 4.
GBF: All these expectations. :-)
Feb 2006
I cannot think of of a comment other than OUTSTANDING, as ever your fan.
GBF: Thanks. Outstanding is pretty damned good!
Feb 2006
Another great one Gentle, You can tell that you put a tremendouse amount of time and effort into these. No pressure but...I CAN'T WAIT TILL THE NEXT!!! lol okay maybe a little pressure there. But I can't help it you ROCK!!
GBF: You hitting on me? :-)
Soon, I promise.
Feb 2006
Congratulations - I especially enjoyed the light-hearted dialogue.
GBF: Thanks. I better add some more.
Feb 2006
Good story but this chapter kinda feels like a filler for the next.
GBF: What? You want me to get CA to give you a call? :-)
Feb 2006
Very very Good!
GBF: Great!
Feb 2006
Gar.
I hate your cliffhangers! And I can't imagine Paul enjoys them either...
But then, at least you finish them. Sometimes...
GBF: Rest assured that there will be more action! :-)
Feb 2006
Brilliant! A delight. The best thing I've read on the net for an age. I love the way you do it all with dialogue. H
GBF: Thanks H. Next time leave an address, so I can think you properly.
Feb 2006
I really like the quick back and forth, and their intimacy, which gets me off better than long anatomic descriptions.
GBF: You know you can make friends for life like that? :-)
Feb 2006
I like Chris a lot, the cheeky little bitch.
Paul, on the other hand, is a tiny bit too much the doormat, but he seems to be doing all right for himself nevertheless.
GBF: He'll catch up...
Feb 2006
Ok this story is really starting to bring back all kinds of memory. This is rally good, plus I liked the phone thing.
GBF: Oh, great, you can help now!
Feb 2006
This is real good, I loved the way are taking it slow.
GBF: Glad you like it. I'll keep the pace down. :-)
Feb 2006
I'd love to hear more!
GBF: Damn! :-)
Feb 2006
WOW!!! I would like to read more :)
GBF: Yeah, but that requires me to WRITE more. :-)
Many thanks.
Feb 2006
Don't understand why it took me so long to get to this, now will definitely get to the others. Reminds me of so many innocent, yet, naughty things we kids used to do. Loved it, can't wait to finish...
GBF: Great Hope I hear back from you.
Feb 2006
This is more realistic that most of the crap out there. Born and raised on a farm in Indiana, it covers a time from age 10 until going into the Navy. Althought my experience(was incest) with my older sister, you discription brought back memories. Looking
GBF: I better get writing. No incest though.
Feb 2006
I starting to wonder did you stalk me when I was younger, I'm saying this right here bring back so many memories. Anywho good job, I like it, it was nice an slow
GBF: So you could give me some pointers for the next part?
Feb 2006
Its getting involved now, with *****, what next I ask myself, love Jemma
GBF: Uh uh. No giving the story away! :-)
Feb 2006
Another of your wonderful stories by the seem of it, with the innate fumblings of a pubescient couple, the feelings that go with it, we've all experienced it , with delight or regret or both
love Jemma
GBF: I said this already Jemma, but leave an email address next time! Thanks for the kind words.
Jan 2006
soso
GBF: oh :-(
Jan 2006
This is very superlative. I have to say one of your best that I've read. It wasn't all that out there. Very sexy. Good work.
GBF: Hell, I hope you read the rest then!
Jan 2006
What these stories make me do......awesome!
GBF: :-)
Jan 2006
Like it so far? Hell Yes. Loads of fun. Innocence of childhood. First time and all that. Really enjoying it. More please.
GBF: Great. Just what I was after!
Jan 2006
VERY VERY SEXY! You have my attention
GBF: Oh, good!
Jan 2006
Well done. They already are a very close couple - can't wait to see what happens next!
GBF: Bonking. :-)
Jan 2006
Still going strong! It has been very good and just keeps getting better.
GBF: Thanks a lot. The pressure! :-)
Jan 2006
Well, now I did read chapter 3. A very cool phone sex scene. Of course the only time I tried it the phone kept slipping off my shoulder and hitting the floor. What I wouldn't of given for a speaker phone back then.
GBF: Or a hands free kit!
Jan 2006
I've never participated in phone sex and the relating of it leads me to believe I didn't miss much. I was expecting the plot to move forward a bit but didn't see it. Just keep teasing.
Thanks for sharing and I'll look forward to next time.
GBF: There's no rush...
Jan 2006
Inpatiently waiting for Day 3b.
GBF: Already?
Jan 2006
Too long and not much of interest. Sounds like a girly story.
GBF: Hmmm... The scores would suggest you are out on a limb there, but thanks for the comments.
Jan 2006
Good story, I wish I had a babysitter like that when I was young.
GBF: Don't we all!
Jan 2006
Excellent...fun...can't wait for more
GBF: Damn! :-)
Jan 2006
One of my favorite stories , sex and humor.
GBF: Glad to hear it. Hope I can keep it that way.
Jan 2006
I liked the tension provided for in the ending. The phone encounter was a good mix of innocence and wickedness. I am finding I like the characters more and more.
Dana
GBF: I'm the same with the readers!
Jan 2006
Ohooooouuuuuuuuu, What a wonderful way to start the day. Gentle you are sooooooooooo good at this writing thing.....Thank you.
GBF: You're not bad at this feedback thing, either. :-)
Jan 2006
Wow! It gets better and better. You sure are doing a fine job of keeping my motor running.
GBF: Pleased to hear it.
Jan 2006
Rather sophomoric, don't you think?
Pretty tame...didn't strike me as too erotic.
Phone sex in this day of web cams and porn flics just doesn't have the same appeal...although there is still a business providing that as a paid service.
GBF: Sorry you feel that way. My other feedback wouldn't indicate that you were with the majority...
Jan 2006
Another excellent story in dialogue...maybe not with quite the impact as the face-to-face parts but that's the same as in real life. Still very erotic and very readable.
GBF: Remember it's just one chapter though... :-)
Jan 2006
Where's Chapter 3??? Hurry Hurry Hurry!!!
GBF: It's here now!!!
Jan 2006
It's good.
Very hot.
GBF: :-)
Jan 2006
Nice work sir!
GBF: Thank you Ma'am
Jan 2006
It was a fun read. Thanks!
GBF: Just as well. Onward! :-)
Jan 2006
Another riveting story from the master of erotic dialogue. Loved it all.
GBF: I hope you don't think it's finished! :-)
Jan 2006
This HOPELESS ROMANTIC really likes the overall direction of this story! :-)
But i just wonder if you could increase the tension by more than a little bit if she WASN'T ON THE PILL, which I suspect is a far more likely situation for two kids still in s
GBF: Nah, I like it like this, but thanks just the same.
Jan 2006
Hey Gentle..........yeah....its good. Realistic too. At that age, I spouted at the least provocation.....most times into my underwear. It was a major undertaking to get the weapon out to work without spouting too early. Good plot, and as usual well writte
GBF: Pleased you like it. I better write the next one!
Jan 2006
Nice start. I do envy your talent with dialogue. And, of course, I'm very interested in where you go from here. I guess the predictable thing is for these 2 kids to have sex--but what about a surprise? The 2 mothers get back and join in? Unlikely in the c
GBF: No, no, no. It's not THAT kind of story! But thanks.
Jan 2006
A great story as usual. Also a little too real.
Something about the best laid plans of mice and men keeps popping into this feeble brain. The operative word is LAID. I can't wait for the rest.
GBF: No rush. :-)
Jan 2006
Hey! Another great chapter in another great story! You do such a masterful job relating adolescent horniness. This story rates a solid '10' from me (and a solid 6" too!).
GBF: That reminds me... Part 3. :-)
Jan 2006
Nice story... Thsnks for sharing Ron
GBF: Thanks for reading.
Jan 2006
Well, I read about one paragraph, and decided to copy to disc, so I may read it at (...ahem) my "leisure". Nicely done. (Kiwi, eh? Nice.) The tentative beginnings are erotic, in a yearning-for-adolescence sort of way. ahhh, if only I had known then, w
GBF: None of us knew then what we know now. :-)
Jan 2006
Kind-of-disappointed in the lack of sex intensity found in part 1. But it isill agreat story.
GBF: Hey, it's tough to please everyone. :-)
Jan 2006
do you have anything in the Student Teacher Relationships. I don't know but for some reasion those have always had a "hard" spot for me. Go Figure my Drama Teacher was my First sex Fantacy I ever had and still 25 years later she is still center stage i
GBF: No, and... How sad. Time to move on, maybe...
Jan 2006
Love everything you write.. Could the road to hell be any more enticing?
GBF: Well, we could have dancing girls. :-)
Jan 2006
It just keeps getting better. A great story so far. Patiently (just) waiting the next chapter
GBF: You're so easy to please. :-)
Jan 2006
Great job Kid. But then that's what I'd expect from you. All of your stories have been a lot of fun.
GBF: Kid? :-)
Jan 2006
yeh liking the pace just fine.
Some kids just race to the end together and then find they have missed out on the fun of taking the time to enjoy themselves along the way. This pace suits the characters and will soon end up with them as one.
Nice s
GBF: Well, these two aren't organised enough to rush! Thanks.
Jan 2006
Good tale! I suspect this tale may lead to him getting some tail...eventually! Only give you a 9 so you keep striving to excel!
GBF: Bastard. :-)
Jan 2006
LOVE IT!.......your PACE is GOOD.
GBF: Thanks!
Jan 2006
It's a good story.
Sometimes the one and two word conversation exchanges seem a little to brief to me, considering what they're talking about. I first saw it in Vivian. For me, just a little would be adequate.
Still enjoy the work, though.
GBF: Everyone is, of course, different. Thanks for the feedback.
Jan 2006
Still loving it, but you need to send the next part out faster I hate suspense. But I think you know that about me already. :)
GBF: You know, sometimes you shouldn't get what you want. :-)
Jan 2006
I love it. I really really do.
GBF: So you like it then? :-)
Jan 2006
Cute story , thank you.
GBF: Hey, it was a pleasure!
Jan 2006
I noted the story codes and all they included limit this story. Can I assume they will expand as the story continues? As usual it is well written and titilating. I'm not sure whose in charge or if it even matters.
GBF: It's a reasonably safe assumption...
Jan 2006
It was great. I really injoyed her playing innocent. Made the story more interesting. Hope you will continue with this, love reading it.
GBF: Playing? Waddaya mean, playing? :-)
Jan 2006
gr8 story very sexy and exciting
GBF: Thanks.
Jan 2006
Oh, yes
GBF: Oooh, a puppy dog. :-)
Jan 2006
Delicious! I like these two, I hope the eventually take it to the next level...
GBF: There's another level? :-)
Jan 2006
Thanks for sending this one. I like the good-humored teasing.
GBF: *What* teasing? :-)
Jan 2006
That was cool.
GBF: Thanks.
Jan 2006
Very sexy. Reminds me of the first girl I was ever in bed with. She was my age physically (about 12-13) but sexually-mentally way ahead of me. She knew what she wanted but sadly, I didn't have a clue. I still dreame about her over 50 years later. If only
GBF: Some of us NEVER get a clue. Think yourself lucky!
Jan 2006
hmmm.... I think I need to go "molest" someone now! This story was great, I can't wait for part 2. Thanks!!
GBF: Someone? :-)
Jan 2006
The best 'Gentle but firm' I've read. Looking fwd to Day 2.
I've nearly read them all on this site and this one is the winner! Ta.
GBF: Oh, oh. It's all downhill from here. :-)
Jan 2006
This story is off to a very good start, AS USUAL.
:-)
My only problem (severe) is that I can't figure out WHY CA is babysitting him when she is just a few months older than he is, and they are both old enough to masturbate!
GBF: He's easily led, and their mothers both thought it would be a good idea. No one really thinks it's babysitting.
Oh, and how old do you think you need to be to masturbate?
Jan 2006
I think that this story best illustrates your masterful imagination. In this first part you have truly gotten me to remember what it like to take that first step and the nervous feelings that incur when you lose track of time and can be caught. This sto
GBF: I don't know what to say now. Thank you.
Jan 2006
Another excellent story...good content, very believable, didn't go too far...left room for as many more chapters as you care to write. Good job, Gentle.
GBF: Thanks
Jan 2006
I like the story very much. It is a great beginning. Not too heavy (except the breathing). Two kids finding out what sex is for starters. Their dialogue (one of you specialties) is outstanding and really tells the story and what they are feeling and th
GBF: Damn pressure... :-) Thanks
Jan 2006
hella-good start.
I love the mixture of innocence and wanna-do-it!
More please!
GBF: Start? :-)
Jan 2006
Great beginning to the story. Loved the characters.
GBF: You mean I have to write more?
Jan 2006
god this makes me so horny.
GBF: That's the idea.
Jan 2006
Good start. I like it.
GBF: Thanks. So do I.
Jan 2006
Definitely a good story. I like the repartee between the characters.
GBF: So do they!
Jan 2006
Lots of play, pop the cherry, and knock her up...but not right away.
That's what would happen in real life, once a couple of kids got going this far.
Relationship? Who knows. Could go either way.
And, PLEASE don't get preachy about kid's rights a
GBF: Knock up? I don't think so.
Preachy? That's even less likely.
Jan 2006
It's light, it's fun, you've got a gift for dialogue. I think I'm going to enjoy this.
(I'm ready for part two )
GBF: I have to write it first. :-)
Jan 2006
Really enjoying this so far. Nice and
light-hearted.
GBF: Great. I'll keep going then...
Jan 2006
This is as pleasant as the note I received predicting its arrival. So far, there is nothing the GBF has written that I didn't like. Please keep it coming and as always Thanks.
GBF: Wow, thanks. The cheque's in the mail. :-)
Jan 2006
really Funny and sexy.
GBF: That's a relief.
Jan 2006
Oh.. I *like* it. Completely different approach from almost everything else I've ever read.
Lightweight, but up there with Friar Dave and Michael K, nonetheless.
Keep it coming. :-)
Do I detect a British note in the dialogue?
I'm withholding
GBF: Not British, Kiwi. And thanks.
Jan 2006
I hope there are another 499 chapters to this one.
GBF: You're almost certain to be disappointed...
Jan 2006
Very Naughty........I like it!
GBF: Why am I not surprised? :-)
Jan 2006
Nice story about the beginning of the loss of innocence. Sounded like a lot of fun for them.
Thank you.
GBF: Hell, you'd hope so, right? :-)
Jan 2006
mmmn.... sweet. With real elements of that sneaking around hurry feeling. Yum. Well done. :)
GBF: Well then, I'll keep going. :-)
Jan 2006
Hi Gentle,
Just download the first chapter will get back to soon as I can but tea frst.
GBF: Hi. No problem. Umm... So far there *is* only one chapter. :-)
Jan 2006
Well, obviously, you ***** for a while and then they *****.
GBF: Ah! :-)
Jan 2006
GREAT!!
Keep them comming:-)
GBF: I'll give it my best shot!
Jan 2006
I can't wait for chapter two...
...this was hot and so good, it had to be from personal experiece.
GBF: Nah, bullshit. Have you read my other stories? :-)
Jan 2006
Beautiful story. I love young sex and this was exciting.
I look forward to your next chapter of this very exciting story. Hope it won't be long in coming.
GBF: Young? Surely not! :-)
Jan 2006
Well now....another great story. I just love stories of 'firsts', and youngsters getting it on. It's also a little refreshing to not read about a couple of kids getting laid within 3 chapters. Handjobs and petting are of course the natural progression of
GBF: Thanks a lot. They WILL get there. :-)
Jan 2006
How about more on how she looks, size, etc, him too.
GBF: No, no, no. I want you to think about that yourself. She looks that way you want her to look, with the proviso that she be a mischievous redhead. :-)
Jan 2006
Well presented. Just one glitch that I noticed:
GBF: Damn, I hate it when that happens. :-)
Jan 2006
I Love this story it's so cute.
GBF: Whew.
Jan 2006
I like this! It's not so much "loss of innocence" as it is "gain of sexuality."
Hmmm, do you think that "loss of innocence" implies technical loss of virginity?
GBF: Nope. :-)