This short story is an entry in the 2002 Soc.Sexuality.Spanking Summer Short Story Contest and is copyright by the author and commercial use is prohibited without permission. Personal/private copies are permitted only if complete including the copyright notice. The author would appreciate your comments
Category: Parody/Poetry I had a lot of fun with my first entry
Sequel
, I expanded it to tell a much fuller story of 57 words while retaining the haiku form (five fold). Alas, it is 14 % oversize for the mini-saga category.
Sequel -- The Full Story
By
Y Lee Coyote <YLeeCoyote@juno.com>
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Prank revealed to all
Patted he, his lap
My hot red butt howled
Hugs of great comfort
New tricks tomorrow
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The End
© Copyright June 6, 2002
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Reviews
Abrat4you <abrat4you(at)aol(dot)com>
The writing style is unusual and interesting. At times, I felt the style over took the message of the piece. This is a very hard style of poetry, but I think this writer did a good job with the attempt.
Haron <haron(at)newsguy(dot)com>
These haiku tell a simple story, and yet they are so daintily written that they make one think of eternity. I could almost feel the heat of that spanking. Nicely done.
Mary Catherine <marycatherine(at)saintfrancis-sfg(dot)net>
A good entry in a difficult to write category. Nice pace with crisp imagery throughout.
Kate <ecattiva(at)aol(dot)com>
There is much memorable imagery in this piece - it will be impossible not to picture a spanker honking, an ass howling,or a clock bleating when reading other spanking stories. It is a haiku with a lot of (very brattish) personality after the tears and beginning anew come more tricks, etc.