This short story is an entry in the 2002 Soc.Sexuality.Spanking Summer Short Story Contest and is copyright by the author and commercial use is prohibited without permission. Personal/private copies are permitted only if complete including the copyright notice. The author would appreciate your comments
Category: Parody/Poetry That this is a _short_ story is pushing the point -- it is a micro story being only 15 words in the 17 syllable, 3 line form of a haiku. (My first BTW.) Unfortunately, because of its brevity both the plot and characterizations are somewhat weak but it does provide the necessary stuff for a story.
Sequel
By
Y Lee Coyote <YLeeCoyote@juno.com>
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Patted he, his lap
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The End
© Copyright May 27, 2002
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Reviews
Frank <sswitcher(at)yahoo(dot)com>
A nice start to this year's contest, this elegant poem succinctly expresses the bare essentials of an M/brat spanking. Although the brat's gender is not explicitly specified, I somehow get a clear image of a cute young male brat from this piece.
Dyke Grrl <dyke.grrl(at)verizon(dot)net>
The most brief of mini-sagas. Y. Lee has already cited the downsides of this format--lack of characterization, and so forth. However, for such a short piece, this haiku manages to tell a complete story. It does somewhat lack the peaceful, nature-oriented theme I'm accustomed to seeing in haiku, but then, it wouldn't have fit here in that style. I do wonder whether this could have been written without the convoluted syntax, as haiku doesn't require the use of a particular meter, and it's a little hard to sort out the meaning of each line (not that hard, just a little).
Margaret <wessyLA(at)aol(dot)com>
have always liked the succinct nature of the Haiku form and this one follows the formula very well. To quibble just a tiny bit, I'm not too sure about the last line. It seems awkward to me, but the rest is brilliant. Thank you for submitting this.
Steve <steve(at)circuslights(dot)com>
I've had bad memories of haikus at school. This one is quite cleverly constructed, but it doesn't quite achieve it's goal.