This short story is an entry in the 2002 Soc.Sexuality.Spanking Summer Short Story Contest and is copyright by the author and commercial use is prohibited without permission. Personal/private copies are permitted only if complete including the copyright notice. The author would appreciate your comments
Category: Mini-saga
Commencement
By
Courtney <Courtenesca@aol.com>
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Kneeling; avowed, bowed, weeping.
Footfall. Confident. Knowing the way.
...Head down. Bottom flaring white. Red. Scarlet.
Spanks rain, she holds well.
Chastened: a perfect punishment.
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The End
© Copyright Summer, 2002
Reviews
Haron <haron(at)newsguy(dot)com>
This nice, descriptive glimpse into other people scene will make many of us, tops and bottoms alike, sigh "Wish it was me".
Mary Catherine <marycatherine(at)saintfrancis-sfg(dot)net>
A lot of quivering emotion in just a few words. Very nicely done!
Pablo Stubbs <Pablo.Stubbs(at)newsguy(dot)com>
This tends much more towards poetry than narrative. The tiny fragments create imagery drop by drop, but the whole is a little frustratingly staccato. The elliptical feel is nice, but maybe exaggerated, so that we know too little about what's happening to really care about it, too little about the people to care about them.
Steve <steve(at)circuslights(dot)com>
Very well structured. Captures all the things I like, in very few words.