SSC 2010: More than a Roommate, by Kingspan

Gina stared at the blinking cursor on her blank document.

"Honey?" called her husband. "You said you were coming to bed half an hour ago. Did you forget?"

"No," Gina whined. "I just can't think of anything to write about for the SSC."

"Gina," he said, entering the room, "before we got married, you told me you were looking for more than a roommate. You wanted a partnership where we would hold each other accountable."

"I know. It's just that I'm struggling with this dialogue. Do you know how hard it is to write a firm scolding that's loving at the same time?"

"It sounds like you're changing the subject, my dear. You are the one who said you wanted more sleep, but when I try to help you with that I hear complaints and whining. You are the one who made a promise to come to bed, and you are the one who is breaking it. I don't take broken promises lightly, especially when they are promises you made for your own good."

Gina sighed. "I'm sorry. Just another thirty minutes, then. Maybe I'll google 'assertive men' to get some ideas."

"No, Gina. You can write your story in the morning. Now it's time to go to bed with your husband."

"Honey, I won't be able to sleep now," and her foot stamped impatiently. "Let me just come up with some good spanking threats, and then I'll go to bed."

"Young lady," he put his hand on her shoulder. "If that computer is not off by the time I count to three, I'm going to tan your behind and put you to bed on your tummy."

"Oh, thanks! That's good!" Hunting and pecking, she mumbled "'If... that... computer...' Ouch! What are you doing?"

Taking her ear between his thumb and forefinger, he brought her firmly from the chair and placed himself in it.

"Sweetie, if you don't let me write that down, I'm going to forget it," she complained as her shorts and panties were dropped to her knees. "Honey? Ow!" Hard, rhythmic spanks from her husband's flat hand came down as he silently fulfilled his promise. "But I wasn't being bad!" Gina cried. "I just wanted to write a story."

"Hush," he told her softly, and began to mix a few rubs in with the still firm slaps. She finally let herself relax, and let her man punish her soft, naked bottom. When at last he carried her to bed, depositing her on her stomach, she hardly noticed.

"Gina," he said, "How was your story going to end?"

Sleepily, she murmured, "I was going to end it with corner time, but I think it might make a better story if the naughty girl was cuddled and told she was forgiven. Then maybe she would do something special for the man who spanked her, before she fell asleep in his arms. Do you think you can help me with that ending?"

"Yes, Gina. I would like that very much."

Zille Defeu email

Okay, this was a super fun story! Love the self-referential aspect that ran through the whole tale, like the author was winking at you the whole time.

I really appreciated the proper use of punctuation and the lack of typos. The author is to be praised for making this a truly enjoyable reading experience.

I'm glad *I* don't get punished for missing bedtimes by half an hour, though, since when I miss a bedtime it's more like *one or two* hours!

Oh, wait ... why am I glad I don't get punished for that...?!

Kris email

That was a good attempt at trying something fresh. I bought it all the way up to when Gina stomped her foot, which is too much like conscious bratting and contradicted the idea she would be so focused on her story that she missed the point. But, if she set the whole thing up intentionally, she would probably be laughing, looking forward to being caught, and might have made some teasing comment or a sly joke when he finally holds her accountable. As it is, her dialogue sticks pretty much to the script that she really is overly focused on her story and is semi-seriously complaining when he takes her by the ear--and effect that I think weakens the attempt to present them as a mature, loving couple. Overall, still a pleasant diversion.