Crimson Kid email

Well, this story demonstrates either that "art imitates life" or that "life imitates art," but I'm not quite certain which one it is. Was it because of the two young ladies' rather sensuous photo shoot, reflecting eating a cherry (some symbolism there) as an erotic event, that their flirtation on Facebook developed so deeply? Or did it happen the other way around, their already existing mutual attraction making the photographs (particularly the one of Lea about to not only consume the cherry but also to dominate it--or Dianna) come alive with the smoldering electricity between the two of them?

This strikes me as an unusual relationship, two attractive young women working side-by-side yet barely speaking, but OTOH carrying on a supposedly secret romance via very brief Facebook exchanges--I suppose that a show business career may require such a furtive relationship, at least in public.

I liked the clever use of "spank you" in Lea's last message, apparently expressing both gratitude (a slight variation on "thank you") and her promise to do exactly that to Dianna. When they'd finally gotten together in private--just Lea, Dianna and Lea's riding crop--I was thinking "It's about time!" with all that erotic energy finally to be released. This is definitely a story that projects sensuality, even via Facebook messages.

Zille Defeu email

My only problem with this story is that it ended well before I wanted it to! ;)

Although I am a fan of "Glee," and know the characters in question (or, hopefully, in flagrante delicto even now!) a real strength of the story is how it works ensuring that non-Glee fans have enough information to appreciate the story, people who are Glee cognoscenti aren't bored by too much explanation getting in the way of the flow of a story. I just (barely!) finished a novel by an author who spent the first three chapters back-filling with the plots of the last seven books in the series -- and, by book number eight, she ought to have learned a bit about writing! She ought to read this story to get ideas!

Another strong point is how the characters of both girls felt "right" -- their thoughts and actions were compatible of girls their age. In a category specifically about a new media, this is particularly important!

Kris email

An interesting take on a real life relationship, and certainly a fun idea that appeals to the kinky. I don't feel too much about the impending punishement of a woman with so little impulse control that she can't resist telling her secret lover quite publicly that she's "Sexaayy" despite an agreement to keep a lid on their BFF-ness. Since their jobs are on the line, and she knew she slipped up, I suspect she was feeling quite a bit more than "not suprised" when she oppened the door. Guilt, dread, secret delight at her own daring naughtiness, bored hunger and thoughts of a sandwich--any of those could have given the moment her girlfriend unlocked the door a bit more texture.

Pablo email

It's a real strength here that awareness of the people involved doesn't hurt the story at all, because what makes it work is the interesting idea - which is very modern, and also bang-on for the category - of conversation which is simultaneously private and public, and how those relate to each other. The casual back-and-forth, both aware and oblivious of how public it is, feels very real, and the characters' hunger for the connection comes across. The tension is lost a little at the end, though. It would be nice if we were discovering the characters as they were discovering each other's kinks - perhaps accidentally - but the final scene is maybe a bit too easy. Be careful also about repetition of phrases like "the blonde", and "the brunette". Reducing the characters to hair colours makes them seem thinner than they should be.