1st Human Drama
Because of Eric
She thought he had spank-me eyelashes.
He reminded her of the summer she was eight, when she had played house with a boy who had the same kind of pale, delicate lashes. Eric, that had been his name. So full of sass. And fart jokes. It was almost as if, when they played, he was always teasing her into the role of the mother, the Disciplinarian.
When he did, she gave him what for the way her own mother did, by yanking down Eric's pants and planting the ten hardest swats she could on his naked behind. Sometimes, she even had to do it more than once in a day.
Looking at the man with such similar eyelashes, she had the sudden urge to do the same to him. Only now that she was older, she doubted such a spanking would end the same way those innocent childhood games had.
"What are you smiling about?" the stranger asked.
"You remind me," she said, "of someone I played with when I was little."
"Somehow, I think that mischievous little look you had wasn't about playing house."
She laughed. "That's exactly what we did. Only, he was a naughty little boy, and I was the mother. He got spanked a lot."
A pause. Long enough to make her think she had said too much.
Then, "I could be a naughty little boy."
Oh. How those words gave her an odd little feeling. What was that?
Which was how she ended up with that man, pants down around his ankles, in her living room, his eyes lowered demurely under those lovely eyelashes, her hand stinging from delivering so many smacks to that clenching behind. It was awkward at first, with a sprinkling of nervous chuckles, but it got serious quickly enough, when they realized that this grown up game was hot. For both of them.
"Taking a break?" he asked during a pause.
She squeezed a butt cheek. "Just checking to see if you're ripe."
He laughed at that. She came to love that best, those odd moments of humor.
"You hit hard," he said.
Uncertainly, "Too hard?"
"You'd need a belt for that."
"You really are a naughty boy."
Yes, yes he was.
She had no belts without studs or beads, so that first time, to save her hand, she finally resorted to a slipper.
How secretly kinky she felt when she went shopping the next day. How nicely he blushed on their second date, because he had a shiny new belt, too. Turned out, he liked leather best. By the time he moved in, they had an astonishing variety.
And who would have thought a spanking could make a man so--so pretty?
"I'd like to thank that fellow," he said once, out of the blue.
"Who?"
"That boy you played house with."
"You know, me, too."
Because, really, it was all because of Eric.
Zille Defeu email
I just adored this story! Exceptionally well-written, a great interplay between memory and present time narrative, and lovely imagery.
It made me almost feel as if those were my own memories! I'm lookin' around for someone with pale eyelashes to spank!
The only weak point was the sentence, "What was that?" (after "How those words gave her an odd little feeling.") That was a wee bit contrived, or just going in the wrong direction, because our protagonist knew very well what that was, and she ended up with her guy over her lap in the next paragraph -- no, the next sentence!
But that was just one tiny misstep in an otherwise perfectly delightful story!
Mija email
A sweet story about both child and adulthood. The writing style works well for the story structure and tone. I felt a sense of completeness with the story length right for the tale being told.
The one weakness was that the story tries to be in both the male and female heads at the same time. It would be better to focus on one -- in this case the female was the more interesting role / position. Good job over all.
sarah nada email
"Because of Eric" combines nostalgia and kink in a way I really like. The pace is really nice, building from reminiscence to something more without making a big production of it. The point of view feels real and the touches of humor are nice too. Well done.
Dyke Grrl/Jigsaw Analogy email
This is really a gorgeously written story. There is a little bit of wistfulness that comes across for me, in the way that I remember summer during that first autumn drizzle. The memories are sweet, and somehow the present is made sweeter because of the past. I like the way that this story pairs so nicely with "Because of June." Each of the stories stands well on its own, but they twine around each other as well. I appreciate the way that human interactions, past and present, are at the center of this story.