This short story is an entry in the 2003 Soc.Sexuality.Spanking Summer Short Story Contest and is copyright by the author and commercial use is prohibited without permission. Personal/private copies are permitted only if complete including the copyright notice. The author would appreciate your comments
Category: Lines
Opportunity Knocked
By
Valerie Meilong <meilong@excite.com>
Dorothea was perfectly lovely. Oh yes, no doubt about that. Breasts to die for, soft, white, perfectly shaped, the shape that made women wish they could be as shapely even with a high quality bra. Long legs, trim ankles, flawless calves smooth thighs, the sort that could launch a thousand studs. The problem was that she knew it, and she liked it.
She was anybody's game. Made no pretence about it either. Flat on her back on the first date, was her credo. Pity the poor chap who married her. Pity me, for I was that unfortunate bastard.
Why me? Because I was the richest, that's why. Simple as that. I wasn't the most handsome, or the best in bed. I was just plain stinking rich. Not the richest man in the world, mind you, but rich enough. Scooped the lottery, didn't I?
Oh yes, I was stupid all right. Sucked in by that glorious pussy of hers, the one she threw round so freely, the one with the genuine blonde curls. We'd honeymooned in Thailand. Glorious weather, glorious sand, and glorious sex; at least for a few overwhelming nights.
Even on the honeymoon she bedded another fella. Coloured he was, too. Well built. Unusual for a Thai.
I'd bought a flat overlooking Hyde Park. Over a million it cost, plus another quarter million for renovations. One day I came home early from a meeting with my accountant, and she was in bed with the senior partner! Our own bed! I chucked him out pdq. And violently! That little bit of nookie lost his firm a small fortune in fees.
I was furious. I'd turned a blind eye far too many times, and this was more than flesh and blood could stand. I grabbed her and flung her face down over the bed. She was naked, of course. I brought down my hand as hard as I could on her lovely bottom. Even as I was beating it I had to admire it. There is no doubt that Dorothea was perfectly lovely.
She writhed and kicked, but I held her tight. To my surprise she made very little sound. I was expecting screams, for I was hitting her hard.
At last my arm tired, and my palm was smarting. I stopped beating. She lay there for a while, panting, and then got up. There was a curious gleam in her eye.
"God! That was lovely," she said. "I've wanted that for years."
I've always been able to spot an opportunity. I did not miss this one. "Listen to me," I said. "No more flirting. No more bedding blokes? Understand?"
"Yes sir," she said contritely.
"If I ever find out you've been sleeping around you'll get another spanking even more severe than that one. Understand?"
"Yes sir," she said, and we made love.
I knew she'd still sleep around, of course, but she tells me and I spank her. Afterwards we make love.
I'm glad I'd spotted and grabbed that opportunity.
The End
© Copyright Valerie Meilong 14 August 2003
Patricia <patricia(at)cedar(dot)net>
This is a lovely little story that left me smiling. Your use of the first line works just fine. Talk about opening the door and walking through when opportunity knocks. And opportunity is allowing both sides satisfaction. Nicely done.
Haron <haron(at)newsguy(dot)com>
This story sounds like an embodiment of what might be described as a loser's dream: an ability to buy a beautiful woman and tame her through no virtue of your own other than money and spanking. Hardly original.
I should say that the protagonist thoroughly deserves what he gets: somebody who marries the girl for the exterior (or, as the author charmingly puts it, her «glorious pussy») can hardly complain that he ends up being used.
Ted <quixotoes(at)aol(dot)com>
I like the story a lot, describing the perfect compromises that couples can make.
However, the author's attempt at Spillane staccato metaphors comes up shorter than a dwarf's
member after intercourse. The spelling and punctuation could have been aided by more
careful copy editing.
Ladiejj <ladiejj(at)msn(dot)com>
This story gives us a nice transformation of a relationship. Told in the first person we
get to delve into this man's feelings...feelings that seem to change over time. I enjoy the
way this story flows, it is definitely a narrative. The spanking is a nice focal point bringing
it all together.
This story also holds some good imagery. The author does a good job.