This short story is an entry in the 2003 Soc.Sexuality.Spanking Summer Short Story Contest and is copyright by the author and commercial use is prohibited without permission.  Personal/private copies are permitted only if complete including the copyright notice.  The author would appreciate your comments

Category:  Parody of "Blue Vevet" by Bernie Wayne and Lee Morris
 

Red Velvet

By

Don A. Landhill <DLandhill@aol.com>

She wore red velvet
Redder than velvet was her face
Soften than satin went the place
When she spoke.

She wore red velvet
Redder than velvet were her thighs
Warm as my hand her tender cries
For her Joke

Still my love I held tightly
Feeling her bottom glow
Like a flame burning brightly
Until she rose, gone was the glow of
Red velvet

But in her rear there'll always be
Buring and hot, a memory
Through the years
again dressed she'll be -- in Red Velvet
And her tears

The End

© Copyright D. A. Landhill, 05 June 2003

Reviews

Jon   <mrheadmstr(at)aol(dot)com>
This author used the old crooners' (Bobby Vinton, who used to sing ballads and love songs) song as the template for his parody.  Rather than slavishly copy the rhyming elements and just change the words to kinky meanings, the author managed to clone the emotional spirit, honor the rhyming structure, exactly copy two lines whilst changing their meaning entirely thanks to the surrounding lines, AND paint a fetching picture.  Quite good work, I think.

Brad   <b_radleym(at)yahoo(dot)com>
This review took so long because I was trying to get hold of a copy of Blue Velvet to make an intelligent comparison.  But alas, it's to no avail.

Nevertheless, the author should be praised because parodies are one of the hardest categories to do.  My only comment is that there was more emphasis on the color red than on the texture of velvet.  The author could have explored the concept of texture more as it is more novel than the color red.

Kent Stoneking   <kentls01(at)msnl(dot)com>
I've always admired those who can write this sort of parody, and this is an excellent take on the golden oldie.  The author did a wonderful job of following the style and flow of the original, while making it very-much on topic.  Although the word "spank" or any of its forms is not used, we don't have any question as to what went on!

The last line seems a little clumsy -- I think there may be an extra syllable or two -- but that's a minor quibble with such an enjoyable piece.

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