This short story is an entry in the 2003 Soc.Sexuality.Spanking Summer Short Story Contest and is copyright by the author and commercial use is prohibited without permission. Personal/private copies are permitted only if complete including the copyright notice. The author would appreciate your comments
Category: Parody with apologies to Sid Tepper and Roy Bennett who wrote "Red Roses for a Blue Lady".
Red Paddle For A Brat Lady -- A Spanking Parody
By
Don A. Landhill <DLandhill@aol.com>
I want a red paddle for a brat lady
rosy cheeks will make her want to please.
She's been acting very silly all the day
I hope this pretty paddle will chase her mood away.
I want a red paddle for a brat lady
when not a brat, the sweetest gal in town.
If this paddle does the trick, I'll hurry back to pick
the finest leather collar to be found!
I want a red paddle for a brat lady
her tricks and schemes just drive me up the wall.
I'll redden up her seat, and that will make her sweet
I know she'll smile, when once she's had her bawl.
I want a red paddle for a brat lady
when not a brat, the sweetest gal in town.
If this paddle does the trick, I'll hurry back to pick
the finest leather collar to be found!
The End
© Copyright D. A. Landhill, 03 June 2003
Reviews
Rosa
What a delightful entry! I had to look up the song you referenced, as I hadn't heard it before. It has brat and comeuppance written all over!
You've captured both the immediate need of the Top to give a Brat what she needs -- and then added the hope (promise?) of future (long-term) commitment. I'd like to offer one bit of constructive criticism. As I read/sang the original and compared it to yours, there did seem to be a bit of deviation in the meter. You've got the same number of syllables and overall rhyme scheme. The deviation seems to be in the stress patterns of the individual words within the lines (third and fourth lines in both verses). If I adjust the length of the notes as I sing, the words can be made to fit -- so it is very, very close. I offer this as you are quite talented and the content of the parody is absolutely, positively enjoyable! Bravo!
Very nicely done!!
Pablo <pablo(dot)stubbs(at)newsguy(dot)com>
Pedantry ahoy, but I tend not to think of pieces like this as parodies, since the imitation isn't meant to poke fun at the original or satirise it somehow, but just yanks the original into a new context.
The strengths and weaknesses of this one are exactly the strengths and weaknesses of the original: the lounge-singer cheesiness is captured rather nicely, though it's every bit as insubstantial. Definitely one for a volume-at-eleven karaoke croon, rather than to read from the page.
<justacatfish(at)aol(dot)com>
An amusing and very original little jingle. Liked it. Shows imagination.