This short story is an entry in the 2003 Soc.Sexuality.Spanking Summer Short Story Contest and is copyright by the author and commercial use is prohibited without permission. Personal/private copies are permitted only if complete including the copyright notice. The author would appreciate your comments
Category: Adult
A nice straight forward spanking story. Well, not that straight forward for that's no fun at all...so you get a choice of two endings.
Birthday Surprise
By
Y Lee Coyote <YLeeCoyote@juno.com>
It had been an absolutely wicked party. Jake hadn't expected it at all; surprise parties when one is thirty-seven are not exactly expected since it not a special number. Nevertheless, it had happened and it had been fun. The evening had started when a couple of friends had taken him out to dinner and it was sprung on him when they returned home. Now, at two am in the dark of night he should have been in bed sleeping peacefully but he had gotten high and when everyone split was left in the mess. He had long since lost track of how many birthday spankings he had gotten. Jake lay on the couch sleeping. By the glow of his butt one could see the party debris disaster area. Some hours before, the revelers had pantsed him.
It was into this scene that Panther slipped silently through the open terrace door. Panther was interested in acquiring things that could fetch cash on the open market. A few minutes of inspection lead him to the conclusion that there was little of value -- the usual stuff (TV, stereo, VCR and camera) were all old and cheap models -- not worth the trouble or risk. Even the birthday presents were of little value. Disgusted with this non-paying gig, Panther was about to leave as stealthily as he came. As he turned the beam from his flashlight illuminated Jake's crimson buns and Panther felt a twitch in his groin. Then an idea popped into his head. This would be different -- he would give rather than receive for a change.
He picked up the new paddle from coffee table and stepped over to Jake. Panther raised the paddle and brought it crashing down on the target with a loud TWHACK!
Jake awoke immediately but could only see a figure dressed in black from crown to sole. He started to get up but the paddle crashed down again. TWHACK!! Jake yelped and the paddle continued to crash onto his already hot ass. Automatically, Jake kept count 10 ... 20 ... 30 ... 37. Then there was a pause. "And one to grow on." TWHACK!!!
* * * * * * * * * Ending #1 * * * * * * * * *
The extra one really hurt and he screamed in pain.
"You should always lock your doors." lectured Panther before dashing out through the open door.
Jake lay still for some time. First he thought he was just dreaming but his butt hurt far too much for that. Gradually, he remembered the party but who was that figure in black?
* * * * * * * * * Ending #2 * * * * * * * * *
The extra one affected him deeply and he screamed "FUCK ME SIR!" just as Panther was about to lecture him about locking his doors.
The twitch in Panther's groin was now tenting his tights. He decided quickly and yanked down his tights allowing his cock to spring up and forward. From the opened gift box he grabbed a condom, rolled it on and covered it with lube. Jake's hot butt was quivering as Panther thrust his arrow deep into the welcoming hole. As Panther fucked, Jake groaned with delighted approval.
After coming, Panther withdrew and took the used scumbag with him. «Mustn't leave any DNA evidence. At least there was some compensation.» Panther thought as he made his escape.
Jake lay still for some time relishing the mix of pain and pleasure in his bottom. Gradually, he remembered the party but who was that figure in black?
The End
© Copyright A.I.L., June 02, 2003
Reviews
sassy <sassy_jolene(at)hotmail(dot)com>
Birthday Surprise was a very creative story in my opinion. The idea that a burglar might sneak in during a party had never crossed my wicked mind. The setup to the story was good, and while quick it was thorough. The first ending had the element of unfulfilled pleasures, and everyone loves a good lecture. The second ending had more filling of pleasures, and I loved the DNA angle. About the only thing I would recommend is that a thought from Panther coming for another time in the end. Something like he keeps the address for a future visit...or maybe address and date..for next year's birthday spanking.
Huh Chuh <huhchuh(at)yahoo(dot)com>
Interesting story. Basic plot is simple, yet the idea of having an unknown entity enter uninvited is titillating. The mysterious thief of this story who chooses to give rather than to receive adds a unique twist to spanking.
Fun story to read and nice scenario to think about.
Thank you for sharing.
Jessie
I like the language of this piece, in that it quickly introduces the character of Jake, his likely background, and state of mind. However, I found the constantly shifting point of view to be unclear; more than once, the pov shifted within the same sentence.
I don't like the "pick your ending" device. It's substandard story telling. As well, the grammatical errors were far too numerous. The author needs to take ownership of his story.