This short story is an entry in the 2002 Soc.Sexuality.Spanking Summer Short Story Contest and is copyright by the author and commercial use is prohibited without permission. Personal/private copies are permitted only if complete including the copyright notice. The author would appreciate your comments
Category: Adult I did this way back in mid-May before the micro-saga category was announced. Now with that perspective it is huge at 79 words. I managed to totally avoid the use of pronouns which would have assigned genders to my two protagonists so you will have assign genders yourself if you feel they are necessary.
Past Due Payment Made
By
Y Lee Coyote <YLeeCoyote@juno.com>
NOTICE in spanked-butt red stamped on the envelope was practically glowing when Pat returned and saw the mail on the table. The paddle next to it foretold the future.
Sam picked up the paddle and pointed. Discussion time was long past.
Pat went to the couch, stripped and bent over. Sam raised the paddle and brought it crashing down on target. Pat howled repeatedly.
When Pat's butt was the color of the notice, Sam stopped.
The End
© Copyright June 16, 2002
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Reviews
Anne <Ladyanne60(at)aol(dot)com>
This is an expressive witty satire comparing bottoms to borrowed books, which are both long past due. This may be a very good reason to return books on time to the library. I especially liked the color contrasts in this story. The use of word play was very humorous as well as remarkable.
Pam <pamiMac(at)aol(dot)com>
A gender neutral exercise so that no one knows whether they are men, women, or one of each. With no pronouns however, the story reads a bit like a reading exercise. I like that is was a good try.
Pablo Stubbs <Pablo.Stubbs(at)newsguy(dot)com>
The use of gender-neutral names and the avoidance of pronouns has the intended effect of maintaining ambiguity here, but it also does something just as pleasing, which is to give the story a simplicity of style that makes it read like a basic children's tale - even one used for reading practice. And that seems nicely subversive. The use of the colour emphasises this aspect of the story too. Good thing the letter wasn't printed in black and blue ink!
Owen Williamson <ashthorn(at)maildulf(dot)com>
This story says a lot in a few words. That's what a story should do, of course. It also leaves room for the reader to put him or herself into it, which is also a plus. A good piece of work.