Fangs jutted from her mouth, over her bottom lips, glaring white over the bright red, dripping shamelessly with saliva, hot, wet, desperate. And her thighs too, dripped, with anticipation.

Swooping silently from the cold wet night, she alighted softly beside him on the path, inhuman, silent.

Her body quivered with anticipation. More than the prospect of the meal, the inevitability of intimacy had driven her hunt.

Fangs jutted from her mouth, over her bottom lips, glaring white over the bright red, dripping shamelessly with saliva, hot, wet, desperate. And her thighs too, dripped, with anticipation.

Grabbing his unsuspecting shoulders, she pulled him firmly to her breasts, crushing his back against her, forcing his head to one side, and bending her head forward to his neck. Oblivious to his screams and struggles, she held her fangs in position, her undead senses waiting for the perfect moment. Lunging, she impaled him, razor fangs dug deep into his throat, and found sustenance, and a level of arousal beyond that of which humankind is capable.

Draining his life from him, she drew it into herself, and as his blood flow waned, and spread through her undead body, she felt the beginnings of her climax. Her thigh muscles started to shudder with the strain, and she dropped the corpse regretfully, and fell to the ground, her cunt suffused with blood; her head confused with erotic signals.

As the red elixir slammed the ends of her nerves, her whole body reacted at once, her muscles spasmed simultaneously, her superfluous heart managed a solitary beat, and her head exploded in orgasm, as she moaned around the fangs, bloody dripping from her mouth, lightning bolts crashing across her synapses, her momentary helplessness adding to the pulse of pleasure.

As the shock started to recede, and her keen senses untangled the garbled signals from around her, she staggered to her feet, stumbled a few steps, and launched her renewed glowing body into the sky. Still groaning with pleasure, and feeling the pulsing thigh muscles, she faded in the night, inhuman again, and alone.

Dec 2012
The story was good but to short.

Dec 2012
Very interesting except 4 the lack of detail

Dec 2012
I was surprised the *****. And I liked the mingling of *****.

Jul 2010
Two things I really liked. You didn't over do it. You kept it short.

Jun 2010
Great, beautiful, perfect, short, and not really what I was expecting. I loved this story.

Jun 2008
Would she be Toreador, Gangrel, Lasombra, Assamite, or Malkavian? And would she be interested in a partner who'd accept the 'inevitable' and face her and screw while she drained him?

Dec 2005
I liked it but it left me wanting more. Love the vampire theme. It was erotic and a bit scary.
      GBF: Well, it says in the rule book to leave them wanting more!

Aug 2005
I really liked silent, I think it was still playing in my head, when Darkness showed up *Smiles*
      GBF: Birds of a feather, and all that...

Aug 2005
Interesting, arousing in a dark manner. Overall I like it, but not as much as some of your other things.
      GBF: Hey, like is like! :-) Sorry to remove part of your comment, but I didn't want to give it away.

Jul 2005
It was almost erotic, but then it wasn't. Well written
      GBF: Yeah, well this one polarises people. Even me!

Jul 2005
I had to read this one to see why it was rated so low. While it's not my cup of tea it is still well written and very descriptive and original.
      GBF: Not low really. But I understand. Thanks for decribing it so generously.

Jul 2005
Neat. The theme is worth spending more time on someday -- not necessarily for erotic value, but for the impact of the imagery.
      GBF: Well, as you can see from some of the other feedback, your opinion is not shared by all. Thanks just the same.

Jun 2005
OK, so ***** aren't my thing, but the writing was! Very descriptive- felt like I was there (shudder)! I have to hand it to the girl- she knows what she wants and isn't afraid to get it. Great wordage, a little too heavy on the commas, though.
      GBF: You might want to read something else of mine then. This is an aberration. :-)

May 2005
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      GBF: You know, this is the only story that gets all these 'ones' without any explanation, but then the average score is fairly high... Oh well.

May 2005
What in the world was this? Not your style and creativity at all! Very shocking to say the least.
      GBF: Well, it's good to be a little unpredictable, now and then. Worry not. If you don't like, move on!

Apr 2005
As usual you have opened a new door for me to explore I will go back and read stories like this as always THANKS
      GBF: You know, you find doors everywhere!

Apr 2005
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      GBF: I really don't like getting these ones, understandably, but I wish people would give me a reason...

Apr 2005
Ok its a lil crazy, cuz soon as you start reading its just pops in your faces. Theres no indecation of what is about to start are nothing like thats its just right there soon as you start reading, and that right there kind of caught me off guard.
      GBF: This one is SUPPOSED to catch you off guard. Glad it worked.

Feb 2005
Shortest thing I've ever READ that's erotic. A bit much, but I'm very curious about this character. Is it possible to write a longer story for her, keep her interesting, and yet NOT have a dominant male vampire? (Maybe the story of how she was turned..
      GBF: Size isn't everything. Thanks a lot. I'm not sure I can return to this, but thanks for the ideas.

Jan 2005
Sorry but I'm not into vampire stuff. It does not have anything to do with sex (in my mind).
      GBF: I feel the same way about oysters. Ooh, did I say that out loud? It's not a worry. Thanks for telling me.

Dec 2004
its the most amazing thing i have read It turned me on.
      GBF: Actually, that was the idea!

Dec 2004
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      GBF: A one? You give me blank anonymous feedback, and a one? What did I do? Oh well, never mind...

Nov 2004
you write so well..... but i don't do vampires..... :( so i'd give this a...
      GBF: Oh, read something you like! :-)

Oct 2004
Great Story. Vampires are such a turn on.mmm...

Sep 2004
Spectacular! I hope you have a desire to write a few more in the future.
      GBF: You already commented on this one. You must be keen...

Jul 2004
Neat...concise...erotic...very well written. Almost had me want to believe in vampires,but I don't so I only gave it a 9, otherwise a 10 for sure. You do have a special descriptive style. Keep it up.

Jul 2004
Rubbish, and your English grammar and punctuation are appalling.

Jul 2004
...anyway, I'm a big fan of the werewolf/vampire bit, and I'm well aware that I should not expect any more of these :) just wanted to say it was written very well....
      GBF: Not expect... But the chance always exists... :-)

Sep 2003
I really like your story "Silent", and have put it in my list of favourite story links

Jul 2003
YOUR PRESENTATION AND PASION WAS EXCELLENT. IS THERE SOMETHING MORE TO FOLLOW. A BEGINNIG AND (IS THERE EVER) AN END?

Jul 2003
KWEL Very nice indeed. I liked the reverse rape of the vampire. The story a bit short and would love for you to allow us to get know her ; however, the story is a perfect opening sequence to a vampire story.

Jul 2003
Whether you ever do another story like this is irrelavent, this one works for me. I am a vampire fan so my opinion is colored by my fetish. Keep up the good work.

OK. Vividly, powerfully written, as good as I have seen. HOWEVER ... I may be in a minority here, but I don't like the combination of sex and bloodshed/pain/death. To me the two are at opposite ends of a spectrum, and can never be connected. Sorry, but
      GBF: Oops, no points there. Never mind, I value your opinion greatly.