This short story is an entry in the 2003 Soc.Sexuality.Spanking Summer Short Story Contest and is copyright by the author and commercial use is prohibited without permission. Personal/private copies are permitted only if complete including the copyright notice. The author would appreciate your comments
Category: Adult
He Said She Said: Very Funny
By
Pam <pamimac@aol.companties>
Remove my panties before responding
"What's the difference between a martinet and a flogger?"
"Beats the hell out of me."
"Very funny. Good one."
"What is?"
"Your joke."
"What joke? Ohhhh HAHAHA. Yes. Pretty good. Goofy but good."
"Yes. Pretty funny girl you are."
"That's me."
"So, what's the difference."
"I have no idea. I'm pretty sure I know what a flogger is. Isn't a martinet a person?"
"A person?"
"Yah, you know...like a military man who is mean."
"I thought it was like a flogger. Could have sworn I saw martinets being sold online."
"Well, maybe they are selling mean military men to flog people."
"Very funny."
"As I said, that's me. Laugh til it hurts."
"I'll show you hurt. Where's my flogger?"
"You sure it is a flogger? Could be a martinet. Did a little mean man come with it?"
"Oh shut up. I'm sure I didn't order a martinet."
"But they could have SENT you one and you wouldn't know would you?"
"Oh good grief."
"Well? It's true isn't it?"
"I have a flogger. No martinet."
"Can you prove it? Wait...what are you doing?"
"I'm proving something to you."
"Yeah but that's NOT a flogger."
"No?"
"Nooooo!!! Put that belt back on. Owwww!!"
The End
© Copyright Pam, 01 September 2003
Reviews
Sir Hal <janhaltn(at)earthlink(dot)net>
This was not a bad story but it just did nothing for me. There were no interesting word pictures for me to see in my mind. I am not even sure if this is an exchange was between two females or even between two males. I am just left too much to guess with this story. I mean it would have only taken just one or two words to identify the sex of who was speaking. Give them names, that clearly indicate what their sex was. Not those names that are somewhat gender generic. Maybe if I did not know a wonderful lesbian spanking couple this would not concern me. I can see them having this exchange. I feel that it is the author responsibility to establish the sex of the people he is writing for or about. As a reader I don't like guessing. Maybe the writer did not establish the sex on purpose, I don't know. I think the writer had a good idea but needs to learn to express it better. Yes, I think that the writer needs to continue to write. After they have wrote the story, they need to let somebody read it and give them a constructive critique. That is the only real way that you are going to improve. Write and write some more. Learn and learn some more. Thanks for letting me review this story.
Kent Stoneking <kentls01(at)msn(dot)com>
It's very difficult writing a complete story using only dialogue...this one is a real gem. I especially liked the wordplay on the alternative meanings of "martinet". Very nicely done!
Lori <peachesicu(at)aol(dot)com>
Wasn't as funny as I wish it were but I like it. The banter back and forth is fast. Fast dialog is hard to do on paper and the Author did it pretty well.