This short story is an entry in the 2003 Soc.Sexuality.Spanking Summer Short Story Contest and is copyright by the author and commercial use is prohibited without permission. Personal/private copies are permitted only if complete including the copyright notice. The author would appreciate your comments
Category: Line
Archivist's note: This was posted under the additional pen name Velindre <velindre@starmail.com>
The Naughty Word
By
"Thank you, Sir, though I do not know your name," she had said.
"It matters not," smoothly replied the man. "I am here to help."
There was a smile on his handsome face. He was in; actually inside the house! He'd knocked on the front door on the off chance this being his favourite modus operandi. He would pick a house at random, relying on his handsome face and his fake clerical clothes to lull gullible housewives into a false sense of security. Once inside he would use his wits and quick thinking to purloin, or con out of them, what he could. His name was Sam Hawkins, and he was a real smooth operator.
He'd been surprised when a tearful young girl opened the door.
"Is your mother in?" he'd asked.
"No," she'd replied lugubriously. "She's just stepped out. Gone to the shops."
He blinked. The child was nearly nineteen, and pretty too. This was an opportunity.
"You're crying, and this troubles my heart . Share your sorrow with me. Come to my bosom, child. Unburden."
That was when she'd let him in. His name did not matter, she realised. After all he was a holy man.
He held her in his arms, but she continued sobbing.
"Speak, child! Unburden your troubles!"
At last, in a sad voice she said, "I've been spanked. And sent to my room. I should be there now."
"Oh, dear me. Spanked, eh?"
"Yes. With my knickers down too!"
"Tell me, child. What were you spanked for? Were you naughty?"
"I said a very naughty word."
He laughed. "Is that all? What was this naughty word?"
She lowered her eyes and hesitantly whispered, "shit!"
"Ooh!" he said with a smile. "Very naughty. What made you say that?"
"Well, I was with my boyfriend at the time. He was in my bedroom with me."
"I see," he said. "But how did you come to use that naughty word?"
"Well," said the girl. "He kissed me. Then he took off my jacket."
Sam thought quickly. "Like this?" he said, taking off the girl's jacket.
"Yes," said the girl. "And then he undid my blouse."
"Like this?," said Sam, unfastening her buttons.
"Yes," said the girl. "And then he fondled my breasts."
"Like this?" he said, slipping his hand under her bra.
"Yes. Just like that," said the girl. "Then he took off my bra, pulled down my skirt, and took off my knickers."
"Like this?" said Sam removing the rest of her clothes. "And what did he do then?"
"He put his thing inside me."
"Like this?" said Sam, quickly unzipping his fly, and entering her as she opened her legs.
"Yes," said the girl. "Just like that. That was when I said 'shit'"
"But why?" said Sam.
"Well, he told me that he'd got syphilis. That was when my mother heard me. She stormed in. Threw my boyfriend out, and spanked me."
The implications of what she'd said suddenly dawned on Sam.
"Oh, shit!" he said.
The End
© Copyright Ebro, 28 August 2003
Reviews
Huh Chuh <huhchuh(at)yahoo(dot)com>
Great job! I'm so glad that this Hawkins was punished for taking advantage of people. Maybe she, the nineteen year old, was taking advantage of this stranger who she knew to not be a priest.
I loved the revolution around the words «Oh shit». Very nice job.
Don A. Landhill <dlandhill(at)aol(dot)com>
An interesting story, and a clever twist. At fist we are not sure where this is headed, and the girl seems a bit too passive, but perhaps she sees where things are headed and wants them to go there. Very nice.
However, the first line seems a bit tacked on. It is not clear why she would say «thank you» until you figure out exactly where in the middle of the dialog this line actually goes.
I think this entry might have been better not using the line, and being put in the Child category, instead.
Redhawk <redhawk(at)screaminet(dot)com>
A very comical and enjoyable story. I enjoyed reading this story. It was well written and had no clear errors in it.