This short story is an entry in the 2003 Soc.Sexuality.Spanking Summer Short Story Contest and is copyright by the author and commercial use is prohibited without permission. Personal/private copies are permitted only if complete including the copyright notice. The author would appreciate your comments
Category: Lines
Destiny Control
By
Y Lee Coyote <YLeeCoyote@juno.com>
Nicholas was not to be one of the party; he was in disgrace. The Saturday morning post had put the evidence in his hand – his midterm report card was, to say the least, most unsatisfactory. The rest of his gang was going to Roger's pool to celebrate his birthday. He had heard his doom pronounced by his disappointed father in front of his year younger brother and their cousin. As far back that he could remember Roger's pool birthday parties were absolutely FANTASTIC. But he would be confined to his cell with his school books. Even if Gabriel blew his horn he would still be grounded.
He knew that he had no one else to blame but himself. Knowing all about video games and TV shows does not help to pass math and history exams. "Yes, father, no excuses and I understand why." he had honestly said. Nick remained deep in thought for a long time. Then he made up his mind. He went to the TV room where the others were watching the game.
"Father, did grandpa ever ground Uncle Joe or you when you were my age?" Of course, he knew the answer.
Both men twitched in their seats. "No, son. He would take us out the woodshed and strap us hard."
"And we remembered to behave properly for a long time." added his uncle.
"Father, would you strap me like grandfather did to you rather than grounding me." he paused, "Please." The implied contract was clear.
The others just looked at each other in surprise.
After a long pause, his uncle spoke: "The lad has made a real decision – he must be growing up."
"Very well, Nicholas. Drop your pants and bend over. This is going to hurt but don't move until it is over."
"Yes, sir." he answered but with a little less conviction that he had when making the request.
"You'll get ten, son." Dad removed his thick leather belt and folded it in two. He raised it and brought it down with a loud
WHAP!
Nick bit his lip to keep from screaming. His brother and cousin watched the red stripe form for the very first time. Nine more times the belt kissed his bottom. The stripes all merged leaving his butt bright red.
"You took that very well, Nick. Now get dressed. And all of you get your towels and the presents. It almost party time."
An hour later the party was in full swing with a score of boys having a great time dressed, most appropriately, in their birthday suits romping in the pool. Even though each of them had given the birthday boy his spanks Nicholas's tail was still the reddest. How he achieved that pinnacle was a major topic of discussion both that afternoon and in school afterwards.
It was only after he graduated from high school that Nick decided that pro's of his strapping being public knowledge outweighed the con's.
The End
© Copyright A.I.L., 20 August 2003
Reviews
Jon <mrheadmstr(at)yahoo(dot)com>
An interesting tale of the coming of age of a young man is presented here, focused through
the lens of a good strapping. This story is well executed, no obvious errors, with good
character development and flow to the plot.
One small critique: the relationship of the party to Nicholas should have been made a tad more clear. I wasn't sure for a while if Roger was the birthday boy, or if Nick was the party boy himself. «The rest of his gang was going to Roger's pool to celebrate his birthday.» His could refer to either boy the way it was used here, and adds some unnecessary confusion.
All-in-all though, a well written tale of a red tail.
Sassy Jo <sassy_jolene(at)hotmail(dot)com>
Destiny Control was overall a pretty fair story. The writing was concise and
well done. The originality wasn't as good as the writing. But the author has
obviously put some thought into it and I see it as good work.
Brad <b_radleym(at)yahoo(dot)com(dot)au>
It's a coming-of-age story with the kind of twist I like best. Well-written and logical
flow of storyline.