This short story is an entry in the 2003 Soc.Sexuality.Spanking Summer Short Story Contest and is copyright by the author and commercial use is prohibited without permission. Personal/private copies are permitted only if complete including the copyright notice. The author would appreciate your comments
Category: Mini-Saga
Beta, Beta, Beta.
By
Valerie Meilong <meilong@excite.com>
"Assume the position!"
She grasped her ankles.
Her skirt was lifted, her panties pulled down.
The paddle was raised.
Whap. "Ow!"
Whap. "Ow!"
Whap. "Ow!"
Whap. "Ow!"
Whap. "Ow!"
Whap. "Ow!"
"Thank you Ma'am. May I have six more?"
There was a deep sigh. "Okay. But then it's my turn."
The End
© Copyright Valerie Meilong 17 August 2003
Reviews
Ted <quixotoes(at)aol(dot)com>
I admit I never got the point of a fifty-word mini-saga, and this one is no worse than what I could imagine. I do believe in active voice, and this piece switches from active to passive.
Kessily
I guess I didn't really care for this one. It was nothing new; nothing exciting. The lines of «Whap. "Ow!"» were repetitive and didn't really accomplish anything. There was very little emotion to the piece until the last line. That was the best line of the story and the only one that gave it some depth.
Pam <PamiMac(at)aol(dot)com>
Filled fifty words all right. Cute in its own way. Don't have much to say on it. Again, just seemed to be written for a Bob Hope/Benny Hill monologue.