This short story is an entry in the 2003 Soc.Sexuality.Spanking Summer Short Story Contest and is copyright by the author and commercial use is prohibited without permission.  Personal/private copies are permitted only if complete including the copyright notice.  The author would appreciate your comments

Category:  Verse
 

Haiku

By

Kingspan <Kingspan1@yahoo.com>

Knowing she was wrong
Confessing her transgressions
Pants come slowly down

Walnut brush above
No thought but for the moment
It comes whistling down

Cheeks quiver, wobble
Then they blush as if in shame
Tears come rolling down

Wrapped in loving arms
All punishment behind her
Seated on soft down

Supine, legs apart
Master's tongue flicks and teases
Waiting to go down

The End

© Copyright Kingspan, 14 August 2003

Reviews

Huh Chuh    <huhchuh(at)yahoo(dot)com>
Thank you for sharing this verse with us.  I was surprised to find Master pleasuring her in this manner after she was spanked.  Thank you.

Rosa
I'm not sure if Haiku strung together like that is still categorized as Haiku, but I enjoyed your verse very much!  Your words made nice visuals that showed me a scene; tender, warm and loving.  Please write more!!

Pablo    <pablo(dot)stubbs(at)newsguy(dot)com>
I like the repetition here.  It both binds the poem together as a single unit, and creates the progression of a simple narrative.  I'm going to whine slightly that this isn't really a haiku, though.  The 5-7-5 form isn't supposed to be a verse structure; it's supposed to be the whole poem.  And for me, the last verse is a change in direction that doesn't entirely belong – but that's quite likely to be a personal preference.  It reads well, though.  There's a dreamy simplicity to it that's very pleasing.

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