This short story is an entry in the 2003 Soc.Sexuality.Spanking Summer Short Story Contest and is copyright by the author and commercial use is prohibited without permission. Personal/private copies are permitted only if complete including the copyright notice. The author would appreciate your comments
Category: Fanfiction
In the Garden
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"What?" Charlie replied, exasperation evident in her tone.
"How many times do I havta tell ya? Keep that water off the pavin' slabs!", Tommy looked up as he continued muttering about the cement never drying.
Charlie was crouching near a black lined hole attempting to fill what would be the water feature. The pressure was terrible, trickling out for a time then practically bursting from the hose as soon as she set it down. She was quite perturbed with it.
When she looked up to face Tommy something in his stern look got the better of her. She stuck her tongue out at him. "Oooh – you're askin' for it." Tommy couldn't hide the deep chuckle in his voice as tension and frustration evaporated into lopsided grins.
The pressure picked just that moment to surge water though the hose. Charlie, grinning from ear to ear, pointed the spray directly at Tommy's head.
"That's it!" Tommy yelled. He leaped from the deck toward Charlie. She wasn't quick enough to get up and evade Tommy entirely. Instead they clumsily crashed into each other, tumbling to the ground. Charlie ended up face down near a Rhododendron – Tommy face up. Both she and Tommy were roaring now, only with laughter this time.
Tommy sat up. Charlie made her way onto her hands and knees. Before she could pick herself up Tommy planted a sonorous slap on her tightly jeaned derriere.
"Ouch – that hurt!" Charlie exclaimed, still laughing.
"You know you deserved it"
"Yeah, yeah. Don't you have a deck to finish?"
Tommy turned and stepped toward the planking as Charlie's bemused eyes followed him back to the deck. Neither of them noticed Will. He watched them with an easy grin as he leaned against a deck post. He lifted his foot from the hose letting the water surge again as climbed up the deck steps to help Tommy.
The End
© Copyright PJ120, 08 August 2003
Reviews
Lori <peachesicu(at)aol(dot)com>
Well, I smiled when I read this entry. I found the idea a funny one. Wish the spanking had been a bit longer. I do not know the program or characters this is based on. There were some English problems but the main theme of the story still came through. I'm glad the author entered it and hope they will try their hand again at another story.
Trisha Allen <trishaallen(at)mindspring(dot)com>
Not what I expected at all. The playful slap, while the cement was hardening. While pouring cement, the men I have been around are anything but playful. Cement has a tendency to harden too fast, to the point it can't be smooth. Every muscle in most men's bodies throb and ache from the strain of pouring, as well as smoothing it. Perhaps they make men like Tommy but I sincerely doubt it at a time like that. So I think it's a bit unrealistic.
Pablo <pablo(dot)stubbs(at)newsguy(dot)com>
Ground Force seems such a spectacularly perfect subject for fan-fiction, I'm surprised I've not seen more. This sweet little story captures the tone of the programme and its cast so well that it's hard not to assume something like this actually happened pretty frequently. Lots of restraint shown here: just one smack for Charlie Given the size and strength of Tommy's thighs, it seems such a waste to not have his lap play a large part in the story. And how can there be a Ground Force story without Alan? But the feel of this story is exactly right. It's a fun, happy, sunny piece, and that's as it should be.