This short story is an entry in the 2003 Soc.Sexuality.Spanking Summer Short Story Contest and is copyright by the author and commercial use is prohibited without permission. Personal/private copies are permitted only if complete including the copyright notice. The author would appreciate your comments
Category: Period
The Pirate Jane
By
Bloody Jane Stewart's sword flashed in the light of the setting sun. Her rival, Saber Jim, was determined to be the victor of the battle. Both knew the loser would be left in a puddle of blood
"Give up! Yer no match fer me!" He sneered. He moved with lightning speed and she was unprepared. He cut through her sleeve, narrowly missing her arm
"Never!" she swore; she redoubled her efforts and beat him back. The sword flew from his hand and...
It was over
She prepared to end his life and claim his ship and booty. "You wouldn't!" he said, eyes fixed on her cutlass. She laughed; he cowered. "Oh yes...."
"JANE!!!!"
The pirate spun around, gasping in horror. It was her most formidable foe. The one she couldn't beat. Already tired from one fight, she knew she was done for. The sword slipped from suddenly numb fingers
"Young lady! You're an hour late. Just wait till we get home!" her mother lectured
"But mommmmma, we're havin' a battle!" little Jane said
"Don't give me that battle nonsense!" She landed a hard swat on Jane's thigh. "Get into the house...." she stopped and glared at the girl. "What have you done?" She shrieked. "Jane! You know Gramma's coming...how could you?" Her mother was dismayed. The child was filthy! And worse, the sleeve of her new dress was ripped
Who knew having a battle could be so messy? "I din't mean to momma," Jane said nervously
"Your gramma made you that dress and she expects you to wear it tonight. Oh Jane, what am I going to do with you," her mother sighed
"Um...I could take a bath..." Jane offered in a placating gesture; the tomboy hated baths
"I asked you not to get dirty, didn't I?" her mother demanded
"Uh-huh."
"I said be careful of your dress?" she pressed
"Uh-huh, but...my gold!"
"That's it! I've had enough of this pirate nonsense." Jane was spun around and spanked across the yard, and into the house, lectured all the way. "You go and get cleaned up right now...no, take that dress off here so I can try to wash it. I don't know what I'll do about that sleeve."
Efficiently stripped of her clothes and spanked some more, Jane ran up the stairs crying
Her mother put the dress in the wash and hurried upstairs, finding the child dawdling, avoiding the bath. Finally her mother seated herself on the toilet lid and pulled Jane across her knees for a spanking
The smacks stung, but it was over quickly and the sniveling young girl was put into the tub. Jane reached for the soap but her mother intercepted her. "No time for that! I'll do it," she insisted. She soaped the washcloth and scrubbed the child vigorously, spending plenty of time on a bottom already sore
Jane suffered on a sore seat during dinner and momma wouldn't excuse her until everyone had finished. Instead of dessert, she was sent to bed
That night she plotted her revenge. Saber Jim would pay for the indignities she had suffered
The End
© Copyright Kessily, 01 August 2003
Archivist's note: This story was originally posted and sent to the reviewers with the category not stated at the beginning in the usual fashion but at the end as child. It is now shown as period as she feel that it is more appropriate and does not give the twist away.
Reviews
Redhawk <redhawk(at)screaminet(dot)com>
This is an excellent story. I will admit I scrolled to find the category. I will also say though it ruined nothing. Also knowing that the story grew to nine hundred words and had to be significantly trimmed leads me to say that the editing skills of this author is very good. I'm thrilled to give this story my highest possible rating
Mary <Gemladi(at)aol(dot)com>
What a great story! I found it very entertaining, and had no idea until the surprise moment
came that this was in the child category. It was very well written and I would love as a reader to see what happens next to Jim and Jane
Pablo <pablo(dot)stubbs(at)newsguy(dot)com>
I had such a good time reading this. So much of it rings true about childhood. At least, if not true, then True. The cartoony switch from the fantasy play back to reality is an old trick, but used in a lovely way here, and the characters are drawn quickly and efficiently. The dialogue is great.
There's a somewhat utopian, golden glow to the path the narrative takes: a spanking and early bedtime fixes everything, wipes the slate clean, so that new mischief can be pursued the next day. It's a fantasy world, but, well, that's the point. A really nice piece.