This short story is an entry in the 2003 Soc.Sexuality.Spanking Summer Short Story Contest and is copyright by the author and commercial use is prohibited without permission. Personal/private copies are permitted only if complete including the copyright notice. The author would appreciate your comments
Category: Mini-saga
Miscalculation
By
Kingspan <Kingspan1@yahoo.com>
SWAT! SWAT! SWAT! SWAT! SWAT! SWAT!
"Learned your lesson, young lady?"
"Ow! Ooo... yes, sir!"
"What have you learned?"
"That no matter how cute an antique hairbrush looks in the consignment store, don't bring it home."
"No, seriously."
"Seriously! It hurts like hell on a bare bottom."
SWAT!
"Language."
"Oooo...."
The End
© Copyright Kingspan, 25 July 2003
Reviews
Ted <quixotoes(at)aol(dot)com>
I am not quite sure how to rate or critique a fifty-word prose piece, but since many of the words were «SWAT» and the action was focused and riveting, portraying a traditional and necessary spanking, I would recommend this. Oops, this review is now a word or two longer than the entry!
Pablo <pablo(dot)stubbs(at)newsguy(dot)com>
I've a fondness for stories told entirely in dialogue -- well, with the occasional sound-effect too -- and this is a very sweet and cute example, with a decidedly relevant moral to boot. That ebony hairbrush on eBay might not be quite so attractive in person as it is on the screen.
Ladiejj <ladiejj(at)msn(dot)com>
No one can go wrong with a smart ass comment like that. This was cute and the author did a good job of putting the essence of the scene in few words. It flowed well. Would have liked to have seen a few words about the spanking rather than just the word SWAT over and over, but I realize that is hard in such a short story. Very fun, it made me giggle. Oh yeah and showing how much hairbrushes suck is always a nice touch in a story.
Huh Chuh <huhchuh(at)yahoo(dot)com>
I like the way that her words say spank me more please. Great job!