This short story is an entry in the 2003 Soc.Sexuality.Spanking Summer Short Story Contest and is copyright by the author and commercial use is prohibited without permission. Personal/private copies are permitted only if complete including the copyright notice. The author would appreciate your comments
Category: Child
The Making of a Star
By
Y Lee Coyote <YLeeCoyote@juno.com>
By now Alvin was actually looking forward to the one and only performance of the play. After several weeks of back stage work at summer camp, he had gotten drafted to play the role of the spoiled brat in the weekly play. He had insisted that he play the brat as a BOY and NOT as a girl and the director reluctantly agreed. Then, just two days before the show the director had reneged about that and insisted that he play it as a girl. "Alvin, until recently only men played in the theater -- both male and female roles." he explained. "Beside you get more laughs this way."
He was pressured from all sides and so, there he was in a dress for the, excuse the pun, dress rehearsal on Friday. He got to do the all fun stuff; all but his favorite part. That was restricted for the real show as the curtain dropped.
Everything went fine with the entire camp watching on Saturday night. The play was drawing to a close and Alvin was having a ball being the girl brat tormenting the babysitter. He was high anticipating the finale.
And then it was time. He hefted the checker box in his right hand and the dominos in his left -- standing front and center on the stage said: "Checkers. And dominos. I'll bet that you can play an interesting game with them." [Dramatic pause.] "BUT FIRST THEY HAVE TO BE MIXED!" With that he joyously tossed everything into the air to a big roar of laughter from the crowd.
But the curtain did not come down as it had during the rehearsal. The babysitter moved forward and grabbed him in an iron grip. The babysitter was being played by Jason, one of the HUGE seniors. "I've warned you, Alice June Gordon what would happen if you continued to misbehave." Jason said in his strong baritone voice as he pulled Alice over to the chair.
"NO, NO, NO. Don't spank me." Alvin yelled. But he was helpless in the grip of the much stronger youth. The words were barely out of his mouth when he was over Jason's lap. He yelled and kicked to no avail. His dress was pulled up. His tighty-whities were exposed. He did not have time to realize what was about to happen.
Then in front of the entire camp, Jason yanked his briefs down exposing his butt to one and all. Then came the spanks. Real hard spanks. A plethora of real hard spanks.
He felt the pain in his butt. His cries were real. His briefs flew into the orchestra pit. The crowd roared their approval as the curtain finally -- mercifully -- came down.
Alvin wanted to die. Or at least crawl into a deep, dark hole.
But Jason stood him up and gripped his hand for the curtain call. There were still tears in his eyes but, mercifully, the dress fell back into place and covered his private and his now not-so-private burning and crimson parts.
The End
Author's note: There is a lot of fact in this story. Fortunately, things happened during a rehearsal rather than the actual performance and not so hard.
© Copyright A.I.L., 08 July 2003
Reviews
Ted <quixotoes(at)aol(dot)com>
This story's merit lies in its truth is stranger than fiction quality. There is a paucity of good m/m stories, and I would like to encourage them. However, as a short story, this one reads too much like an oral narrative, lacks verbal precision and is awkwardly constructed.
Warm Hand Jack
This is an amusing tale, not deep but interesting. It includes humiliation and considerable pain, and no comfort; yet it is far from being dark. I suppose this is because it is told whimsically, it is not an adult/child episode, it takes place in a fictionalized (stage) setting, and in the end Alvin is shown acceptance by Jason's forceful inclusion of him in the curtain call.
It's nicely developed, and, for the most part, clearly written, with some rather memorable images (such as the flying briefs). Even in the internal script, the justification for the spanking is credible, which helps to make the whole story credible. The author's note that it is based on a real incident adds weight to the reading, without weighing down the story itself. It's not meant to be either literary or (as far as I can tell) erotic; but it's good at being what it is: a light story with a sharp edge to it. Well done.
Patricia <patricia(at)cedar(dot)net>
At first, one gets the impression that Alvin's favorite part of the play is the spanking, but the way this story ends, you get the impression that he was not expecting the spanking at all. Overall, this story left me confused as to feelings and expectations of the characters. And the discussion of a boy playing the part of a girl, seemed to be extraneous to me. All in all, this story seemed to be missing cohesion.