This short story is an entry in the 2003 Soc.Sexuality.Spanking Summer Short Story Contest and is copyright by the author and commercial use is prohibited without permission. Personal/private copies are permitted only if complete including the copyright notice. The author would appreciate your comments
Category: Mini-saga.
Muna
By
Plierla Fesserla <PlierlaFesserla@hotmail.com>
Quietly arriving from school
Gingerly climbing the stairs
Nervously crawling onto the bed
Have I been heard?
Pillows forced under my tummy
Legs tickled as my skirt slides up
Panties pulled down, cool air rushes in
The routine so very familiar.
The cruel cane strikes
But, who, where and when?
The End
© Copyright Plierla Fesserla, 03 July 2003
Reviews
justacatfish(at)aol(dot)com
An interesting insight into a young woman's (or girl's) fantasy, nicely portrayed, as far as it went. Good opening lines, attention getting. Possibly further development would make this much better. Lots to build on here.
Kent Stoneking <kentls01(at)msn(dot)com>
I almost wish the author hadn't restricted hirself to the mini-saga limit, because this one raises more questions than it answers -- and that's not a bad thing! Why is the protagonist so afraid of being heard? Is the caning something that is happening, or something that (as the last line leads me to believe) she wishes would happen?
Even the name of the piece is a mystery. A search for Muna on Google produced results as diverse as the Muna Islands (part of Indonesia); Bachot Muna, an Afro-pop musician from Cameroon; Muna Lee, a feminist poet who lived from 1895 to 1965; and a site selling books on Maritime, Underwater, and Nautical Archaeology -- and that was just in the first ten (out of about 128,000)! Is one of these the Muna of the story? Or does the author mean some other Muna?
Stories that make one think are, as I said earlier, not a bad thing. A story that raises so many questions in fifty words is quite remarkable.
C_bear <teddybearbrat(at)cableone(dot)net>
How interesting and adorable, and a surprise ending that makes me wonder if it's something that she knew was coming, or if she got caught in her room like that and the cane was a total, if not quite unwelcome surprise for her either way it works, I can just see her, school skirt raised up and panties at her knees, or framing the little white bare bottom, and the angry red stripe from the cane and her look of shock.
Huh Chuh <huhchuh(at)yahoo(dot)com>
Wow. Amazing imagery. Wonderful mini-saga. I love the questioning and the anticipation and just everything here. What does the title Muna mean? I wonder if she is a sweet girl who is sometimes naughty or a naughty girl who is always naughty and sometimes more naughty than at other times. I can picture this entire story in my mind.
Great job!