This short story is an entry in the 2002 Soc.Sexuality.Spanking Summer Short Story Contest and is copyright by the author and commercial use is prohibited without permission. Personal/private copies are permitted only if complete including the copyright notice. The author would appreciate your comments
Category: First/Last Yes, that's right, a pair of fff/f stories from the Trickster with both in the First/Last category. Each part stands alone as SSC entry but I suggest that they be read in the given order. I don't think that it will be a surprise that both start with the same SSC line.
Tom, Becky and the Camcorder -- 1/2
By
Y Lee Coyote <YLeeCoyote@juno.com>
The next girl was Becky Thatcher. Tom was trembling from head to foot with excitement and a sense of the hopelessness of the situation. But it was not his hopelessness but that of Becky that made Tom's pulse and blood pressure soar even higher in anticipation. He had long since opened his jeans so that his cock would be free to rise up freely and enjoy as well. As the dominant girls rearranged themselves, Tom's mind flashed back to earlier this most memorable special day.
He did not know exactly what had happened for that was girl stuff. What mattered was that his big sister and her friends had gotten the best of their rivals and were making them submit as the forfeit. Tom and his sister, Joan, were very close and they both enthusiastically agreed that Becky Thatcher was the most despicable bit of scum in town. Becky's friends, Sue and Betty's main fault was that they liked Becky and without her they were welcome at Joan's parties.
Joan hadn't exactly asked Tom to hide in the garage loft with the camcorder but she had asked him to go out so that she would have the house to herself and friends. She even suggested (with a wink) that he take the cam and perhaps he could get some good bird shots on this clear day. Since they were little kids they both knew what a great view there was from the garage loft's window of her room. Tom had been disappointed many times because of the care with which his sister kept her blinds closed. Today they were pulled up and window was open. Tom wondered some about the new tapes with the cam. He had no doubts that she wanted him here today after all her hints.
Tom and the cam had carefully watched as Sue, Becky and Betty had stripped and knelt before their mistresses. He wished he could hear them surrender and hear the orders but all he could hear were the birds in the trees and the occasional car on the quiet street. He was glad that he had also brought his binoculars for he could get a high grade practical lesson in comparative anatomy of the teen human female with them.
The girls, three naked and three clothed, moved about. Sue was bent crosswise over the bed and Joan and her friends took turns paddling and strapping her butt. But the view was a little disappointing for Tom's side view was constantly obstructed by one or another of the girls. They could not have planned a better cock teasing setup.
Sue's paddling was now over and she was standing against the wall. Tom, his cock throbbing, carefully studied the next girl's form, particularly her full ass, as she was led to the foot of the bed.
The next girl was Becky Thatcher. Tom was trembling from head to foot with excitement and a sense of the hopelessness of the situation.
The End
© Copyright June 28, 2002
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Reviews
Frank <sswitcher(at)yahoo(dot)com>
The voyeurism adds spice to an already very sexy scenario of three saucy schoolgirls, naked, paddled and punished by their peers. Absolutely excellent use of a (IMO) very challenging first/last line. I do wonder, however, whether the two-part format is slightly bending the SSC rules - especially as the girl stuff leading up to Sue, Becky and Betty's current predicament would probably deserve a third part.
Needy Wench <needywench(at)hotmail(dot)com>
You've created a really nice set-up here, and I like the conversion of the Becky Thatcher and Tom characters to someone completely different than we're used to. It's unfortunate we have to judge these stories as stand alones, and I can't wait for the conclusion! It's about as unfulfilled as Tom must feel up in that loft!
Owen Williamson <ashthorn(at)maildulf(dot)com>
A neat little tease, this. The reader is left wondering what is going to happen later. It reads more like an extract from something longer, rather than being totally self-contained, but that doesn't really detract from it.
Sarah Nada <circler73(at)hotmail(dot)com>
I think this story might work better for me if the characters had different names. Since the girl is Becky Thatcher and the boy is Tom, I keep expecting them to act like their namesakes from Tom Sawyer. And while Becky is only seen from afar in this installment, Tom (who is front and center), seems more meanspirited and less in love with Becky than I remember him.
That said, the voyeuristic element of this story works beautifully. The relationship between Tom and his sister is interesting, and I like the fff/f setup. It brings a whole new meaning to the old saw about kids being cruel...