This short story is an entry in the 2002 Soc.Sexuality.Spanking Summer Short Story Contest and is copyright by the author and commercial use is prohibited without permission. Personal/private copies are permitted only if complete including the copyright notice. The author would appreciate your comments
Category: Adult
The Wrong Driver
By
The dishes were still in the sink. Some crusty. Others floating in chili bean slime. Still there since last week when Jenny went to visit her sister. And in the living room, Matlock was on.
"Oh, honey, you're back!" James dropped the remote on the coffee table and jumped up from the recliner. Jenny let him embrace her, but didn't return the hug. Just stood looking at the empty boxes that should be filled with the pictures and knick-knacks on the walls. That would be moving in two days. That he promised to pack while she was gone. "Oh, I missed you so much." He squeezed her close.
"Yeah? Well, it's probably good that I'm back then...Especially as those dishes need to be done." In a flat, tight voice. James blushed.
"I've been meaning to do those." Then he straightened up. "But you're not doing any dishes - the doctor said you're suppose to rest. And if you don't rest, I'll beat yer butt." Almost like he were taunting her...She rolled her eyes.
"Then do the damn dishes."
"Hey, don't take that tone with me, young lady, or I'll take you over my knee right now." He was half smiling, but she knew he would. Sigh.
"Fine. I'm gonna go lay down."
"Alright." He sat down and picked up the remote. "You did go to your doctor's appointment yesterday, right?"
"No..." Fuck! "With the whole thing with Mom, I totally forgot. But, it's just a routine blood test. No big deal to reschedule."
"I understand, but..." He put the remote down and stood up. "We made the rule. No skipping doctor's appointments"
"Oh c'mon, James. It was an honest mistake. Yesterday was crazy."
"I know, but doctor's appointments are important."
She was too tired to argue as he pulled her over his lap.
The sting was gone as Jenny laid in bed that night. But somehow, it bugged her. In a way that she wasn't sure why. Yes, she had agreed to the rule. It was a fair, necessary rule. And she liked rules. Structure. Discipline.
Yet, she also thought of the dishes, which he finally did after Matlock. The empty boxes, several of which he filled that evening. But only because she was home to make sure. To give him exact instructions. Like she did last month at the airport when she had to stay with him throughout the check-in process to be sure he didn't get into an argument with anyone that would keep him from his flight. Or had been trying to teach him to call the temp agencies early in the morning to get jobs. And to sound peppy on the phone.
She knew he liked taking care of her. Liked trying to provide the structure she craved. But...
"I don't want you to punish me anymore," she explained as he puzzled. Like being in a car with a driver who speeds excessively. Tailgates constantly. And is lost all the time...
The End
© Copyright Summer, 2002
Reviews
Abrat4you <abrat4you(at)aol(dot)com>
I liked the story...the writing was descriptive...I didn't however feel that he should be spanking anyone...he needed the spanking...so that was a problem for me...wimpy men are hard for me to see a the hero...or disciplinarian...and it ended to abruptly...I was waiting for more.
MollyB <mollyb(at)newsguy(dot)com>
Interesting and for a moment almost headed to edgy for me. Lots of good details. I =think= it's a happy ending though it's not a happy story. Nicely done.
Pablo Stubbs <Pablo.Stubbs(at)newsguy(dot)com>
I'm sure this story will resonate for anyone who's been part of a relationship in which real-life discipline is involved - either as a cautionary tale, or as an expression of the insecurities that I have a feeling most have. In the end, what seems mostly wrong with James is his lack of awareness - his lack of the insecurities and sensitivities which might make him aware of what's going wrong. It's not just a game. Much kudos to Natty for writing about complex, important, and seldom-discussed issues here, and not letting those overwhelm the storiness of the story. I'd say that one of James's problems is that he seems to have an image of a discipline relationship which comes straight from the words of a hopelessly idealised spanking story. This story cuts right through that. It would be a lucky James who got to read it.
Simon <srb(at)imrryr(dot)demon(dot)co(dot)uk>
A wonderfully bleak and realistic story. The two characters feel very real, and the nature of their relationship is extremely well conveyed. The tensions between the two characters are described excellently, and the short sharp sentences really show the woman's frustration. The author makes it really easy to imagine these people and their situation. An excellent little kitchen sink drama.