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* "Marissa's Promise" by Jonathan Dzoba (teen romance &
masturbation) 10, 8, 7
* "Marissa's Promise" by Jonathan Dzoba (jondz@ix.netcom.com). Marissa and Jonathan were teenage lovers. When Jonathan had to go away for two weeks, the two of them promised that neither would masturbate during the hiatus; that way they would be like matchbooks ready to explode when they finally got back together. To understand the magnitude of this promise, you have to realize that this period of abstinence followed a prolonged period of what football players call three-a-days: first kissing and teasing, then oral satisfaction (first him, then her), and finally lovemaking. How would you keep this kind of promise? You could try gardening, playing scrabble with your mother, writing letters to your boyfriend, studying school subjects more assiduously than usual, or hanging out with your old girlfriend. Would passion dwindle over time? Would your interests become diverted? You'll have to read the story to find out. I commend the author for showing restraint; the story involves none of the wham-bam climax stuff that an author would be tempted to work into this plot. It would have been easy for Julie to eat Marissa's pussy and bring her to a fabulous climax and for them to rationalize that this wasn't really breaking the deal - she would not actually have masturbated, and nobody had included sex with other members of the same gender as part of the bargain. I liked this story, but there's something lacking in it. The author has tried to be realistic; and I think the flaw is that he has been *too* realistic. The story reads like an actual description of something that really happened. Objective accuracy is important in anthropological studies, in police reports, and in biographies of non-politicians; but fiction writers are allowed to have a climax and denouement in their stories. I got the feeling that this author wanted to avoid a really insipid or simplistic ending, went out of his way to make the story seem realistic, and then couldn't think of a way to end it; and so he just stopped writing. Don't get me wrong. This is still a pretty good story. It has a lot of excellent sexual tension in it, and you may be more satisfied than I was with the level of realism and the ending. Speaking of realism, the real answer to the question of what to do during separations like the one in this story lies in two words: telephone sex. I've had some great fun when my husband has "reached out and touched me" late at night with Ma Bell's help or when I have done the same for him. "No fair!" you say. The plot requires that we be separated and incommunicado for two weeks. In that case, my advice is don't make deals like this. Such promises are good for fiction, but not for real life. Read alt.sex.stories and masturbate all you want for the first twelve days of his absence. Encourage him to do the same. Think of each other while you do it, and plan just how you're going to make each other happy. Purchase the blindfolds and the whipped cream. Abstain for the final two days. The explosive impact upon reunion will be as good as if you abstained for the entire two weeks, and you'll be spared all the frustration and temptation. Trust me. An angel appeared to me in my sleep and revealed this strategy to me. Ratings for "Marissa's Promise" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 8 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 7 -- |