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* "Sucker, Chapters 2 and 3" by BronwenSM (continued sex odyssey) 10, 10, 10 * "Sucker, chapters 2 and 3" by BronwenSM (bronwenSM@aol.com). Guest review by Mat Twassel. If you missed BronwenSM's "Sucker" a few months ago, don't make the same mistake this go 'round. It was Celeste's Best of the Month when it first appeared, and it's gotten even better thanks to two subsequent chapters, "Oh, Bugger," in which the now lovely Kim-but-Dim learns about bottom fucks, and "Revelations," in which Kim comes to discover passion's promises and rewards. Rollicking good-spirited fun! I hope this is not the ultimate climax. In Chapter I, if you remember, 17 year old Kim, suddenly big- breasted and incredibly beautiful, falls for some well-to-do boy's line that if she doesn't relieve his sexual urge the clotted blood will burst his brain... or something like that. Desperately afraid of babies, Kim uses her hands, and then her mouth, and finds she's good at it, and likes it, and is suddenly oh-so- popular! The girls don't like her much, but one can't have everything. In Chapter II, Kim tells us over lunch about her daddy's fall from power and rise to riches, which leads to Mummy's brush with polo and Kim's sudden education in anal sex at the hands and etcetera of Eddie the Greek. All along, Kim's narrational voice is rich with unintentional naughty puns and outrageous innocence. I don't really know how to take her, but she's deliciously sexy and so is the writing: So I was kneeling as if I was worshipping the sofa and thinking all these jumbled thoughts when all of a sudden I felt this presence at my arse. He was sort of looming - I could feel him rubbing the soft hot purply end of his dick up and down between my arse cheeks like a warm plum. His movements were slow and lingering, stopping completely for a moment every time he touched the actual hole itself. It was nice. It was very nice. I could actually feel my bum hole sort of yearning. It was trying to open outwards. And then he very gently pushed the round hot tip of his cock into my bum. I gasped and tried to relax, but I was grateful when he withdrew a little to let me adjust. It was a very sexy feeling, but a bit tense-making. I focused on letting him in, and maybe it would have all gone smoothly if he hadn't got impatient. I particularly like the "soft hot purply end": isn't it neat that the cock has color in Kim's mind even when it's out of sight? BronwenSm consistently amazes us with words--ordinary, rich, sometimes unexpected, always just right. Greek Eddie is, it turns out, a phony as well as a cad: after his most promising beginning he abuses Kim almost brutally, but for some reason Kim continues to let him use her bottom all through chapter two. Good old Uncle Barn, a college chum of Kim's dad, comes to the rescue in Chapter III. The ending, though not "exactly" Pride and Prejudicy, is certainly juicy. Reservations? Minor stuff, mostly. Chapter I, on its own, is awfully top-heavy--too much repetition concerning Kim's physical development and not enough development of character or plot... but with length this awkwardness smoothes out some. Similarly, we do seem to learn more about Kim's dad than the plot demands--maybe some of him appears more for word play and marginal satire than anything else. Much as I enjoy Kim's language, sometimes she talks too much instead of giving us scenes. And the rendering of action, often flowingly poetic--consider the passage above-- doesn't always reveal as much as it might: we learn what Kim thinks about getting fucked in the ass, for example, but we don't feel it with that deep intensity offered at onset. I wonder whether we really need that lunch to get us through chapter two... It's slightly confusing and serves no great purpose, as far as I can see. And finally, the narrator changes at the end of Chapter III--Kim could have handled the final scene just as well or better on her own. In short, there may be a few small structural issues and flaws, and maybe when this is all done, these will be mended. But Celeste, you're gonna hafta read this story: certainly it'll be a strong contender for best of the month. Ratings for "Sucker" {Added by Celeste} Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10