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"Portfolio Update" by Jeff Justice (photo-shoot sex). Myers: 8.5
"Portfolio Update" by Jeff Justice. Guest review by Dave Myers. This author has talent, let me say that up front. He also has an eye for details and for what is sexy. Perhaps the most interesting thing about this work is its ability to highlight the small touches without seeming clinical. With elements like narrating through a sequence when characters are downloading porno pics from the net, or the anxiety over going condomless with a very fertile woman, the author maintains credibility where many others have stumbled before. Synopsis: A woman from work asks for a man's help on a photo shoot. It's a simple enough idea that flies well, for the most part. The author drops into a few photo shoot cliches here and there, but not too destructively. There are, of course, some improvements that can be made to the story. The header indicates that this is a "grammar-revised" version. Well, it still needs MORE revision in that respect. There were at least half a dozen spelling and grammar errors I counted in the first half of the story, which is about where I stopped counting. The intergenerational aspect of the plot is unnecessary. It may have originally been intended to lead somewhere bigger, but "as is", it's just distracting and adds too much of a "dirty-old-man" air to the flavor. Rating: 8.5 |