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"The Artist" by Paris Waterman (seduction). Sven: 9.5, 10, 10
"The Artist" by Paris Waterman (the_panda@hotmail.com). Review by Sven the Elder, who may be contacted at Sven@brass-neck.demon.co.uk. Synopsis: Delicious seduction I loved this entwined tale. It's slightly different to the norm and delightfully appealing as a result. It's the description of a runway seduction from the lady's point of view, with her thoughts as to what's being done and what's happening to her. I have to say the sex is hot and well described. I particularly liked the ending. I did have two problems, I guess some automobiles in the US are a little larger than their English counterparts. As the scene progresses, a smaller model would have been a definite handicap. Just to digress slightly, I had a friend who carried out all his courting and seduction in an English Mini- minor. Small these most certainly are, built for sex they most certainly are not. He used to say it was a relief if the night was dry, at least one could open the windows and poke your feet outside. Conjures up an interesting picture! The second item has caused me to drop the points a little under technical marks. Celeste has pointed this out before and I would get my wrist slapped if I missed it. My dictionary definition is as follows (paraphrased in the interests of brevity): 'Areola - any circular spot, such as those round the nipple. Aureola - crown or aura of light round the head of a saint, or a halo round the sun.' Sorry but it is a basic error that has been dwelt upon in the past. I will be taking up the authors offer to visit his web site. Ratings for "The Artist" Athena (technical quality): 9.5 One glaring error. Venus (plot & character): 10 although short (a little over 2000 words) this was nicely dealt with and developed. Sven (appeal to reviewer): 10 A little 'strokish', but that is *not* a complaint. |