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* "Dyad" by Michael K. Smith (emerging adolescence)
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* "Dyad" by Michael K. Smith (mksmith@metronet.com) Holy shit! Right here on a.s.s. I found almost the exact words I had spoken barely a month ago to one of my daughters: "Well, I know this isn't what you want to hear, but hardly anyone these days actually marries the person they fall in love with when they're fifteen." Only I said "she's" instead of "they're," which is grammatically correct, and "sixteen" instead of "fifteen," which was chronologically correct. Either my husband wrote this story or my daughter did so, or my aphorism is actually common knowledge. I'll assume for now that the latter is the case. Since the author had my interest and my empathy, I became concerned when I read, "I knew I could trust him. I always could. I used to wish I was his age, that we had met in college or something. I would have married him in a minute! Actually, I sometimes still wish that." My reaction was, please, please don't go simple-minded and have the father fuck the little girl to "help her regain her self confidence." I breathed a sigh of relief as I read Dad's advice: "I just wanted to suggest that you don't have to be in a hurry to find a replacement for Joshua. You might want to just do things with your buddies for awhile or by yourself. Go out on some ordinary, friendly-type dates with no strings attached. I suspect you'll get interested in another special boy when you're ready for it." OK! A little later the girl comes home from a date with a new guy - a date with petting but without sex; and she unobservedly catches her mother and father making love. This makes her horny, but she doesn't jump into bed with them. OK! The story moved on to a father-daughter dinner at a restaurant, where she talks to him about sex and love, and he responds sensitively. On the way home she realizes she has made a decision to rid herself of her virginal status before morning and she is going to do it with the one male in the world whom she trusts absolutely - her father. I paused. Actually, this was a realistic emotion. Lots of girls have similar feelings, and not many of them are followed by "family fun." I hoped the author wouldn't take the simplistic route and have the old man help his little girl "grow up" and live happily ever after by jumping into with her. Several paragraphs later, after she had first finished her homework, the daughter put on her sexiest nightie and went downstairs to seduce Daddy while they watched TV together. While the fantasy in the preceding paragraph is extremely prevalent in families with non-asshole fathers, the actual attempt at seduction is NOT all that common. I wasn't sure what was going to happen, but I paused to wonder what my husband would do if our daughter made a move on him. The kid was basically saying, "You're a wonderful man, and I love you and want to share my first sexual experience with you." I would not expect my husband to call his daughter a dirty pervert, but I would also expect him to do something other than fuck her. I think he would probably get a hard-on, but then he would gently but firmly push her away, thank her for the wonderful compliment, and then have a heart-to-heart talk with her. The talk would be designed to convince her that she is a good and wonderful person who has a lot to offer to someone in her life but that HE would not be that someone, even though he loved her and found her to be extremely attractive, because he already had an exclusive sexual relationship with someone else (c'est moi) and because the father-daughter relationship is based on a different type of love. I would hope that he would be very sensitive about how he expressed himself and that he would make sure he didn't give her a feeling of being rejected. I would also hope that he would discuss the matter with me later and that he would sublimate his sexual passion by fucking my brains out. Actually, I recall a song by Fred Rogers (of "Mr. Rogers' Neighborhood"), which is directed to a little boy who has told his mother that he's going to marry her when he grows up. {Even in "normal" families, little boys are likely to say this. They do so because they really like their mothers and/or because they want to grow up to be like their fathers.} Mr. Rogers responds in his eloquent song with neat lines like "I'm already married, already married; married to your Dad" and assures the child that someday he may marry someone like her. This kiddie song essentially says the same thing that I said in the previous paragraph. You don't think.... No! Fred Rogers simply cannot be posting stories under a false name on this newsgroup. By the way, I think the song is on the same casette as "You Can Never Go Down the Drain." I miss Mr. Rogers and the Gang from Sesame Street! Back to the story. I'm not going to tell you what the father and daughter do in the story. The possibilities range from doing it my way to joining the Incest Club to something in between. You'll have to read the story to see what the author decided. Of course, you could try to guess the ending from my ratings; but hey, I'm broadminded enough to give a high rating to a good story that doesn't do things my way. Ratings for "Dyad" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 10 Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10 |