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"An Early Morning" by Diana Svensson (oral sex). BillyG: 9, 6, 8
"An Early Morning" by Diana Svensson (diana_svensson@yahoo.com) Guest Review by BillyG (hayden@mindless.com) --- I'd previously read Diana Svensson's first offering, "The Sad Lad." That effort was an enigmatic one, darkly mysterious, and when I "got it," startling and horrific in its ending. "An Early Morning," her second effort, stays well away from erotic horror and while somewhat more fleshed out, remains more an erotic scene than a story. Meeting her boyfriend in the kitchen, she's turned on by his classic good looks and teases him, pulling his boxer shorts down, which understandably produces the expected result. Aroused, she takes him into her mouth and he responds as most viral young men do, slowly growing erect. Breakfast forgotten, she fellates him to orgasm, accepting his ejaculate as a "precious reward." I believe it was Diana's intention to write a little piece about the sweetness of erotic feelings and their sensual mood more than a conventional story with characters and a plot. It didn't quite make it, largely that it was too brief and perhaps more descriptive than dwelling in the mood. It moved right up to and then stopped a tad short. Still, I commend her attempt, for it's an early effort, written in a second language and definitely shows promise. I'd urge her to write more, for in my personal correspondence with her, it's clear she has a delightfully fertile mind. Ratings for "An Early Morning" Athena (technical quality): 9 (a few minor grammatical errors) Venus (plot & character): 6 (it suffers from lack of plot) BillyG (appeal to reviewer): 8 (still it was sweet) |