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"A Dip in the Lake" by Trisnics (sex on the beach). Dart: 4, 4, 4
"A Dip in the Lake" by Trisnics (trisnics@hotmail.com). Guest review by Dart. --- A young couple, man and woman, are spending the summer touring national parks before returning to college in the fall. After a morning of hiking, he wants to go biking and she wants to go to the beach. So, after making plans to meet for dinner, they separate in order that each may pursue their favored activity. She's on the beach reading when she's approached by a beautiful woman. A woman with great taste in literature, since she had just finished reading the book the narrator is three-quarters of the way through. They bond quickly, and soon they're in the water having a delightful sexual experience. However, their watery location does inhibit eating, so they swim out to a vacant diving- platform in order to indulge their desire to become more intimately acquainted. They're back on the beach and getting dressed when the narrator realizes she has to rush to make her dinner engagement. Needless to say, she invites her new friend to accompany her, and, not surprisingly, her new friend accepts the invitation. It was, we are told by the narrator, the best evening of her vacation. I didn't especially care for this story. The plot was reasonable, but it needed more flesh, more detail, and the characters had, for me, no reality. Also, it would have been thoughtful of the writer, if he would have reread the story, at least once, with the help of a spell-checker. Ratings for "A Dip in the Lake" Athena (technical quality): 4 Venus (plot & character): 4 Dart (appeal to reviewer): 4 |