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"The Shed" by The Big T (voyeurism). Nick: 9, 10, 9
"The Shed" by The Big T (gthomas@rocketmail.com). Review by Nick e-mail Nick@cassandra.demon.co.uk. --- out her washing at the same age as the boy in this story (11). Since this was the short skirt era (it still is, I suppose), I was treated to a good view of her "equipment" as she bent to retrieve washing from the basket. Although she was wearing panties, the folds, shapes and structures were all discernible, and it was the first time I'd ever seen a mature female in this way! I was fascinated and.... ...but I digress (Well? Celeste has been known to do it, so why shouldn't I!) This is a story about an 11-year-old boy who finds himself in a position to observe the girl next door through binoculars. In so doing he discovers for the first time the pleasures of sexual arousal at the forbidden sight of the female form. The writer tells us it's fictional, but it's certainly written in the style of someone who knows what he's talking about, and of course that's what gives it its quality. For me, though, it didn't quite capture the atmosphere of his discovery, although a good attempt was made. Perhaps too much emphasis was placed on what he was seeing, rather than the effect on him. My ratings for this are: Technique 8 Well written, but maybe the writer needs to have a look at what he is trying to achieve. Plot and Character 8 Good, the mother and the boys reaction to her were well-drawn. Appeal to me 9. Adjusting for Celeste Athena (Technique) 9 Venus (Plot and character) 10 Appeal 9 |