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"Wandering Around Campus" by Young Lecher (sex by a lake)
8, 5, 5
"Wandering Around Campus" by Young Lecher (nobody@REPLAY.COM). Guest review by Wherryman. This story, of an MFF encounter by a lake, was not to my taste on several counts. The style seemed very jerky, and I found the language unappealing - "I gave Julie's dugs a tug", for example. Finally although it's only a four-page story, page one seems wasted, introducing characters who immediately drift out of the story but don't do anything for plot or character development. Overall my comments possibly make it sound worse than it is. Read it by all means, but I wouldn't go hunting for it specially. Rating for Wandering Around Campus: Technical merit 8 Plot & character 5 Appeal to reviewer 5 |