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"Sweets Stories: Shower Part 1" by Sweets1140 (multiple shower
masturbation). BillyG: 6, 6, 5
"Sweets Stories: Shower Part 1" (sweets1140@aol.com). Guest Review by BillyG (hayden@mindless.com). --- "Shower Part 1" suffers on several counts, most notably that it's an immature story, poorly written with poor grammar. Three gardeners, Tom, Dick and Harry - a son, his father and his grandfather - are offered repeated weekly views of a woman masturbating in her shower. In turn, this provides the stimulation for them to do the same. That's it. At times the story has the appearance as one written by someone who has English as a second language. Still, the flavor of it would be enhanced simply by cleaning up the grammar and punctuation marks for starters. The inherent limitation of voyeurism serves to keep people at a distance from each other, physically as well as emotionally. That distance is operative in this story to a fault. Ratings for "Sweets Stories: Shower Part 1" Athena (technical quality): 6 Venus (plot & character): 6 BillyG (appeal to reviewer): 5 |