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"A Fox In Sheep's Clothing" by Early6 (adolescent fantasy).
LeAnna:8, 3, 6
"A Fox In Sheep's Clothing" by Early6 (early6@yahoo.com). Guest review by LeAnna. This means _only_ my personal opinion, nothing more. Basic synopsis: Boy meets girl around school. Boy pops a boner every time he sees girl. Girl starts touching him and inviting him... This is one of these stories that had me saying, "yeah, right" the entire time. I don't mean to be rude; but in the world of fantasy, you should be able to accept even the outrageous. I have a feeling that the author of this story is a 50-year old with a penchant for schoolgirls, or a schoolboy who wrote out this lurid fantasy spurred by short-skirted babes. In any case, it felt unrealistically lopsided. This accounts for low plot/character score. Technically, it wasn't the best, but I didn't find myself distracted by many errors on casual read. A closer examination would probably reveal more mistakes, however, the casual, first read is what counts the most for me. As for appeal -- the score is indeed low because it didn't appeal to me. The story didn't present a fresh view in my mind like a good story should, and the sex did not stimulate me. But -- that's the bad news. The good news is: This is obviously a honest effort at a story, and the descriptions are lush. I love descriptions that I can devour like chocolate, and these are it. I applaud the author's descriptions and if s/he feels inclined to write another story with a better plot line, I would probably welcome it with open arms. My prior prejudice toward unrealistic schoolgirl stories is what dragged it down the most for me, even though I tried to be impartial. That is what took LeAnna score up from 2 -- the descriptions. If nothing else, read this story to listen how our flowery schoolboy describes things. Ratings for "A Fox In Sheep's Clothing" Athena (technical quality): 8 Venus (plot and character): 3 LeAnna (appeal to reviewer):6 |