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"Warren" by Paris Waterman (philandering). Sven: 10, 9, 9
"Warren" by Paris Waterman" (the_panda@hotmail.com) Review by Sven the Elder, who may be contacted at Sven@brass-neck.demon.co.uk Before I comment on the story, I have a minor question to raise on a point of grammar that bothers me a little. Perhaps Celeste might insert a sort of 'Ed Note' if she sees fit. I have come across the following phrase in this story - and I quote: 'She wore a simple black cotton dress that reached nearly to her feet and fit at the waist in a way that made it quite clear she had special charms hidden beneath it.' The word that bothers me in this context is "fit" in that on this side of the pond we would use the construction or tense as "fitted". Now I have noticed this same tense or construction used in stories by other writers from the US and I wonder is it a more common usage or is it *really* an incorrect form - I ask purely as I don't know the usage Stateside. Readers of this review should be aware that I have not deducted anything for its appearance. {Celestial note: A large number of short words that end in t or d add the -ed to form the past or past participle in England but not in the States. My advice is, when in doubt, check a dictionary. Also, when in Rome (Georgia), talk the way the Romans do.} Now on with the story. Warren, we are told, is the Male lead in the story who is a philandering son of a ... who has to have a new woman every night. There is a soliloquy, the author's word on his problems and needs. Part one, of what looks like it could become a series, follows. Given that this is a lifestyle that is perhaps unwise for more than one reason, this is a hot story. The seduction sequence is well written, although at one point the plot was written almost in the vein of a MC story. In fact the codes on the header of the first part are simply MF without further amplification. Technical quality, other than my query above, appears to be good; it certainly did not get in my way when I was reading the story, which I enjoyed. A note to end on. Celeste sent me part one, which, as it is a complete story. I am happy to break my usual rule of being unwilling to review without being able to read the completed item. A comment that part 2 had been posted allowed me to check it out and find that indeed the stories, although part of a sequence, can be read individually without detriment. Ratings for "Warren" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 9 Sven (appeal to reviewer): 9 |