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"Ann" by Sven Telsic (old/young romance). Tooshoes: 7, 8, 7
"Ann" by Sven Telsic (cail-@avara.com). Guest review by Tooshoes. "Ann" is a story about a young man of 17 who loses his cherry to an older, married woman. There isn't much of a plot. The emphasis is on feelings and impressions. The boy/man is waiting for his lover to arrive; and when she does, they have sweet passionate sex that the young man will probably remember for the rest of his life, and that makes the older woman feel young and free again. I like the idea of this story, but the execution is inconsistent. Some thoughts are very well expressed, especially the description of the orgasm near the end. Others thoughts are expressed awkwardly. For example, when the man is undressing his lover, it's described this way: "He slid his hand down Ann's back and pulled her sweater out from under her belt; slipping it off was like skinning a cat. She was sweating bullets underneath, and her breasts - medium-sized and perky - were bright red with blood. He began to undo her belt, his hands probing her vaginal area almost unconsciously - when she whispered in his ear 'wait'. " Maybe it's just a matter of taste, but skinning a cat and sweating bullets aren't my first choices in erotic analogies. But much of the imagery and writing does work, and the ending is strong, so I'm giving "Ann" a mixed review. Ratings for "Ann" Technique: 7 Plot and character: 8 General appeal: 7 |