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"Kelly's Vacation Adventure" by Yarblack (group bdsm)
Nick: 3, 5, 5
"Kelly's Vacation Adventure" by Yarblack (yarblack@aol.com). Review by Nick (e-mail Nick@cassandra.demon.co.uk) The story goes roughly like this. Husband and wife meet policewoman who tells them of two of her sexual encounters - one straight (but messy) the other lesbian. Wife then relates story of how she and female friend tie husband up and then bonk each other rigid. Cut to what is laughingly called "real life" and now policewoman cuffs wife while screwing husband, then sees to wife while husband sleeps. Finally husband watches wife have sex with policewoman's colleague who happens to have an extremely large dick. Yarblack took the time it took for him to write what came out at 11 pages on 10pt Tms Roman on A4. He should either have spent considerably more or not invested the time he did. I'm sorry I have nothing nice to say about this one. My own ratings are: Technique 1 (I doubt it was even reread by the author before publishing, let alone proofread) Plot and character 2 (these were soulless mannequins and there was no plot worth discussing) Appeal to me 2 (I did get a "soft-on" when my concentration wandered onto something else while reading it). I'll be generous when making the adjustment for Celeste, since I can appreciate that this might appeal to some teenagers. Athena (Technique) 3 Venus (Plot and character) 5 General appeal 5 |