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"Amanda" by Grimalkin. [This story is unarchived and is now officially lost to history] "Amanda" by Grimalkin. [This story is unarchived and is now officially lost to history] (This is one of a series of stories being reposted by THC Adult Text Archive under the title AMANDA.TXT.) As an English teacher, I sometimes feel self- conscious when I criticize a story for bad punctuation and grammar. It should be the idea that counts; not the formatting. But if a writer is going to formally publish something, he or she should make it easy on the reader. I realize that the Internet is not the most formal medium of publication, but if it's worth someone else's time to read a story, then it should be worth taking the time to clean it up or have someone else do so before publication. If bad grammar makes a point, then it's OK. So, I have to ask myself, is there some benefit in the apparent illiterate writing style of this author? The story is about a female friend (an attendant, I think), who is in the room with Amanda, an actress who has given her opening performance and is waiting for the first reviews to appear in the early editions of the newspapers. While they're waiting, the unnamed friend jacks Amanda off. Then the reviews arrive, and they are good. That's the whole story. Is the friend supposed to be an unschooled but loving companion who "just don't talk to good"? If so, this is never stated or even clearly implied. Or is this story the first written expression of an inarticulate but loving person? If so, it deserves some respect. Or does the writer just not give a damn? I'm afraid this is the most likely explanation. As a story, it's really pretty bland - just formulistic lesbian love. Big whoop! (Rating: 2).