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"Two Days" By Jan Williams (Rustic Sex) Sven: 10, 9, 9
"Two Days" By Jan Williams (janwill89@hotmail.com). Review by Sven the Elder who may be contacted at Sven@brass-neck.demon.co.uk. The synopsis for this story is quite straightforward - two adults, who have only just met, decide to got to a cabin retreat and explore each other sexually. Now that is the bald basic statement of this story. Factually they fuck each other's brains out for two days and (by my word processor's count,) a tad over 27,000 words and 36 pages, at the end of which they have decided to get married. After this description I end up struggling a little. The sex was very hot, extremely well described, and a little after the fashion of Miss Manners:"You lift your left leg up and then place part a into slot b." I hate to be negative about something this good, and to which so much work and effort has gone into, punctuation, grammar, and presentation (after a little tidying up) are great. The descriptions are great, if a little on the clinical side. But there really is not a lot on the plot development side. And sex, sex, and more sex gets boring. There is also a little thing called recovery time - oh and pain (friction burns!) Not that long ago I was lucky enough to take someone near and dear to me away for the weekend, it was our first weekend away, alone together, for a considerable number of years. Sure we had great sex, and, due to the lack of distractions, more of it than for many a long year; BUT we did other things as well. That's what made the weekend interesting for us. A similar plot in this tale woud have made the telling much more interesting for the reader as well. Finally, I'm left with the observation that there is more to marriage than sex. Sure great sex helps, but you have to be compatible in other ways as well. That would have been yet another facit of the story to be explored. So where does that leave us as a final mark and anlaysis. Well the technical quality was very high. With the one observation that the line length needed to be shorter to avoid enforced wrap-round, which is difficult to read - 65 - 70 character widths seem to work well, Athena scores a ten. As I have remarked earlier the plot is sadly lacking, but there is a theme of different sexual positions and techniques, almost to the point of this being a *good* sex primer for a couple who wanted to improve their technique. This will score a nine. I did initially score an eight, but felt that that was unfair. Now the vexed question of appeal to the reviewer. As always it should be stressed that this is the appeal to *me*, and can be that and that only. I can only say that I got a little bored by the lack of interest other than sexual variation. Just a little too like a sex manual. Again a nine. Ratings for "Two Days" Athena (technical quality): 10 Venus (plot & character): 9 Sven (appeal to reviewer): 9 |