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"A Fourth for Bridge" by Jan Williams (Card Sharks) DG: 6, 4, 4
"A Fourth for Bridge" by Jan Williams (janwill89@hotmail.com). Guest review by DG. The author states that this is his first attempt at writing erotic fiction; and, unfortunately, it shows. This story is about a group of four married couples who decide to liven things up by engaging in group sex. There are a few things to like about the story, I suppose. It's the women who take the initiative; they hatch the plan for the big orgy during their weekly bridge game, which makes a nice exception to the normal pattern of the men talking the women into it. They all have a good time getting their orifices filled, and no one gets hurt. Unfortunately, the story has serious problems which prevented me from enjoying it. There is no characterization at all, or even physical description; so there is really no way to tell the characters apart. The sex scenes are confusing and repetitive, with each woman getting gangbanged in the same way by the four men, one after the other. The confusion is exacerbated by overly-long sentences and a lack of spacing between dialogue and exposition. My recommendation to the author would be to write a story with fewer characters and to try to make those characters seem vivid and real. Ratings for "A Fourth for Bridge" Athena (technical quality): 6 Venus (plot & character): 4 DG (appeal to reviewer): 4 |