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"Andrew and Tina" by Dream Spinner (Brotherly Love)
Sven: 8, 9, 8
"Andrew and Tina" by Dream Spinner (authorsix@hotmail.com). Review by Sven the Elder, who may be contacted at Sven@brass-neck.demon.co.uk. (Bi, incest, masturbation, t/t) so say's the author, he also tells us at the end that: and I quote: "J.O. Dickingson - Author's note: This is a true event that occurred in May, 1998, as related to me by Andrew and posted with his permission." The story relates to an event where the young people concerned are involved in a 'walk-in masturbatory 'incident'. I tend to follow the precept that Bronwen mentioned recently in an assd discussion. Both of the participants are clearly 'under age', but this is not a pedo story, rather an incident between siblings who are growing up and finding their sexuality. I suspect it happens more than people realise. Regrettably nothing of this nature ever happened to me. Now to the actual writing. I have to say that I found this a rather unsatisfying re-telling of what, for the co-conspirators, appears to have been very satisfying. For my tastes the descriptions, using the Celestial 'List of Credulous Assumptions' as a guide, spoilt things. There are more satisfying descriptions that a writer can use that are also more pleasing for the reader to read. One of the secrets of writing erotica is to leave room in the readerss heads to conjure up images to suit their own imaginations. How many times have you read a superb book, then gone to see a subsequent film 'based' on the same story, that fails to measure up. Principally because your personal imagery conjured up is not the same as the film Directors. As a reader you peruse a passage, conjure an image in your mind - too much of a certain style of detail in the written work holds this process back. Sorry Jay - this just missed for me. Ratings for "Andrew and Tina" Athena (technical quality): 8 - a good solid average story - nothing outstanding Venus (plot & character): 9 - better than average development. Sven (appeal to reviewer): 8 - a little too clinical and stilted for my tastes. |